But as the adult he was in a position to decisively curb inappropriate behavior that (IMHO) was rooted in a childhood psychological condition that should have instead been treated.
What can I say, Marcus had his flaws... I don't think he would ever deny that, indeed, I would love to see Counsellor ch'Raul go a few rounds with him.
The imprinting did occur while she was a minor even if the actual act occurred after the age of majority, after all.
Not by Pentaxian standards though... Had she been an average Pentaxian, it would have been totally normal for her to bond to someone at that age. Not quite a betrothal/arranged marriage like some cultures due to no parental selection, but certainly a comparable social convention. As you pointed out with Alyosha's comparative youth when he was emancipated... Although I hadn't realised it previously, once I read that, a five year developmental variance is the only explanation for Ch'K'rr and S'rR's' cognitive states at those ages...
You definitely do not want me to get into that discussion, and I don't think Branflakes would like it either. ;-)
I read it once over fifteen years ago (wasn't overly impressed) and wouldn't particularly want to again, I was just comparing Dolores and Siri as being similarly manipulative
Alyosha believes (incorrectly) that I'sH'd's evident dislike was of a professional nature: he thinks I'sH'd sees Siri as a draft dodger or otherwise disloyal, for choosing Starfleet over the Pentaxian Militia. He disagrees with the idea that she's a traitor, but can at least understand where someone belonging to an insular "nation" might have come to such a view.
So no worries, as long as this misperception stays uncorrected, about Alyosha condemning I'sH'd. ;-)
If he found out it was (as he would perceive it) unquestioned racism, I think he would be disappointed if I'sH'd did not work to overcome instinct with intellect.
That's certainly fair enough, I do think though, that if Alyosha has a flaw, it would be holding others to his own standards, especially on a subject he has absolutely no knowledge or even true comprehension of, rather than truly leaving it to God to judge
Not sure who initially told Mrs. Azarov--if it was Alyosha, or a tabloid. Something tells me Kane's actions would've been major tabloid fodder...I figured it was all over the media and wrote on that assumption.
Ahh, now that would actually make sense, due to the status of the Kane family... It would be like the head of Audi or Lockhead doing something scandalous and it winding up in the 'local chip wrapper'
Indeed. If I ever write the Board of Inquiry proper, I may have to ask a relative who is familiar with Air Force accident investigation procedures.
Definitely a good source :cool: I just googled stuff relating to US Navy codes, and eventually found a heavily redacted transcript which provided the appropriate legalese ^_^
It's nice to see that newly-promoted (in-game, not yet in-story) Admiral Grunt is inspiring so many young Ferengi to follow his example...
(In-story, I'm working on a concept involving Grunt and company having to keep the Hephaestus after the Klingon attack on the Utopia Planitia shipyards; I just need a hook for the story itself...)
Well, I had no further use for her, and killing her meant one less loose end for Drake to tie up later, and I was killing so many people already...
Thanks to Vulcan longevity, she could make an appearance in any number of ways in a historic piece This was the rationale I used when mentioning Xon. A young man in Kirk's era, he'd only be middle-aged by Vulcan standards :cool: As for Drake's loose ends, I kinda gave him another
Thanks. Once I thought of him, I really had to formally introduce Brax as a character. You will definitely be seeing more of him in future LC's.
Definitely, it's good to see a character who plays against type, but also nice to see a character so developed/realised that they. Project a persona from the page :cool:
Garibaldi. One of the better characters in modern TV sci-fi imo.
Thank you for the kind feedback. I really enjoy this part of the game.
@malkarris - All the ? took away from enjoying reading this piece unfortunately. Regardless, I agree that it is a great way to explain all the Tovan's in the galaxy
@ccmurphy - Welcome to the LCs! For posterity, line breaks keeps your work from being a wall-o-text. I enjoy tie-ins to game or movie/TV events so the end bit was fun to read
@ironphoenix113 - You know ... I never thought about the idea that the Captain may not have had a chance to survey their own ship! This piece sparked some ideas for Kathryn and the Solaris. You always seem to bring out some romance no matter how exciting or mundane. I actually said, "aww" in the break room as I finished this one.
@asardetemplari - You know, it's work like this one that make me want to fly a Galaxy-class in-game. Actually, the Gal-X to be precise ... the imagery of the Spinal Lance is VERY appealing to me. It's a shame Cryptic is not doing something more to these ships to keep a complaint-thread out of sight.
@sodin3 - Sooo, never met a Betazoid eh? Yeah man, write more about that!
@flightofcrimson - This was good comedy! The introductory paragraph had me glued to the rest of the piece. Well done!
Cutting it close to the deadline, but here is my piece of free-writing, a collaboration between myself and superhombre777, with additional input from sander233 :cool: I shall be removing the random *s after a good night's sleep...
@ironphoenix113 - You know ... I never thought about the idea that the Captain may not have had a chance to survey their own ship! This piece sparked some ideas for Kathryn and the Solaris. You always seem to bring out some romance no matter how exciting or mundane. I actually said, "aww" in the break room as I finished this one.
Heh, thanks Captains are generally pretty busy, what with running the ship and all. And, given that Bryan is an Admiral, he'll have even more to do during the day. That said, I actually borrowed the idea from Babylon 5 (I forget which season) but Sheridan at the end of an episode says something along the lines of "You know, in all the time I've been here, I've never walked the entire length of this station." Anyway, glad you enjoyed it!
Vice Admiral Bryan Mitchel Valot
Commanding officer: Odyssey class U.S.S. Athena
Admiral of the 1st Assault Fleet
Join date: Some time in Closed Beta
It's nice to see that newly-promoted (in-game, not yet in-story) Admiral Grunt is inspiring so many young Ferengi to follow his example...
(In-story, I'm working on a concept involving Grunt and company having to keep the Hephaestus after the Klingon attack on the Utopia Planitia shipyards; I just need a hook for the story itself...)
