I managed to get my entry in a little earlier this time. It wasn't initially how i was planning to write it but i was overall pleased with out it went out.
I'll have to check out that link and see what mine says, Probably "you write like a 5 year old with a crayon".
I really liked that entry, it's always nice to spend time on Vulcan :cool:
Unspoken in Jenni's story is that she is perfectly aware that her father's' debts, enough to get him sold into the service of a Gorn officer looking for Orion mercenaries for a near-suicide mission, totaled roughly the value of her books, her room, her food, with enough left over to buy herself a place in a technical school for orphan girls.
loving everyones stuff so far, put up the second part of mine. One of these days I need to write up just why Schrodi is insane..and why she gets away with it. it's not so much that she's nuts..she just works on a slightly different plane than most
"It may be better to be a live jackal than a dead lion, but it is better still to be a live lion. And usually easier." R.A.Heinlein
loving everyones stuff so far, put up the second part of mine. One of these days I need to write up just why Schrodi is insane..and why she gets away with it. it's not so much that she's nuts..she just works on a slightly different plane than most
Very nice work.
Though it looks like there might be a Part 3 on the way. I look forward to seeing it if it is coming, and hope it's a good one. :cool:
Though it looks like there might be a Part 3 on the way. I look forward to seeing it if it is coming, and hope it's a good one. :cool:
yeah, working on part three now. though this is actually a bit of an intro for my romulan char, decided to do one afterall, and Rylov sorta is sticking with me.
"It may be better to be a live jackal than a dead lion, but it is better still to be a live lion. And usually easier." R.A.Heinlein
Just as a heads up, I have NO idea if I'll be able to contribute anything after all for this session. Circumstances in real life have left me with very little free time this week. I'll see what I can do, though.
Okay, in the end I did 'blink'-most of the material I put together for this one was too rough for the STO forums-too graphic. as it is, I wound up paring out about 3/4 of the stuff I'd actually outlined and summarizing the rest, hopefully the scenes aren't TOO rough and the story's not too 'jerky' as a result of chainsaw editing.
I'm going to need some time to process. That was a serious story, all right. All I'm ready to say now is that it was no fair using "Red Sector A" like that, man - bypassed the intellectual filters and hit me right in the hippocampus...
Let me guess - the part you had to cut was tied to the second verse...
(For the non-Rush-fans in the audience, the second verse:
I hear the sound of gunfire at the prison gate,
Are the liberators here?
Do I hope or do I fear?
For my father and my brother, it's too late,
But I must help my mother, stand up straight...)
Okay, in the end I did 'blink'-most of the material I put together for this one was too rough for the STO forums-too graphic. as it is, I wound up paring out about 3/4 of the stuff I'd actually outlined and summarizing the rest, hopefully the scenes aren't TOO rough and the story's not too 'jerky' as a result of chainsaw editing.
oh heck no, wasn't too rough at all, well done sir. Though I had pondered using that song in something upcoming, guess I'll find something else
"It may be better to be a live jackal than a dead lion, but it is better still to be a live lion. And usually easier." R.A.Heinlein
@wraithshadow13 - great story moving on from the last one - I really liked the way you depicted T'Pal's recovery at the temple. I also love your story treatment of Wraith as someone his crew/family seems to take for granted but to the reader he's something of an enigma, revealed bit-by-bit. Nice work on this one.
@patrickngo - damn you, I'll never be able to listen to that song the same way again. I'd be extremely interested in seeing some of what you cut out (I think you probably could've pushed the line a bit further) but the edit read smoothly. There were a lot of line-drops mid-sentence though - that was somewhat distracting. But the story itself was riveting and I really loved the way Tran played along with Korolov's cover-up. I thought the way he later used it justify his defection - despite being one of the architects of the conspiracy - was very telling.
...Oh, baby, you know, I've really got to leave you / Oh, I can hear it callin 'me / I said don't you hear it callin' me the way it used to do?...
- Anne Bredon
Okay, in the end I did 'blink'-most of the material I put together for this one was too rough for the STO forums-too graphic. as it is, I wound up paring out about 3/4 of the stuff I'd actually outlined and summarizing the rest, hopefully the scenes aren't TOO rough and the story's not too 'jerky' as a result of chainsaw editing.
