Really enjoyed this, and looking forward to how things work out for D'trel. Omek was as awesome as always :cool:
Yeah, this one was also a one-shot, not really connected to the other "Do'eth"/D'trel stories. I may connect it later, though.
Omek'ti'kallan is very hard to write, but also very rewarding. His concept of deities is also sort of different from the general Western concept, which also makes him cool.
I had planned an elaborate story, with battle sequences and everything, but I kept coming up dry for inspiration. However, the initial setup seemed promising - so that's what you get. Enjoy.
I had planned an elaborate story, with battle sequences and everything, but I kept coming up dry for inspiration. However, the initial setup seemed promising - so that's what you get. Enjoy.
Post 2: Mine. No comment because I'm not that shameless (yet).
Post 3: lorelei5, welcome to the Forums! Very nice story! Good job with the log-entry style. Grammar, format, and spelling are clear, which is nice. All in all, a good monologue.
Post 4: shadzsword: Nice story, clever ideas about how to beat the Iconians!
Post 5: sirboulevard: Beautiful. Very Picard-style triumph of the human (or in this case alien) condition. I applaud you!
Post 6: Me again, because I was still in Obsessive Hyper-creative Redux Mode. Dunce cap for me...
Post 7: jonsills: Niiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiice. Good to know that Grunt is pissing off the right people!
Post 8: mli777: Good story. A lot of Canadian stuff, but that's not a problem for me. A fun read.
So I did something unbefitting a Starfleet officer. But, of course, this was the end and there'd really be no way for us to win against a combined Iconian-Client Race-Undine force without some ridiculous Deus Ex Machina. So I made my own ridiculous Deus Ex Machina that obliterates everything.
And yes, that is something the people in my fleet would come up with. On a whim.
Interesting tale, icerose. You might want to go fix those typos when you get to an actual keyboard - I know typing on an iPhone is no picnic.
Never been a fan of the "it was all a dream" stories, but I think you carried it off about as well as can be expected. Also, I gather you haven't finished the Hakeev arc - it's extremely satisfactory if you're playing a Romulan, but invalidates part of your ending there.
Interesting tale, icerose. You might want to go fix those typos when you get to an actual keyboard - I know typing on an iPhone is no picnic.
Never been a fan of the "it was all a dream" stories, but I think you carried it off about as well as can be expected. Also, I gather you haven't finished the Hakeev arc - it's extremely satisfactory if you're playing a Romulan, but invalidates part of your ending there.
Unless it's Mirror Hakeev.
Can we REALLY trust him as a Doff? :eek:
"A life is like a garden. Perfect moments can be had, but not preserved, except in memory. LLAP"
Sorry about the typos. Also, the truck was ready and i had to get to work. The ending isnt rhe ending but i need to a little research for the proper ending.
Ancient Griffon insult
That one is so stupid, he lost a Rock/Paper/Scissors game to a Pony.
This started as a somewhat self-indulgent image/idea I'd had for a while, but needed something else to attach it to, I hope folks will enjoy my attempt...
For ease of reference/visualization, here're the actors I would cast if I was filming this tomorrow...
Daniella Vorkuta - Christina Moore
I'K'rR'h c'r'nai - Miley Cyrus
Ael t'Kazanak - Colby Smulders
Bellic Chanos - Vin Diesel
This started as a somewhat self-indulgent image/idea I'd had for a while, but needed something else to attach it to, I hope folks will enjoy my attempt...
For ease of reference/visualization, here're the actors I would cast if I was filming this tomorrow...
Daniella Vorkuta - Christina Moore
I'K'rR'h c'r'nai - Miley Cyrus
Ael t'Kazanak - Colby Smulders
Bellic Chanos - Vin Diesel
Awesome as usual, marcus.
And I just love the image of Vin Diesel as Bellic...
EDIT: Typos I saw: "tollerance" and "clothedlessness". Otherwise good.
EDIT: Typos I saw: "tollerance" and "clothedlessness". Otherwise good.
I'll address that in the morning... :cool: The 'anarchic fit of clothedlessness' was a line from a sketch in an episode of the satire The Brass Eye (involving sailors having to conduct drills in their underwear for a captain who insisted on being thrown overboard naked for the 'man overboard drills' ) which I felt fit nicely with the idea of I'K'rR'r running for the bridge in her skivvies in desperation to report quickly
I'll address that in the morning... :cool: The 'anarchic fit of clothedlessness' was a line from a sketch in an episode of the satire The Brass Eye (involving sailors having to conduct drills in their underwear for a captain who insisted on being thrown overboard naked for the 'man overboard drills' ) which I felt fit nicely with the idea of I'K'rR'r running for the bridge in her skivvies in desperation to report quickly
I see. Never seen the reference, but it was hilarious anyway.