Er...yes. :rolleyes: Brax's inspiration and hero is clearly Grunt, and not someone more obvious, like Admiral Nog. Re: the Utopia Planetia thing, perhaps Starfleet is desperate enough that its now hiring foreign contractors to rebuild its shipyards?
I don't know which of those impressed me more... Probably Brax. I really enjoyed his reasons for enlisting in Starfleet, and the "hypothetical" arrangements he's made with Capt. Nair...
Speaking of which, did you know the forum's profanity filters don't work en Espanol?
I've also discovered (vis-a-vis Leonardo da Vinci) that they don't filter out Italian either. Which means, shockingly enough, that forum posters can get away with all sorts of foreign-language merde.
And now that I've done some more reading:
marcusdkane, superhombre77 and sander233: EXCELLENT collaboration! The court drama was very well-written (including the use of actual in-game effects like polarized hull being used in the court defence), and I really liked the constant transition between the court hearing, the Hillels' marital troubles and the encounter between the two AIs. (It was interesting, in particular, seeing the ugly, prejudiced side of Yair being brought into light, and I appreciate that Superhombre didn't do anything to sugarcoat the problems between Yair and Isabella.) The interactions between the Valkyrie and Reaper personnel and Grimes and company was also handled really well. I am curious, though, on what kind of ship the actual in-game Vanguard is, as I have found no external reference at all to the Eaves-class.
All an all, a really great example of why LC collabs should happen more often. Well done, all three of you!
gulberat: A very nicely-written story, which I hope will lead up to a story about the actual inquiry itself. I should add that I found the allusion of Section 31 to the cheka rather interesting, as in more ways than one it illustrates how dystopian, to me at least, the Federation has become.
cmdrscarlet: I like it! Not only was it interesting to take a quick glimpse back to Kathryn's Academy days (and a little beforehand), but the stream of consciousness format was handled very well.
flamesight: As usual, it was highly enjoyable to read Dylen solving an problem with class, efficiency, and the random act of cruelty here and there. She is definitely shaping up to be my favourite villain in the LCs, and as usual, I look forward to seeing more from her. (As an aside, what class of warbird is the Val'Hanorr?)
Also, this
Dylen smirked, "No? Let's see... We have a hard-nosed leader, me, an emotionally-stunted Second, Latres - assuming he's still alive, a wet-behind-the-ears lieutenant, you, an able-but-overlooked doctor, Vogor, and this half-breed engineer. We're one plucky sidekick away from being a Federation vessel!"
made me laugh.
armada: Intriguing concept! I think there was one DS9 novel where Dax, similarly, had to play host to a traumatized future version of her own symbiont. In all other respects, your story was very well-written, and I like the idea of your character being burdened with future knowledge that she can't share, reveal or alter. The allusion to the Terminator movies (future relative coming back in time to prevent a war against machines) was rather nice touch as well.
I wonder, though, now that Serena is hosting a future version of her own symbiont, isn't she breaking the Trill law against re-visiting old experiences? Though given that she didn't do it intentionally, and given that she's not going to tell anyone about this, I suspect the point is moot anyway.
Hopefully, I'll read a few more of these before the thread closes on Tuesday. I still need to read more of sander's Road to Ruin and patrickngo's latest, so I suspect I'm going to be very busy for the next few days.
What can I say, Marcus had his flaws... I don't think he would ever deny that, indeed, I would love to see Counsellor ch'Raul go a few rounds with him.
I love ch'Raul! Yeah, that could be neat to see!!
I read it once over fifteen years ago (wasn't overly impressed) and wouldn't particularly want to again, I was just comparing Dolores and Siri as being similarly manipulative
Of course, Humbert, from what I have seen through research, is the classic example of an unreliable narrator. Putting too much stock in such a narrator's allegations is not exactly solid ground...
That's certainly fair enough, I do think though, that if Alyosha has a flaw, it would be holding others to his own standards, especially on a subject he has absolutely no knowledge or even true comprehension of, rather than truly leaving it to God to judge.
I'm not sure it would be allowed per forum rules to actually debate, but suffice it to say that the postmodern idea of what constitutes "judgment" is not the definition that I am following here. If calling someone "wrong" is judgment, then he does feel that way. But if taking justice into his own hands and punishing someone or attacking them (with or without them present) is judgment...then he draws a clear line there.
Or tries to, anyway. He's not a complete success at it.
Alyosha would not presume to say what Marcus' eternal disposition should be, or to think it is his job to attack or punish Marcus. He has his opinion of what Marcus did, but I still think he tried not to be a jerk. And I think he'd feel really terrible if he found out what happened to Marcus after his death.
Ahh, now that would actually make sense, due to the status of the Kane family... It would be like the head of Audi or Lockhead doing something scandalous and it winding up in the 'local chip wrapper'
Yeah. Or if a prominent politician or general got caught in a sex scandal. I knew I was taking a chance, that that might not be how you envisioned it, but at least as I was writing, I felt that it did end up in tabloids if not even the regular news.
Definitely a good source :cool: I just googled stuff relating to US Navy codes, and eventually found a heavily redacted transcript which provided the appropriate legalese ^_^
Mind emailing the link? I would still end up blending it with Air Force stuff, though, because I tend to envision Starfleet as a combo of Navy and Air Force tradition and culture. (Navy outside, Air Force inside.)
gulberat: A very nicely-written story, which I hope will lead up to a story about the actual inquiry itself. I should add that I found the allusion of Section 31 to the cheka rather interesting, as in more ways than one it illustrates how dystopian, to me at least, the Federation has become.
I thought the Azarovs--though very distanced from such happenings by the passage of time--would be cognizant enough of history to recognize the signs.
I also thought, though of course it's the conjecture I was referring to when I first posted, that perhaps the 24th/25th century Russian Federation "local government" (which I imagine still operating in some sort of capacity even on United Earth) would take unkindly to such actions by Starfleet and be willing to challenge it if push came to shove.