Absolutely fantastic entry :eek: / :cool: Really captures the depravity which seems almost societally shared by Cardassians. Not sure if you recal my last entry on LC40, but Marcus was on Bajor around that period as a long-term deep cover assignment (which earned him a promotion in the field) but his hatred for Cardassians is much like that of Drake and Rico. It's a nasty topic, but you handled it well, and kept it under control. Nice work indeed :cool:
@knightraider - they could still name the maneuver after her; Bill Adama's jump into atmosphere, while dangerous, was still into the upper stratosphere, so really no more dangerous to the ship than jumping into a particularly dense nebula. Freefalling through the atmosphere, spitting Vipers like the fist of an angry flaming god, then jumping out while within seconds of the hard deck - that was insane.
I do hope her reality had Television Without Pity, so that universe's equivalent of Hugin could post:
I'm fairly certain that voids the hell out of the warranty. I'm fairly certain there's little red and yellow stickers on the underside of Galactica that say:
"Warning, Do Not Plow Into Some Planet's Unsuspecting Stratosphere Like The World's Grimmest And Most Heavily Armored Fat Kid Jumping Into A Pool Full Of People He Hates Screaming Cannonball With A Grenade In His Teeth, Yeah, We're Talking To You Adama, 'Cause Jesus Christ."
If I'm a Humlon, and I look out of the window of my compound and see this... psychotic act of badassery, in my heart I know we're just never going to subjugate or defeat these people.
reading ya'lls work got me inspired, the third and final part is up. Hope ya enjoy.:cool:
I certainly did! I really liked all the action you packed into the second half, and the ending was simply beautiful. And Schrodi... just makes me laugh in amazement as much as anything.
...Oh, baby, you know, I've really got to leave you / Oh, I can hear it callin 'me / I said don't you hear it callin' me the way it used to do?...
- Anne Bredon
I certainly did! I really liked all the action you packed into the second half, and the ending was simply beautiful. And Schrodi... just makes me laugh in amazement as much as anything.
of course the scary thing..She just made Rear Admiral in game :eek: The Dauntless won't be able to be repaired and she has been given a new ship. The USS Cygnus. Better keep her away from black holes.
"It may be better to be a live jackal than a dead lion, but it is better still to be a live lion. And usually easier." R.A.Heinlein
of course the scary thing..She just made Rear Admiral in game :eek: The Dauntless won't be able to be repaired and she has been given a new ship. The USS Cygnus. Better keep her away from black holes.
Does she have an Android BOff named Vincent?
...Oh, baby, you know, I've really got to leave you / Oh, I can hear it callin 'me / I said don't you hear it callin' me the way it used to do?...
- Anne Bredon
Absolutely fantastic entry :eek: / :cool: Really captures the depravity which seems almost societally shared by Cardassians. Not sure if you recal my last entry on LC40, but Marcus was on Bajor around that period as a long-term deep cover assignment (which earned him a promotion in the field) but his hatred for Cardassians is much like that of Drake and Rico. It's a nasty topic, but you handled it well, and kept it under control. Nice work indeed :cool:
I agree that the Cardassians do have a serious social sickness. That said, I do not believe all Cardassians have fallen to it, and that they are capable of becoming and doing better. That's why I tend to write good Cardassians...not because I am ignoring their past, but because I think there are decent people among them (such as Tekeny Ghemor, in the show).
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of course the scary thing..She just made Rear Admiral in game :eek: The Dauntless won't be able to be repaired and she has been given a new ship. The USS Cygnus. Better keep her away from black holes.
At least it's not the USS Rosinante - then you'd really need to worry about black holes...
Inevitably, there ARE good people among the Cardassians, but the vibe I always got off the show was that the 'old style' Cardies were pretty nasty customers, with their worst/cruelest/nastiest elements running the "Labor camps".
Even within their Military Regime, there were likely Cardassians of Honour and Integrity, compassion, and kindness-decent folks-but you wouldn't FIND such men in the Camps. (Well, Maritza, maybe...)
Such people probably tended to get killed if found out in a place like that--or forced to flee, if caught or about to be caught in acts such as showing compassion to prisoners or trying to help them escape. I consider the situation of the few rebels in the ranks in such regimes on Earth, and that's what I would guess based on that.
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Regarding Cardassian stereotypes I direct your attention to the curious case of Aamin Marritza.
...Oh, baby, you know, I've really got to leave you / Oh, I can hear it callin 'me / I said don't you hear it callin' me the way it used to do?...
- Anne Bredon
I agree that the Cardassians do have a serious social sickness. That said, I do not believe all Cardassians have fallen to it, and that they are capable of becoming and doing better. That's why I tend to write good Cardassians...not because I am ignoring their past, but because I think there are decent people among them (such as Tekeny Ghemor, in the show).
