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Literary Challenge #53 Discussion Thread

pwebranflakespwebranflakes Member Posts: 7,741
edited November 2013 in Ten Forward
Literary Challenge #53 : The Gateway
This is the comments thread for Literary Challenge #53 : The Gateway.
We also have an Index of previous challenges HERE.

Feel free to link directly to the entry you are commenting on. And please remember: we're not here to tear each other up. Do not troll your fellow Captains, give feedback! Let the others know what you liked and disliked. Maybe they can even go back then and tweak their entries!

Let's get those creative juices flowing! :cool:
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  • takeshi6takeshi6 Member Posts: 752 Arc User
    edited October 2013
    pwebranflakes wrote: »
    This is the comments thread for Literary Challenge #53 : The Gateway.
    We also have an Index of previous challenges HERE.

    Feel free to link directly to the entry you are commenting on. And please remember: we're not here to tear each other up. Do not troll your fellow Captains, give feedback! Let the others know what you liked and disliked. Maybe they can even go back then and tweak their entries!

    Let's get those creative juices flowing! :cool:

    Interesting. :)

    I'll see if I can come up with something for this one. :D
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  • zidanetribalzidanetribal Member Posts: 220 Arc User
    edited October 2013
    I'll have to take a look at the FE before I can start writing.
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  • marcusdkanemarcusdkane Member Posts: 7,439 Arc User
    edited October 2013
    I'm not doing anything major for this, there's too much which could happen, but please enjoy The Road to Hell.

    For ease of reference/visualization, here're the actors I would cast if I was filming this tomorrow...

    Amanda Palmer - Courteney Cox
    T'Natra - Gal Gadot
    Selya Chirk - Angelina Jolie
    I'K'rR'h - Miley Cyrus
    Jac Cheliss - Timothy Dalton
    Brandon Mayer - Jason Lewis
    S'rR's Kane - Amy Smart
    Claire - Lacey Chabert
  • knightraider6knightraider6 Member Posts: 396 Arc User
    edited October 2013
    marcusdkane wrote: »
    I'm not doing anything major for this, there's too much which could happen, but please enjoy The Road to Hell.

    For ease of reference/visualization, here're the actors I would cast if I was filming this tomorrow...

    Amanda Palmer - Courteney Cox
    T'Natra - Gal Gadot
    Selya Chirk - Angelina Jolie
    I'K'rR'h - Miley Cyrus
    Jac Cheliss - Timothy Dalton

    I enjoyed it, and picked up the ball and went a few more yards with it ^.^
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  • drajoradrajora Member Posts: 0 Arc User
    edited October 2013
    Kind of suspected this topic was coming, so had a story pretty much ready to go. Just required a bit of minor tweaking.

    We're back with Captain Persico of the USS Talon for this one.
    I hope to finish the cliffhanger mystery I left Captain Bh'ypiv on, but that might have to wait for another Freestyle or Redux challenge.

    Please have a look and let me know what you think. I'm trying a new method of fast-planning my stories and I feel this one might come across as a bit rushed.
  • grylakgrylak Member Posts: 1,594 Arc User
    edited October 2013
    I have an idea for this one. It'll involve Admiral Grylak, the guy who gives orders in my foundry missions, though he's never really been seen or doing anything outside my head. But this is exactly the kind of situation Grylak responds to. However.... I have not done any of the Romulan rep, and as such, I know nothing about this gateway. Could someone give me the rundown of the situation so I know what I'm writing into?

    And who are these Dewans I hear mention of?
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  • marcusdkanemarcusdkane Member Posts: 7,439 Arc User
    edited October 2013
    knightraider6 wrote: »
    I enjoyed it, and picked up the ball and went a few more yards with it ^.^

    Very nice :cool: Can't wait to see who picks up the ball next :cool:
  • marcusdkanemarcusdkane Member Posts: 7,439 Arc User
    edited October 2013
    drajora wrote: »
    Kind of suspected this topic was coming, so had a story pretty much ready to go. Just required a bit of minor tweaking.

    We're back with Captain Persico of the USS Talon for this one.
    I hope to finish the cliffhanger mystery I left Captain Bh'ypiv on, but that might have to wait for another Freestyle or Redux challenge.

    Please have a look and let me know what you think. I'm trying a new method of fast-planning my stories and I feel this one might come across as a bit rushed.

    I wouldn't've said it came across as rushed at all, it was a really solid entry :cool: I'm really liking Selene's style :cool:
  • ironphoenix113ironphoenix113 Member Posts: 0 Arc User
    edited October 2013
    grylak wrote: »
    I have an idea for this one. It'll involve Admiral Grylak, the guy who gives orders in my foundry missions, though he's never really been seen or doing anything outside my head. But this is exactly the kind of situation Grylak responds to. However.... I have not done any of the Romulan rep, and as such, I know nothing about this gateway. Could someone give me the rundown of the situation so I know what I'm writing into?