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So... I've put up a story I've been sitting on for a while now. I held off on submitting this one because I wasn't sure I could get away with posting it, but it doesn't cross any lines that mdk, gornar and others haven't crossed already.
This is my first attempt at writing a romance story, as opposed to a story with romantic elements in it. So if it sucks, let me know, and I'll stick to blowing stuff up.
It centers around an intimate interspecies relationship between teenagers. It gets a little steamy but I tried to keep it PG-13.
This is a direct sequel to my submission for LC #18: Academy Days (posted here in LC #40, full cast list here.) Please read that first if you haven't already, otherwise this new story won't make much sense.
...Oh, baby, you know, I've really got to leave you / Oh, I can hear it callin 'me / I said don't you hear it callin' me the way it used to do?...
- Anne Bredon
I made my first entry into the LC today. Any tips or suggestions that any of you have, please let me know. It's the backstory to my RP Character Trixie and how she got here. Some of the ones I already read are fantastic. I'm starting to go through the past LC's and read more.
The first thought that crossed my mind though, was "What kind of name is Spirits of Earth for an Andorian escort? You'll have to explain that one. :P
It's all part and parcel of my/Tylha's naming scheme for ships.... Being an Andorian chauvinist, I pretty much had to get the Kumari three-pack, and it made sense (to me) to name them after three linked Holst pieces - specifically, the three main sections of his ballet "The Perfect Fool". So, the Kumari got named Spirits of Fire, the Khyzon was Spirits of Water, and the Charal - which is the one I actually use - is Spirits of Earth. The classical element, not the planet.
(Tylha's weird Gustav Holst obsession has come up in these LCs before - probably too often, if the truth be told!)
As for my combat builds - I'm sure you're right; one of these days I might get one of the DPS experts in my fleet to go over the layouts and get them right. I'm always inclined, though, towards stuff that looks cool to me - which is not necessarily the best available! A failing, I'm sure.
As I stated in the other thread, there were some very interesting stories this round. Thanks to everyone who participated in the discussion in this thread.
I am going to unstick this as I prepare to post up challenge #46, but feel free to continue discussing!
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Hmm, would it be the whole inquiry scene from The Kane... sorry, Caine Mutiny?
I must admit, I'm not familiar with that piece of work... The overall inquiry motif was inspired by A Few Good Men, even though I wasn't able to have anyone scream "You can't handle the truth!" (as much as I wanted to ^_^ ) but one scene was inspired by another movie. A clue, is it was not actually during the inquiry... Bonus points for picking up a name-drop reference to another movie (separate to the inspired scene)...
marcusdkane, superhombre77 and sander233: EXCELLENT collaboration! The court drama was very well-written (including the use of actual in-game effects like polarized hull being used in the court defence), and I really liked the constant transition between the court hearing, the Hillels' marital troubles and the encounter between the two AIs. (It was interesting, in particular, seeing the ugly, prejudiced side of Yair being brought into light, and I appreciate that Superhombre didn't do anything to sugarcoat the problems between Yair and Isabella.) The interactions between the Valkyrie and Reaper personnel and Grimes and company was also handled really well.
Is it possible to polarise hull plating in the game? I just referenced it from Enterprise as a way of throwing in the red-herring of the order to drop shields, and a way of someone turning the tables on Channery :cool: Superhombre777 outlined where he wanted the Hillel's situation to resolve, and I then did the scenes... I'm glad they read well ^_^ The interactions between the hologirls were Superhombre777's work.
Is it possible to polarise hull plating in the game? I just referenced it from Enterprise as a way of throwing in the red-herring of the order to drop shields, and a way of someone turning the tables on Channery :cool: Superhombre777 outlined where he wanted the Hillel's situation to resolve, and I then did the scenes... I'm glad they read well ^_^ The interactions between the hologirls were Superhombre777's work.
Yep! "Polarize Hull" is a power available to Science BOFFS, and it is actually quite useful. It gives extra damage resistance, just as you described, and it also briefly makes the ship tractor beam-proof.
It's not an in-game ship (as far as I'm aware) The description of the Vanguard is a reference is to this STO concept art drawn by John Eaves.
I saw it, wanted Amanda to 'up her status' a bit, but wanted to give credit to the Master...
Very nice. Given how many "USS Vengeance" threads popped up in the wake of Into Darkness, I doubt many people would mind if Cryptic made the Eaves sketch (or something similar) a playable ship after all.
Of course, Humbert, from what I have seen through research, is the classic example of an unreliable narrator. Putting too much stock in such a narrator's allegations is not exactly solid ground...
I would agree, although someone wrote a 'Dolores at Fifty' follow on, and apparently she spent her entire life manipulating and using men to get what she wanted... Siri isn't quite in that league of skankiness, but she does have a devious and manipulative streak which she tries to keep control of.
I'm not sure it would be allowed per forum rules to actually debate, but suffice it to say that the postmodern idea of what constitutes "judgment" is not the definition that I am following here. If calling someone "wrong" is judgment, then he does feel that way. But if taking justice into his own hands and punishing someone or attacking them (with or without them present) is judgment...then he draws a clear line there.
Or tries to, anyway. He's not a complete success at it.
Alyosha would not presume to say what Marcus' eternal disposition should be, or to think it is his job to attack or punish Marcus. He has his opinion of what Marcus did, but I still think he tried not to be a jerk. And I think he'd feel really terrible if he found out what happened to Marcus after his death.
Ahh, that makes more sense than how I interpreted Alyosha's behaviour
Yeah. Or if a prominent politician or general got caught in a sex scandal. I knew I was taking a chance, that that might not be how you envisioned it, but at least as I was writing, I felt that it did end up in tabloids if not even the regular news.