I find this an interesting prompt, and want to congratulate Moonshadowdark for it being picked!
I do find the Undine to be unlikely willing to be subservient to the Iconians, but it's a fun ideas to toy with.
I just have a small part to load tonight, but I hope it's worthy of what work is already set up.
Thanks!
I actually pegged the Undine as allies of the Iconians after the 8.5 episode revealed the Undine Cooper. I thought "Man, these Undine are so freaking EVIL, the Iconians would just love them."
Realistically, I think the Iconian-Undine Alliance would be like the Dominion-Cardassian alliance in DS9. Iconians would promise them equality and then later enslave them and take over Fluidic space.
"A life is like a garden. Perfect moments can be had, but not preserved, except in memory. LLAP"
I just want to say, that so far, this piece I'm writing has turned out to be somewhat........ ok, waaaayyyyyyy over the top. And somehow manages to have more people turn up than I expected. Now I just have to write up the fallout.
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A Romulan Strike Team, Missing Farmers and an ancient base on a Klingon Border world. But what connects them? Find out in my First Foundary mission: 'The Jeroan Farmer Escapade'
I just want to say, that so far, this piece I'm writing has turned out to be somewhat........ ok, waaaayyyyyyy over the top. And somehow manages to have more people turn up than I expected. Now I just have to write up the fallout.
Yeah, I kept having the same problem.
I wish that you could write extra-long posts for LCs, but alas, there is only so much space...
Phew. Finally got that piece of epicness posted. You wanted a final battle, you can have a final battle.
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A Romulan Strike Team, Missing Farmers and an ancient base on a Klingon Border world. But what connects them? Find out in my First Foundary mission: 'The Jeroan Farmer Escapade'
I wish that you could write extra-long posts for LCs, but alas, there is only so much space...
That's the challenge part. Heh. Glad you enjoyed it. I normally try to keep clear of existing in game guys, and only have 1 of my toons in the story, but here, everyone just kept appearing shouting Hey, perfect place for me to show up!
I also see no way 8472 would be a willing server of iconians. Especially when they had to be tricked into action. I felt this was a good way to include them from the prompt and do them right. I just hope there are no more stories set in that sphere.
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A Romulan Strike Team, Missing Farmers and an ancient base on a Klingon Border world. But what connects them? Find out in my First Foundary mission: 'The Jeroan Farmer Escapade'
That's the challenge part. Heh. Glad you enjoyed it. I normally try to keep clear of existing in game guys, and only have 1 of my toons in the story, but here, everyone just kept appearing shouting Hey, perfect place for me to show up!
I also see no way 8472 would be a willing server of iconians. Especially when they had to be tricked into action. I felt this was a good way to include them from the prompt and do them right. I just hope there are no more stories set in that sphere.
Agreed. I just left 8472 out of my stories for this one, but I like your workaround better.
Heh, you can just say that this story was a flash-forward. That's what I did with my stories; I made the one non-serious and the other a potential ending on top of it, too.
I do wish there was more space, though, because I now have ideas for a humorous "Nemesis (the Original) beats up Starfleet to find Three" story and a more serious (but still fairly light) "Vengeance crew adjust to having/being timeline clones" story.
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Omek'ti'kallan is very hard to write, but also very rewarding. His concept of deities is also sort of different from the general Western concept, which also makes him cool.
Thanks for the feedback!
Awesome as usual. Grunt is living pwnage.
Indeed.
Having a bit of trouble thinking of something, myself, but I'm definitely enjoying what everyone else is writing. :cool:
Post 1: Smirk's opening post, yay!
Post 2: Mine. No comment because I'm not that shameless (yet).
Post 3: lorelei5, welcome to the Forums! Very nice story! Good job with the log-entry style. Grammar, format, and spelling are clear, which is nice. All in all, a good monologue.
Post 4: shadzsword: Nice story, clever ideas about how to beat the Iconians!
Post 5: sirboulevard: Beautiful. Very Picard-style triumph of the human (or in this case alien) condition. I applaud you!
Post 6: Me again, because I was still in Obsessive Hyper-creative Redux Mode. Dunce cap for me...