    And who are these Dewans I hear mention of?

    Basically, the situation is that, while exploring a set of underground ruins on New Romulus, you and your bridge crew find a massive geothermal plant used by the previous inhabitants of the planet. That is at T4 rep. At T5, you repeat the same mission, only this time, at the end, you get a cutscene of the gateway rising from a set of hidden floor panels.

    The Dewans are the previous inhabitants of Dewa III (which is now known as New Romulus (or Mol'Rihan)) who went extinct shortly after activating the Geothermal plant because the plant wnet out of control and caused the massive cataclysm that resulted in New Romulus not being habitable until very recently.

    Hope this helps!
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  • cmdrscarletcmdrscarlet Member Posts: 5,137 Arc User
    edited October 2013
    ironphoenix113 wrote: »
    Basically, the situation is that, while exploring a set of underground ruins on New Romulus, you and your bridge crew find a massive geothermal plant used by the previous inhabitants of the planet. That is at T4 rep. At T5, you repeat the same mission, only this time, at the end, you get a cutscene of the gateway rising from a set of hidden floor panels.

    The Dewans are the previous inhabitants of Dewa III (which is now known as New Romulus (or Mol'Rihan)) who went extinct shortly after activating the Geothermal plant because the plant wnet out of control and caused the massive cataclysm that resulted in New Romulus not being habitable until very recently.

    Hope this helps!

    Ahh. THIS is what I needed. I have yet to step foot on New Romulus in-game so I have (had) no idea what the story is. By chance, are there any other resources I can use?

    I'm thinking reading the walkthrough of the New Romulus mission from the wiki, but I'm also thinking ironphoenix may have summed them all up :P
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  • grylakgrylak Member Posts: 1,594 Arc User
    edited October 2013
    That helps immensely and fills in my one big question of how to do my plot. Thanks Ironphoenix.

    Just another quick question: Is that plant active again? Or is it still dormant? Do we have any details about how the plant made the world uninhabitable all that time ago?
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  • ironphoenix113ironphoenix113 Member Posts: 0 Arc User
    edited October 2013
    @cmdrscarlet:

    No problem! Always happy to help out :D

    @grylak:

    I do believe the Romulans reactivated the plant, after putting into place some saftey measures so that they don't suffer the same fate the Dewans did. Not entirely sure on that point, though I believe Dev Blog 11 has some more info.
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  • grylakgrylak Member Posts: 1,594 Arc User
    edited October 2013
    Ta very much. I now have a very nice little plot all planned out for this one. Now.... could I work in one of my Sentinel crewmembers? We shall see.
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  • marcusdkanemarcusdkane Member Posts: 7,439 Arc User
    edited October 2013
    @ cmdrscarlet: Nice continuation :cool: I'm really keen to see what comes of D'Tan's shenanigans :cool:
  • takeshi6takeshi6 Member Posts: 752 Arc User
    edited October 2013
    I have my own entry ready to go, but I'm waiting for some feedback from patrick and sander before posting it (already gotten feedback from knightraider). :)

    In other news, Sphere of Influence actually seems to be up a day early - and it's rather interesting.
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  • marcusdkanemarcusdkane Member Posts: 7,439 Arc User
    edited October 2013
    takeshi6 wrote: »
    I have my own entry ready to go, but I'm waiting for some feedback from patrick and sander before posting it (already gotten feedback from knightraider). :)

    In other news, Sphere of Influence actually seems to be up a day early - and it's rather interesting.

    Looking forward to reading it :cool:
  • raventomoeraventomoe Member Posts: 723 Arc User
    edited October 2013
    Posted for myself. A new and possible part of the Lyrical Trek setting. Hope you all enjoy it.

    Oh and yes, Robin Harlen and Hayate Yagami are shipped together. They do become quite the battle couple.
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  • keepcalmkeepcalm Member Posts: 0 Arc User
    edited October 2013
    And threw in my response. Been a while since I did one of these, I know.
    Also, new characters. One I made shortly before the Risian event to take full advantage of the costumes and ship from that.
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  • takeshi6takeshi6 Member Posts: 752 Arc User
    edited October 2013
    raventomoe wrote: »
    Posted for myself. A new and possible part of the Lyrical Trek setting. Hope you all enjoy it.

    Oh and yes, Robin Harlen and Hayate Yagami are shipped together. They do become quite the battle couple.