I guess the perspectives of the person in the picture, and the person reading the newspaper can be quite different, and that rationale would explain Mrs Azarova's interpretation of the events and of course, her own experiences as a parent would do the rest of the work... I suspect Marcus and Siri 'got papped' leaving the Pyramid Club soon after their repatriation to the Federation from Cardassia, and it featuring in the 'gutter press'. To be honest, even I don't know what strings were pulled to allow them to keep their careers, both being guilty of Conduct Unbecoming, as that would not have been a board of inquiry, but full court martials. The only things I can think, is board leniency due to 'expression of cultural heritage' on Siri's part, the fact that she was not an intended or naturally consceived child of Marcus and K'm'rn, but a clandestinely created binary clone from their genetic material, and hat it was a Starfleet operation which led to their incarceration...
. Mind emailing the link? I would still end up blending it with Air Force stuff, though, because I tend to envision Starfleet as a combo of Navy and Air Force tradition and culture. (Navy outside, Air Force inside.)
Sent ^_^ I hope you'll find it as useful as I did :cool:
So... I've put up a story I've been sitting on for a while now. I held off on submitting this one because I wasn't sure I could get away with posting it, but it doesn't cross any lines that mdk, gornar and others haven't crossed already.
This is my first attempt at writing a romance story, as opposed to a story with romantic elements in it. So if it sucks, let me know, and I'll stick to blowing stuff up.
It centers around an intimate interspecies relationship between teenagers. It gets a little steamy but I tried to keep it PG-13.
This is a direct sequel to my submission for LC #18: Academy Days (posted here in LC #40, full cast list here.) Please read that first if you haven't already, otherwise this new story won't make much sense.
Really nice piece, I'd say it sticks to PG-13 nicely :cool: It shows more than I did between Marcus and Alix, but any actual detail between them, by nature of their relationship, would've gone waaay beyond PG-13... That said, anyone working maintenance on the outside of Space Dock when Amanda woke up would've been treated to a gun show I think you handled it well and kept it tasteful :cool:
I really liked the plotting, and visualised Stinky looking up from his chow with a grunt when spoken of
Yep! "Polarize Hull" is a power available to Science BOFFS, and it is actually quite useful. It gives extra damage resistance, just as you described, and it also briefly makes the ship tractor beam-proof.
Awesome I really wish I had some equipment capable of letting me play the game...
Very nice. Given how many "USS Vengeance" threads popped up in the wake of Into Darkness, I doubt many people would mind if Cryptic made the Eaves sketch (or something similar) a playable ship after all.
It's a bit tasty, isn't it :cool: I don't know why, but it just strikes me as a tactical explorer, rather than a science vessel (even without the similarity to the USS Vengeance) I figured that as I am writing, I'm not limited, but had to give credit to the Master for the design :cool:
Answers to the quiz...
The borrowed scene, is the one where S'rR's tells Amanda to stick her finger down her throat, and it's taken from The Memphis Belle.
The namedrop, is Amanda's Verticoli brush, which was shown in Blades of Glory...
@gulberat - The thing I love most about your work (besides the content itself) is that I am learning more about Devidians than STO could ever create. And let me say that the intro "order" really gives the entire piece some gravitas ... something big happened and it's frakkin' serious. Alexi is in trooooublllleee! T'Nae needs a beat-down and it doesn't have to be physical.
@marcusdkane, sander233, superhombre777 - simply awesome. The courtroom drama was enticing to read. Take THAT Channery! Poor Hillel - that guy needs a break. The last sentence was the bomb and it dropped last second. Man, well done!
@ambassadormolari - You know, when I started STO, I was insistent on using the classic Miranda hull. I was very married to that ship in-game and played with it through most of my LtCmdr levels. I almost hated trading it for the Exeter ... until I played with the Exeter :P Anyway, the writing about losing such a ship was close to me. I don't have any ideas for Kathryn in the same vein, but ... "I get it". Then there's Brax. Ferengi's must be fun to write about - I can't stand them in canon but there must be something about them. He and Grunt must meet!
Three stories, three ships destroyed (or nearly). Let's not forget Grunt lost his recently too. What's up with that? Do I need to blow up Solaris to keep up with the Jones'?
@marcusdkane, sander233, superhombre777 - simply awesome. The courtroom drama was enticing to read. Take THAT Channery! Poor Hillel - that guy needs a break. The last sentence was the bomb and it dropped last second. Man, well done!
Glad you enjoyed it :cool: I don't know if that was ever superhombre777's original plan for Alice, but a few things had made me wonder, and her behaviour in the last entry pretty much clinched it for me that that was what she really was... After all, what better form for an operative than a chatty hologram that, because she looks like an underage girl, no-one would admit to hooking up with I always suspected her as the instument of Carter's demise (either consciously or by being overridden) by a manipulation of her holomatrix which would allow her to be solid, but appear invisible, and this gave me the opportunity to write that
Weel,, it may make sense from that point of view ... but it was a shocker to me. Loved it!
@josan369 - Welcome to the LCs! For me, because I had no idea Trixie was from somewhere other than both Prime and Mirror Universes, things were really confusing until about 2/3 through. That's just my problem though. Otherwise, it was a very good starter piece to bring Trixie "here" I look forward to see how she handles all these Aliens around here TBH, I 'm struggling with all these aliens as well.
@sander - I've printed it out so I will respond when I can finish it.
@cosmonaut12345: Interesting background on the Orions. And a nice child-like style to the story.
@jonsills: Good origin story, and some nice interaction with Tovan.
@maverickdude05: A nice view of the Fed tutorial aftermath. Some intersting interaction there.
@patchouli19: Huh, I'd love to know what happened to these guys, given the game starts two years later. Is this made up, or did the race come from somewhere? some good interaction in this one.
@danqueller: Funny one. Something tells me the augment isn't giving the commander enough credit. I think someone else said this, but I'd love to know how that augment ended up with a Romulan commander.
@knightraider6: Adama maneuver!!! Great characters and battle scenes as well.
@amurorx0: Not going to make a weight joke. Kinda funny though, thought I take it that this Cagalli isn't related to the one from Gundam Seed?