Post 7: jonsills: Niiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiice. Good to know that Grunt is pissing off the right people!
Post 8: mli777: Good story. A lot of Canadian stuff, but that's not a problem for me. A fun read.
And yes, that is something the people in my fleet would come up with. On a whim.
Never been a fan of the "it was all a dream" stories, but I think you carried it off about as well as can be expected. Also, I gather you haven't finished the Hakeev arc - it's extremely satisfactory if you're playing a Romulan, but invalidates part of your ending there.
Unless it's Mirror Hakeev.
Can we REALLY trust him as a Doff? :eek:
-Leonard Nimoy, RIP
Then going back and redoing it to shoot him again.
And again.
And again.
I REALLY hate Hakeev, which I suppose is the point.
That one is so stupid, he lost a Rock/Paper/Scissors game to a Pony.
For ease of reference/visualization, here're the actors I would cast if I was filming this tomorrow...
Daniella Vorkuta - Christina Moore
I'K'rR'h c'r'nai - Miley Cyrus
Ael t'Kazanak - Colby Smulders
Bellic Chanos - Vin Diesel
Thoughts, anyone?
Awesome as usual, marcus.
And I just love the image of Vin Diesel as Bellic...
EDIT: Typos I saw: "tollerance" and "clothedlessness". Otherwise good.
Glad you enjoyed it, and yeah, he doesn't make many appearances, but you know he's a badass TRIBBLE when the time comes for him to do something
I'll address that in the morning... :cool: The 'anarchic fit of clothedlessness' was a line from a sketch in an episode of the satire The Brass Eye (involving sailors having to conduct drills in their underwear for a captain who insisted on being thrown overboard naked for the 'man overboard drills' ) which I felt fit nicely with the idea of I'K'rR'r running for the bridge in her skivvies in desperation to report quickly
OK. Sounds good to me.
Vin Diesel. With blue skin.
mind=blown.
I see. Never seen the reference, but it was hilarious anyway.
That one is so stupid, he lost a Rock/Paper/Scissors game to a Pony.
I do find the Undine to be unlikely willing to be subservient to the Iconians, but it's a fun ideas to toy with.
I just have a small part to load tonight, but I hope it's worthy of what work is already set up.
Thanks!
I actually pegged the Undine as allies of the Iconians after the 8.5 episode revealed the Undine Cooper. I thought "Man, these Undine are so freaking EVIL, the Iconians would just love them."
Realistically, I think the Iconian-Undine Alliance would be like the Dominion-Cardassian alliance in DS9. Iconians would promise them equality and then later enslave them and take over Fluidic space.
-Leonard Nimoy, RIP
A Romulan Strike Team, Missing Farmers and an ancient base on a Klingon Border world. But what connects them? Find out in my First Foundary mission: 'The Jeroan Farmer Escapade'
Yeah, I kept having the same problem.
I wish that you could write extra-long posts for LCs, but alas, there is only so much space...
A Romulan Strike Team, Missing Farmers and an ancient base on a Klingon Border world. But what connects them? Find out in my First Foundary mission: 'The Jeroan Farmer Escapade'
I liked the re-working :cool: Inboxed you the scene from the Brass Eye :cool:
Thanks!
The story is even funnier with the reference.
That's the challenge part. Heh. Glad you enjoyed it. I normally try to keep clear of existing in game guys, and only have 1 of my toons in the story, but here, everyone just kept appearing shouting Hey, perfect place for me to show up!
I also see no way 8472 would be a willing server of iconians. Especially when they had to be tricked into action. I felt this was a good way to include them from the prompt and do them right. I just hope there are no more stories set in that sphere.
A Romulan Strike Team, Missing Farmers and an ancient base on a Klingon Border world. But what connects them? Find out in my First Foundary mission: 'The Jeroan Farmer Escapade'
Agreed. I just left 8472 out of my stories for this one, but I like your workaround better.
Heh, you can just say that this story was a flash-forward. That's what I did with my stories; I made the one non-serious and the other a potential ending on top of it, too.
I do wish there was more space, though, because I now have ideas for a humorous "Nemesis (the Original) beats up Starfleet to find Three" story and a more serious (but still fairly light) "Vengeance crew adjust to having/being timeline clones" story.
:eek: What happened to Jenna?? :eek:
:cool: I'd hoped the scenes would come across as humorous, rather than a completely hauled before the captain disciplinary :cool:
Don't worry, they were good.
God, I so wish I could have another 5000 words or so for this. I have so many plot bunnies...