I agree, not all Cardassians are like that, so it is not a genetic predisposition, but as you say, a serious social sickness in the mindset of those preceding generations I would like to say that Marcus would realise it is illogical to judge all members of a group by the actions of a few, but as said in Patrick's entry, some things cannot be unseen: Seeing three officers beat a woman to death because she dared try and stop them TRIBBLE a child, would indeed be one of those things, and he would certainly not automatically extend any kind of trust to a Cardassian until they had proven to him that they were not predatory, as in his five years on Bajor, he would have seen things like that happen a lot...
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"he's as dangerous as a ferret with a chainsaw."
Very nice work.
Though it looks like there might be a Part 3 on the way. I look forward to seeing it if it is coming, and hope it's a good one. :cool:
yeah, working on part three now. though this is actually a bit of an intro for my romulan char, decided to do one afterall, and Rylov sorta is sticking with me.
"he's as dangerous as a ferret with a chainsaw."
(For the non-Rush-fans in the audience, the second verse:
I hear the sound of gunfire at the prison gate,
Are the liberators here?
Do I hope or do I fear?
For my father and my brother, it's too late,
But I must help my mother, stand up straight...)
oh heck no, wasn't too rough at all, well done sir. Though I had pondered using that song in something upcoming, guess I'll find something else
"he's as dangerous as a ferret with a chainsaw."
@patrickngo - damn you, I'll never be able to listen to that song the same way again. I'd be extremely interested in seeing some of what you cut out (I think you probably could've pushed the line a bit further) but the edit read smoothly. There were a lot of line-drops mid-sentence though - that was somewhat distracting. But the story itself was riveting and I really loved the way Tran played along with Korolov's cover-up. I thought the way he later used it justify his defection - despite being one of the architects of the conspiracy - was very telling.
...Oh, baby, you know, I've really got to leave you / Oh, I can hear it callin 'me / I said don't you hear it callin' me the way it used to do?...
- Anne Bredon
Absolutely fantastic entry :eek: / :cool: Really captures the depravity which seems almost societally shared by Cardassians. Not sure if you recal my last entry on LC40, but Marcus was on Bajor around that period as a long-term deep cover assignment (which earned him a promotion in the field) but his hatred for Cardassians is much like that of Drake and Rico. It's a nasty topic, but you handled it well, and kept it under control. Nice work indeed :cool:
"he's as dangerous as a ferret with a chainsaw."
I do hope her reality had Television Without Pity, so that universe's equivalent of Hugin could post:
Definitely liked how it ended.
I'm assuming Schrodinger has the ability to freely cross between Dimensions? I freely admit, I'm rather curious as to how she has that power.
Still trying to come up with an idea for this thing myself, but I'm definitely enjoying what the rest of you are coming up with.
I'm actually working on that-it involves an accident with an FTL computer core, a klutzy ensign, and a cat.
"he's as dangerous as a ferret with a chainsaw."
I... see...
Well, I look forward to reading the details, whenever you get them written down.
I certainly did! I really liked all the action you packed into the second half, and the ending was simply beautiful. And Schrodi... just makes me laugh in amazement as much as anything.
...Oh, baby, you know, I've really got to leave you / Oh, I can hear it callin 'me / I said don't you hear it callin' me the way it used to do?...
- Anne Bredon
of course the scary thing..She just made Rear Admiral in game :eek: The Dauntless won't be able to be repaired and she has been given a new ship. The USS Cygnus. Better keep her away from black holes.
"he's as dangerous as a ferret with a chainsaw."
Does she have an Android BOff named Vincent?
...Oh, baby, you know, I've really got to leave you / Oh, I can hear it callin 'me / I said don't you hear it callin' me the way it used to do?...
- Anne Bredon
I agree that the Cardassians do have a serious social sickness.
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Such people probably tended to get killed if found out in a place like that--or forced to flee, if caught or about to be caught in acts such as showing compassion to prisoners or trying to help them escape. I consider the situation of the few rebels in the ranks in such regimes on Earth, and that's what I would guess based on that.
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...Oh, baby, you know, I've really got to leave you / Oh, I can hear it callin 'me / I said don't you hear it callin' me the way it used to do?...
- Anne Bredon
I agree, not all Cardassians are like that, so it is not a genetic predisposition, but as you say, a serious social sickness in the mindset of those preceding generations