@wraithshadow13: A good wrap up from the last story, nice recovery vibe from that and lots of good character interactions.
@patrickngo: Dirty, dangerous, I really have to say you're good at writing about the dark underbelly of Star Trek. Excellent story.
@superhombre777: I have to agree with others I really want to hate Hillel, or at least smack some sense into him. Props for making story about that character that I still wanted to read.
@shevet: Nice as always. I have to say that I'm a fan, but I really liked all of this one, excellent battle, and I loved the banter with Kophil and Amiga.
@ccmurphy: Interesting AU, the ending seemed a bit rushed, but overall good.
@ironphoenix113: Nice little slice of life via ship. And cute.
@asardetemplari: Comes off as a bit silly, not sure if that was what you were going for.
@sodin3: Nice log entry, would like to have seen more about the new officer.
@flamesight: Nicely done on the Romulan characters, and I loved the Tal'Shiar commander. Very ruthless.
@wraithshadow13 (again): Somehow I can see a Klingon taking to Moby ****. Very nicely done with the action scenes.
@armada: Slightly confusing, but interesting. I would love to see how this character goes from here.
@rageflip: Short, but tells a story. Your captain seems to have an interesting life.
@cmdrscarlet: Intersting way of telling the story. You manage to say a lot with very little.
@gulberat: My favorite devidian's life goes on. Yeah, I don't like T'Nae either. But enjoyable story, nice to see where he came from.
@superhombre777, sander233 and marcusdkane: Yeah, you guys are good. I can't wait to read the next bit of this universe you all have going.
@ambassadormolari: Nice story about switching between ships and new crew. I really like the Ferengi, always wondered about that part of Ferengi law.
@sander233: Aw, young love. Though if Sway is going to keep on like that he might need his own quarters if his dads going to get any sleep. Like the day shift assignment part bringing in the doff system.
@josan369: Nice intro story. Time traveling trills seem popular. I was a bit confused at the begining, but it worked out pretty quick.
Weel,, it may make sense from that point of view ... but it was a shocker to me. Loved it!
I admit, it was probably just my opinion on Alice, but I remembered superhombre777 saying that he hadn't actually known the identity of the assassin when he wrote the attack on Carter (what better thriller than one the author doesn't know the answer of :eek: ) and was good enough to let me run with my concept, it was a really fun collaboration to participate in :cool:
Based on the comments so far I think I'm safely assured that my romance writing does not suck. (although I still prefer to write about stuff blowing up...)
Really nice piece, I'd say it sticks to PG-13 nicely :cool: It shows more than I did between Marcus and Alix, but any actual detail between them, by nature of their relationship, would've gone waaay beyond PG-13... That said, anyone working maintenance on the outside of Space Dock when Amanda woke up would've been treated to a gun show I think you handled it well and kept it tasteful :cool:
I really liked the plotting, and visualised Stinky looking up from his chow with a grunt when spoken of
I'm very glad that you thought it was good - that means a lot coming from someone who writes like Jane Austen... :P
@sander233: Aw, young love. Though if Sway is going to keep on like that he might need his own quarters if his dads going to get any sleep. Like the day shift assignment part bringing in the doff system.
I actually had started to write a conversation about Naja wanting Sway to get his own room and Sway thinking it would be like betraying his father to move out on him (even if it is just down the hall - in my mind Gorn families are extremely close-knit) but I decided it didn't add much to the plot and dropped it. I'll work it into the next story in the sequence.
And yeah, I love working in in-game elements like Doffing (a bunch of my characters are actually just favorite DOffs) and making references to various goings-on (like a particular fleet that likes to put out fires on Drozana); it really helps my immersion and lets me enjoy the game a lot more than a lot of people.
...Oh, baby, you know, I've really got to leave you / Oh, I can hear it callin 'me / I said don't you hear it callin' me the way it used to do?...
- Anne Bredon
It's all part and parcel of my/Tylha's naming scheme for ships.... Being an Andorian chauvinist, I pretty much had to get the Kumari three-pack, and it made sense (to me) to name them after three linked Holst pieces - specifically, the three main sections of his ballet "The Perfect Fool". So, the Kumari got named Spirits of Fire, the Khyzon was Spirits of Water, and the Charal - which is the one I actually use - is Spirits of Earth. The classical element, not the planet.
(Tylha's weird Gustav Holst obsession has come up in these LCs before - probably too often, if the truth be told!)
As for my combat builds - I'm sure you're right; one of these days I might get one of the DPS experts in my fleet to go over the layouts and get them right. I'm always inclined, though, towards stuff that looks cool to me - which is not necessarily the best available! A failing, I'm sure.
I do remember Tylha's fascination with Holst - I just wasn't familiar with "The Perfect Fool" and I knew "Earth" wasn't part of "The Planets." By the way, Bringer of Peace and Bringer of War would be excellent names for a pair of ships...
...Oh, baby, you know, I've really got to leave you / Oh, I can hear it callin 'me / I said don't you hear it callin' me the way it used to do?...
- Anne Bredon
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Not by Pentaxian standards though... Had she been an average Pentaxian, it would have been totally normal for her to bond to someone at that age. Not quite a betrothal/arranged marriage like some cultures due to no parental selection, but certainly a comparable social convention. As you pointed out with Alyosha's comparative youth when he was emancipated... Although I hadn't realised it previously, once I read that, a five year developmental variance is the only explanation for Ch'K'rr and S'rR's' cognitive states at those ages...
I read it once over fifteen years ago (wasn't overly impressed) and wouldn't particularly want to again, I was just comparing Dolores and Siri as being similarly manipulative
That's certainly fair enough, I do think though, that if Alyosha has a flaw, it would be holding others to his own standards, especially on a subject he has absolutely no knowledge or even true comprehension of, rather than truly leaving it to God to judge
Ahh, now that would actually make sense, due to the status of the Kane family... It would be like the head of Audi or Lockhead doing something scandalous and it winding up in the 'local chip wrapper'
Definitely a good source :cool: I just googled stuff relating to US Navy codes, and eventually found a heavily redacted transcript which provided the appropriate legalese ^_^
(In-story, I'm working on a concept involving Grunt and company having to keep the Hephaestus after the Klingon attack on the Utopia Planitia shipyards; I just need a hook for the story itself...)