    Very nice. :)

    How soon until you can get your Lyrical Trek saga started for real? I'd like to see how you get the two franchises to work together, as opposed to me, who simply tweaks the Nanoha characters to create local versions in Trek that fit. :D
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  • raventomoeraventomoe Member Posts: 723 Arc User
    edited October 2013
    takeshi6 wrote: »
    Very nice. :)

    How soon until you can get your Lyrical Trek saga started for real? I'd like to see how you get the two franchises to work together, as opposed to me, who simply tweaks the Nanoha characters to create local versions in Trek that fit. :D

    I actually posted a thread for it on that a few weeks ago. I do have a few sticking points that I am ironing out and the hardest bit is writing the opening two chapters as I am having to cross-reference both Star Trek and Lyrical Nanoha's canons and physics (ever tried to figure out what can cause TSAB tech to malfunction?) Believe me, not easy to get the pieces to fit but I am getting there and once I get into that, I should be able to do the first Arc up to Hotel Augusta with little issue.

    That said, I also got done with playing the mission and whoo boy...it gave me some really nasty ideas for the gang. :D

    Also, still need a piece of coverart. Anyone want to take on the challenge for me?
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  • marcusdkanemarcusdkane Member Posts: 7,439 Arc User
    edited October 2013
    raventomoe wrote: »
    Posted for myself. A new and possible part of the Lyrical Trek setting. Hope you all enjoy it.

    Oh and yes, Robin Harlen and Hayate Yagami are shipped together. They do become quite the battle couple.

    Very nice, definitely looking forward to how the setting progresses :cool:
  • marcusdkanemarcusdkane Member Posts: 7,439 Arc User
    edited October 2013
    keepcalm wrote: »
    And threw in my response. Been a while since I did one of these, I know.
    Also, new characters. One I made shortly before the Risian event to take full advantage of the costumes and ship from that.

    Very nice :cool: Edosians? Barsoom Tharks?
  • marcusdkanemarcusdkane Member Posts: 7,439 Arc User
    edited October 2013
    @ yuzral: Fantastic entry :cool: Clearly a captain who knows their stuff :cool:
  • keepcalmkeepcalm Member Posts: 0 Arc User
    edited October 2013
    marcusdkane wrote: »
    Very nice :cool: Edosians? Barsoom Tharks?

    Neither. I'm remarkably bad at settling on names, so they currently have no name other than Generic Low-Grav Alien #47. Which started off as an offshoot of Octavia, her people and the importance they place on names.
    Names seem to be a thing, despite me not actually giving them to a whole bunch of stuff. I should probably do that.
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  • grylakgrylak Member Posts: 1,594 Arc User
    edited October 2013
    And tharr be my entry. No one from the Sentinel in this one, as there was no where to fit them in without it feeling shoehorned, so enjoy one of my other characters. They don't exist in game, but they exist in my personal universe (and Rykon is the one who issues orders at the start of my Foundry missions, even if he aint seen).


    Actors playing them would be:


    Admiral Rykon: Sam Neill
    Captain Grylak: Dwayne 'The Rock' Johnson
    Commander Berry: Halle Berry (Yeah, I kinda went the real lazy route with her name).
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  • takeshi6takeshi6 Member Posts: 752 Arc User
    edited October 2013
    My entry is up.

    Veleen Takor, my Romulan Character, is assigned to security for the activation gala. However, having been present for the 'Chase' Finale, she knows the danger behind the gates, even if she knows how important it is...

    Please take a look and tell me what you think. :D
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  • takeshi6takeshi6 Member Posts: 752 Arc User
    edited November 2013
    Any feedback on my latest LC entry?
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  • marcusdkanemarcusdkane Member Posts: 7,439 Arc User
    edited November 2013
    keepcalm wrote: »
    Neither. I'm remarkably bad at settling on names, so they currently have no name other than Generic Low-Grav Alien #47. Which started off as an offshoot of Octavia, her people and the importance they place on names.
    Names seem to be a thing, despite me not actually giving them to a whole bunch of stuff. I should probably do that.

    Looking forward to seeing more of them in future entries :cool:
  • marcusdkanemarcusdkane Member Posts: 7,439 Arc User
    edited November 2013
    grylak wrote: »
    And tharr be my entry. No one from the Sentinel in this one, as there was no where to fit them in without it feeling shoehorned, so enjoy one of my other characters. They don't exist in game, but they exist in my personal universe (and Rykon is the one who issues orders at the start of my Foundry missions, even if he aint seen).


    Actors playing them would be:


    Admiral Rykon: Sam Neill
    Captain Grylak: Dwayne 'The Rock' Johnson
    Commander Berry: Halle Berry (Yeah, I kinda went the real lazy route with her name).

    I really enjoyed that, very nice indeed :cool:
  • marcusdkanemarcusdkane Member Posts: 7,439 Arc User
    edited November 2013
    takeshi6 wrote: »
    Any feedback on my latest LC entry?

    I liked it :cool: I suspect there'll be echoes of this in the new story, but to be honest, this is a pretty restrictive challenge, in so much as progressing past the point of activation is pretty unlikely :D.

    Any thoughts on my last couple of entries?
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