I hope you'll enjoy it, and will certainly look forward to your feedback :cool:
Thank you for the kind feedback.
@malkarris - All the ? took away from enjoying reading this piece unfortunately. Regardless, I agree that it is a great way to explain all the Tovan's in the galaxy
@ccmurphy - Welcome to the LCs! For posterity, line breaks keeps your work from being a wall-o-text. I enjoy tie-ins to game or movie/TV events so the end bit was fun to read
@ironphoenix113 - You know ... I never thought about the idea that the Captain may not have had a chance to survey their own ship! This piece sparked some ideas for Kathryn and the Solaris. You always seem to bring out some romance no matter how exciting or mundane. I actually said, "aww" in the break room as I finished this one.
@asardetemplari - You know, it's work like this one that make me want to fly a Galaxy-class in-game. Actually, the Gal-X to be precise ... the imagery of the Spinal Lance is VERY appealing to me. It's a shame Cryptic is not doing something more to these ships to keep a complaint-thread out of sight.
@sodin3 - Sooo, never met a Betazoid eh? Yeah man, write more about that!
@flightofcrimson - This was good comedy! The introductory paragraph had me glued to the rest of the piece. Well done!
Working on the rest!
That worked out really well. I'm satisfied!
Heh, thanks
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Likewise :cool: Thanks for suggesting it and your contributions, I think without them, the board of inquiry would have really dragged
Er...yes. :rolleyes: Brax's inspiration and hero is clearly Grunt, and not someone more obvious, like Admiral Nog. Re: the Utopia Planetia thing, perhaps Starfleet is desperate enough that its now hiring foreign contractors to rebuild its shipyards?
Hmm, would it be the whole inquiry scene from The Kane... sorry, Caine Mutiny?
I've also discovered (vis-a-vis Leonardo da Vinci) that they don't filter out Italian either. Which means, shockingly enough, that forum posters can get away with all sorts of foreign-language merde.
And now that I've done some more reading:
marcusdkane, superhombre77 and sander233: EXCELLENT collaboration! The court drama was very well-written (including the use of actual in-game effects like polarized hull being used in the court defence), and I really liked the constant transition between the court hearing, the Hillels' marital troubles and the encounter between the two AIs. (It was interesting, in particular, seeing the ugly, prejudiced side of Yair being brought into light, and I appreciate that Superhombre didn't do anything to sugarcoat the problems between Yair and Isabella.) The interactions between the Valkyrie and Reaper personnel and Grimes and company was also handled really well. I am curious, though, on what kind of ship the actual in-game Vanguard is, as I have found no external reference at all to the Eaves-class.
All an all, a really great example of why LC collabs should happen more often. Well done, all three of you!
gulberat: A very nicely-written story, which I hope will lead up to a story about the actual inquiry itself. I should add that I found the allusion of Section 31 to the cheka rather interesting, as in more ways than one it illustrates how dystopian, to me at least, the Federation has become.
cmdrscarlet: I like it! Not only was it interesting to take a quick glimpse back to Kathryn's Academy days (and a little beforehand), but the stream of consciousness format was handled very well.
flamesight: As usual, it was highly enjoyable to read Dylen solving an problem with class, efficiency, and the random act of cruelty here and there. She is definitely shaping up to be my favourite villain in the LCs, and as usual, I look forward to seeing more from her. (As an aside, what class of warbird is the Val'Hanorr?)
Also, this
made me laugh.
armada: Intriguing concept! I think there was one DS9 novel where Dax, similarly, had to play host to a traumatized future version of her own symbiont. In all other respects, your story was very well-written, and I like the idea of your character being burdened with future knowledge that she can't share, reveal or alter. The allusion to the Terminator movies (future relative coming back in time to prevent a war against machines) was rather nice touch as well.
I wonder, though, now that Serena is hosting a future version of her own symbiont, isn't she breaking the Trill law against re-visiting old experiences? Though given that she didn't do it intentionally, and given that she's not going to tell anyone about this, I suspect the point is moot anyway.
Hopefully, I'll read a few more of these before the thread closes on Tuesday. I still need to read more of sander's Road to Ruin and patrickngo's latest, so I suspect I'm going to be very busy for the next few days.
I love ch'Raul! Yeah, that could be neat to see!!
Of course, Humbert, from what I have seen through research, is the classic example of an unreliable narrator. Putting too much stock in such a narrator's allegations is not exactly solid ground...
I'm not sure it would be allowed per forum rules to actually debate, but suffice it to say that the postmodern idea of what constitutes "judgment" is not the definition that I am following here. If calling someone "wrong" is judgment, then he does feel that way. But if taking justice into his own hands and punishing someone or attacking them (with or without them present) is judgment...then he draws a clear line there.
Or tries to, anyway. He's not a complete success at it.
Alyosha would not presume to say what Marcus' eternal disposition should be, or to think it is his job to attack or punish Marcus. He has his opinion of what Marcus did, but I still think he tried not to be a jerk. And I think he'd feel really terrible if he found out what happened to Marcus after his death.
Yeah. Or if a prominent politician or general got caught in a sex scandal. I knew I was taking a chance, that that might not be how you envisioned it, but at least as I was writing, I felt that it did end up in tabloids if not even the regular news.
Mind emailing the link? I would still end up blending it with Air Force stuff, though, because I tend to envision Starfleet as a combo of Navy and Air Force tradition and culture. (Navy outside, Air Force inside.)
I thought the Azarovs--though very distanced from such happenings by the passage of time--would be cognizant enough of history to recognize the signs.
I also thought, though of course it's the conjecture I was referring to when I first posted, that perhaps the 24th/25th century Russian Federation "local government" (which I imagine still operating in some sort of capacity even on United Earth) would take unkindly to such actions by Starfleet and be willing to challenge it if push came to shove.
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This is my first attempt at writing a romance story, as opposed to a story with romantic elements in it. So if it sucks, let me know, and I'll stick to blowing stuff up.
It centers around an intimate interspecies relationship between teenagers. It gets a little steamy but I tried to keep it PG-13.
This is a direct sequel to my submission for LC #18: Academy Days (posted here in LC #40, full cast list here.) Please read that first if you haven't already, otherwise this new story won't make much sense.
Also, for background context on my Gorn characters, you can check out An Introduction to the Gorn
And now without further ado, please enjoy "The Life"
Starring, in order of appearance:
Ryan Lee as the voice of Sway
Meagan Tandy as Bekk Naja
Nina Dobrev as Bekk Dejera
Lennie James as LCdr. Lan
William Forsythe as Lt. Gokran
Emma Stone as Wr. Samaya
Andrew Garfield as the voice of Wr. Shralak
...Oh, baby, you know, I've really got to leave you / Oh, I can hear it callin 'me / I said don't you hear it callin' me the way it used to do?...
- Anne Bredon
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It's all part and parcel of my/Tylha's naming scheme for ships.... Being an Andorian chauvinist, I pretty much had to get the Kumari three-pack, and it made sense (to me) to name them after three linked Holst pieces - specifically, the three main sections of his ballet "The Perfect Fool". So, the Kumari got named Spirits of Fire, the Khyzon was Spirits of Water, and the Charal - which is the one I actually use - is Spirits of Earth. The classical element, not the planet.
(Tylha's weird Gustav Holst obsession has come up in these LCs before - probably too often, if the truth be told!)
As for my combat builds - I'm sure you're right; one of these days I might get one of the DPS experts in my fleet to go over the layouts and get them right. I'm always inclined, though, towards stuff that looks cool to me - which is not necessarily the best available! A failing, I'm sure.
I am going to unstick this as I prepare to post up challenge #46, but feel free to continue discussing!
Cheers,
Brandon =/\=
I must admit, I'm not familiar with that piece of work... The overall inquiry motif was inspired by A Few Good Men, even though I wasn't able to have anyone scream "You can't handle the truth!" (as much as I wanted to ^_^ ) but one scene was inspired by another movie. A clue, is it was not actually during the inquiry... Bonus points for picking up a name-drop reference to another movie (separate to the inspired scene)...
Is it possible to polarise hull plating in the game? I just referenced it from Enterprise as a way of throwing in the red-herring of the order to drop shields, and a way of someone turning the tables on Channery :cool: Superhombre777 outlined where he wanted the Hillel's situation to resolve, and I then did the scenes... I'm glad they read well ^_^ The interactions between the hologirls were Superhombre777's work.
It's not an in-game ship (as far as I'm aware)
I saw it, wanted Amanda to 'up her status' a bit, but wanted to give credit to the Master...
Thanks, I really hope it will inspire more collaborations in the future, and there are some fantastic writers participating in the LCs ^_^
Yep! "Polarize Hull" is a power available to Science BOFFS, and it is actually quite useful. It gives extra damage resistance, just as you described, and it also briefly makes the ship tractor beam-proof.
Very nice.
I would agree, although someone wrote a 'Dolores at Fifty' follow on, and apparently she spent her entire life manipulating and using men to get what she wanted... Siri isn't quite in that league of skankiness, but she does have a devious and manipulative streak which she tries to keep control of.
Ahh, that makes more sense than how I interpreted Alyosha's behaviour
I guess the perspectives of the person in the picture, and the person reading the newspaper can be quite different, and that rationale would explain Mrs Azarova's interpretation of the events and of course, her own experiences as a parent would do the rest of the work... I suspect Marcus and Siri 'got papped' leaving the Pyramid Club soon after their repatriation to the Federation from Cardassia, and it featuring in the 'gutter press'. To be honest, even I don't know what strings were pulled to allow them to keep their careers, both being guilty of Conduct Unbecoming, as that would not have been a board of inquiry, but full court martials. The only things I can think, is board leniency due to 'expression of cultural heritage' on Siri's part, the fact that she was not an intended or naturally consceived child of Marcus and K'm'rn, but a clandestinely created binary clone from their genetic material, and hat it was a Starfleet operation which led to their incarceration...
Sent ^_^ I hope you'll find it as useful as I did :cool:
Really nice piece, I'd say it sticks to PG-13 nicely :cool: It shows more than I did between Marcus and Alix, but any actual detail between them, by nature of their relationship, would've gone waaay beyond PG-13... That said, anyone working maintenance on the outside of Space Dock when Amanda woke up would've been treated to a gun show
I really liked the plotting, and visualised Stinky looking up from his chow with a grunt when spoken of
Awesome
It's a bit tasty, isn't it :cool: I don't know why, but it just strikes me as a tactical explorer, rather than a science vessel (even without the similarity to the USS Vengeance) I figured that as I am writing, I'm not limited, but had to give credit to the Master for the design :cool:
Answers to the quiz...
The borrowed scene, is the one where S'rR's tells Amanda to stick her finger down her throat, and it's taken from The Memphis Belle.
The namedrop, is Amanda's Verticoli brush, which was shown in Blades of Glory...
@marcusdkane, sander233, superhombre777 - simply awesome. The courtroom drama was enticing to read. Take THAT Channery! Poor Hillel - that guy needs a break. The last sentence was the bomb and it dropped last second. Man, well done!
@ambassadormolari - You know, when I started STO, I was insistent on using the classic Miranda hull. I was very married to that ship in-game and played with it through most of my LtCmdr levels. I almost hated trading it for the Exeter ... until I played with the Exeter :P Anyway, the writing about losing such a ship was close to me. I don't have any ideas for Kathryn in the same vein, but ... "I get it". Then there's Brax. Ferengi's must be fun to write about - I can't stand them in canon but there must be something about them. He and Grunt must meet!
Three stories, three ships destroyed (or nearly). Let's not forget Grunt lost his recently too. What's up with that? Do I need to blow up Solaris to keep up with the Jones'?
Glad you enjoyed it :cool: I don't know if that was ever superhombre777's original plan for Alice, but a few things had made me wonder, and her behaviour in the last entry pretty much clinched it for me that that was what she really was... After all, what better form for an operative than a chatty hologram that, because she looks like an underage girl, no-one would admit to hooking up with
@josan369 - Welcome to the LCs! For me, because I had no idea Trixie was from somewhere other than both Prime and Mirror Universes, things were really confusing until about 2/3 through. That's just my problem though. Otherwise, it was a very good starter piece to bring Trixie "here"
@sander - I've printed it out so I will respond when I can finish it.
@indyv72: Interesting idea, and I could see this going somewhere, would you write more?
@sharpie65: Short and sweet, I was hoping that you would write more about this.
@ayel1: Nice log entry, and I would look forward to more.
@masopw: Interesting, slightly confusing, but a good story.
@whytelyon: Nice start to the offical story, and explination of the Borg Reman you can get.
@gorvar1: Little bit of everything, nicely done. Where the Ikran offical, or something you made up?
@aten66: Jem'Hadar, in a rubber inner tube. Yeah, I'm going to be laughing at that one for a while.
@hughkat82: Very short, voyager reference?
@cosmonaut12345: Interesting background on the Orions. And a nice child-like style to the story.
@jonsills: Good origin story, and some nice interaction with Tovan.
@maverickdude05: A nice view of the Fed tutorial aftermath. Some intersting interaction there.
@patchouli19: Huh, I'd love to know what happened to these guys, given the game starts two years later. Is this made up, or did the race come from somewhere? some good interaction in this one.
@danqueller: Funny one. Something tells me the augment isn't giving the commander enough credit. I think someone else said this, but I'd love to know how that augment ended up with a Romulan commander.
@knightraider6: Adama maneuver!!! Great characters and battle scenes as well.
@amurorx0: Not going to make a weight joke. Kinda funny though, thought I take it that this Cagalli isn't related to the one from Gundam Seed?
@wraithshadow13: A good wrap up from the last story, nice recovery vibe from that and lots of good character interactions.
@patrickngo: Dirty, dangerous, I really have to say you're good at writing about the dark underbelly of Star Trek. Excellent story.
@superhombre777: I have to agree with others I really want to hate Hillel, or at least smack some sense into him. Props for making story about that character that I still wanted to read.
@shevet: Nice as always. I have to say that I'm a fan, but I really liked all of this one, excellent battle, and I loved the banter with Kophil and Amiga.
@ccmurphy: Interesting AU, the ending seemed a bit rushed, but overall good.
@ironphoenix113: Nice little slice of life via ship. And cute.
@asardetemplari: Comes off as a bit silly, not sure if that was what you were going for.
@sodin3: Nice log entry, would like to have seen more about the new officer.
@flightofcrimson: Nicely done. Funny story, but done well.
@flamesight: Nicely done on the Romulan characters, and I loved the Tal'Shiar commander. Very ruthless.
@wraithshadow13 (again): Somehow I can see a Klingon taking to Moby ****. Very nicely done with the action scenes.
@armada: Slightly confusing, but interesting. I would love to see how this character goes from here.
@rageflip: Short, but tells a story. Your captain seems to have an interesting life.
@cmdrscarlet: Intersting way of telling the story. You manage to say a lot with very little.
@gulberat: My favorite devidian's life goes on. Yeah, I don't like T'Nae either. But enjoyable story, nice to see where he came from.
@superhombre777, sander233 and marcusdkane: Yeah, you guys are good. I can't wait to read the next bit of this universe you all have going.
@ambassadormolari: Nice story about switching between ships and new crew. I really like the Ferengi, always wondered about that part of Ferengi law.
@sander233: Aw, young love. Though if Sway is going to keep on like that he might need his own quarters if his dads going to get any sleep. Like the day shift assignment part bringing in the doff system.
@josan369: Nice intro story. Time traveling trills seem popular. I was a bit confused at the begining, but it worked out pretty quick.
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I admit, it was probably just my opinion on Alice, but I remembered superhombre777 saying that he hadn't actually known the identity of the assassin when he wrote the attack on Carter (what better thriller than one the author doesn't know the answer of :eek: ) and was good enough to let me run with my concept, it was a really fun collaboration to participate in :cool:
I'm very glad that you thought it was good - that means a lot coming from someone who writes like Jane Austen... :P
I actually had started to write a conversation about Naja wanting Sway to get his own room and Sway thinking it would be like betraying his father to move out on him (even if it is just down the hall - in my mind Gorn families are extremely close-knit) but I decided it didn't add much to the plot and dropped it. I'll work it into the next story in the sequence.
And yeah, I love working in in-game elements like Doffing (a bunch of my characters are actually just favorite DOffs) and making references to various goings-on (like a particular fleet that likes to put out fires on Drozana); it really helps my immersion and lets me enjoy the game a lot more than a lot of people.
...Oh, baby, you know, I've really got to leave you / Oh, I can hear it callin 'me / I said don't you hear it callin' me the way it used to do?...
- Anne Bredon
I do remember Tylha's fascination with Holst - I just wasn't familiar with "The Perfect Fool" and I knew "Earth" wasn't part of "The Planets." By the way, Bringer of Peace and Bringer of War would be excellent names for a pair of ships...
...Oh, baby, you know, I've really got to leave you / Oh, I can hear it callin 'me / I said don't you hear it callin' me the way it used to do?...
- Anne Bredon
If I was to write a proper Risian Tale for LC46, I don't think it would be tea and crumpets at Miss Blenkensopp's :P