Literary Challenge #65 - Myths & Lore
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I may not have one this month--if I did, it would be a hell of an uphill battle with Admiral "OpSec" ch'Harrell about letting cameras on his ships, and Alyosha's response was in these words: "Oh, no. Oh, GOD, no. No cameras aboard this ship. GOD no."
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Why, 'cause they'd reveal him as Devidian? (Just curious.)
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The other problem is the fleet admiral, ch'Harrell. In a sector where he has to fight the True Way and be concerned about information security breaches and so forth, he would fight tooth and nail to keep camera crews out of his sector.
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...just as soon as I think of an idea, and just as soon as I find a way to overcome the writer's block that's more or less nipped my LC writing in the bud.
-Leonard Nimoy, RIP
Just so we're clear with Three, when I said it could be any genre of film, that excludes snuff, erotica and indie.
The first two are pretty self explanatory.
I just refuse to believe that the idyllic, enlightened future Star Trek portrays would still consider indie films an actual genre of film.
JUST BECAUSE THAT ONE FLICK GOT OUT OF SUNDANCE AND MADE TONS OF CASH ON DVD DOES NOT MEAN IT'S A VIABLE OPTION FOR A SUMMER MOVIE! NO!
:mad:
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And a very *cough*sucky*cough* way to do Enter-I mean Voyager rewrite. *Dark Chuckle*
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...you do realize that I'm going to have an indie film for it if I do that challenge now?
#wellthatplanbackfired :P
I think I have an idea for this one. Oh, yes. It's even better because Alpha actually is a Soong-type android. It's like christmas!
Trials of Blood and Fire
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In Cold Blood
No snuff?? Damn :mad:
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Yeah, I'm pretty sure that it's an accidental misspelling of a four-letter word that is an anagram of a popular antiacid.
marcusdkane, the character Gol'dun is a member of that species we talked about. Like you said, the concept was just too cool not to use.
Thoughts, anyone?
I understood the context, I was just being snarky that Three won't be participating in a snuff movie
LOL! :P
Well, she's already been in one of the *ahem* ruder kind, but I have no interest in writing that out.
And besides, I can't really see her in any of these, unless it's beating up Janeway and Neelix because reasons.
This was no worse than what the Cardassians did to Picard, but when D'trel's mission could have covered any number of other scenarios, I would have preferred to read something different, and I will admit, I very nearly stopped reading before D'trel and co beamed down...
On a technical level, it was a well-written, tightly paced piece. I did find the amount of turakil words somewhat jarring without explanations, and not always immediately obvious as to their meaning, so I felt that broke the flow of reading a little, but otherwise, it was a very solidly written piece...
With the turakil words, I was trying to get a bit of flavor without stopping for lengthy explanations. The intent was to have context and such help explain the words as the piece went. If it was jarring...Well, it's something to work on in the future.
On the first part: Yeah, I'm not going to write anything truly awful, but I kind of wanted that scene at the end, which I personally feel went off really well, so I made it about as dark as I'm willing to go and left the precise details out.
I think because it's a totally unknown culture, it was more jarring than if it was a culture which was understood, but of course, the notion of a first contact scenario does somewhat preclude that.
It wasn't so much the content as the concept... A whole galaxy of possibilities, of things D'trel could have seen, and you write a torture scene... I'm not going to harp on about it, but frankly, I was disappointed.
--Yeah, first contact is always tricky...
--Mmh, good point. I guess it's a result of my mood; I've been pretty depressed lately at everything from stupid politicians being even more stupid than usual, to the Al Qaeda in Iraq situation, to the fact that that twisted psychopath Assad is still in power...
You get the idea. I bet that if I wasn't so cynical right now, I would've written something else.
But again, that scene at the end with Anderson the filmmaker was worth it, in my opinion.
That was a good piece, I thought it was refreshingly dark, and not at all what I expected when I read the premise for Challenge 2. I think you did an excellent job with the implied badness without needing any graphic gory details. From my perspective, if you had gone much futher it would have been unnecessary and made for a harder read.
It also seems in-line with what we know of the Tal Shiar, and their obsessive desperation to acquire new technology at all costs.
I really liked what you wrote about Gol'dun and his species, and I hope to hear more about their culture in the future. I really love it when authors highlight the differences between these alien cultures and our own status quo.
Also, I thought you captured his alien perspective very well. I hope D'trel kept an unedited copy of that holocam footage, I suspect there may be some repercussions when Gol'dun's people come looking for him.
You will, but probably not for a little while; I need to find a way to bring them in.
And yes, D'trel kept a copy. It's only right, after all, to give people's relatives closure.
Thanks for the review, and I'm glad that you enjoyed it!
The first thing I thought of when I saw the prompt for #2 was the Stargate SG-1 two-parter "Heroes". That piece was reminiscent of the episode in a very good way.
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I actually spent multiple days on the turakil. They have a very interesting sort of reverse-sexist society based on inherent sexual dimorphism, and very strong views on proper funeral rituals (which I referenced in Gol'dun's fury at Dorak incinerating a prisoner).
Ungkat is like a combination of Buddhist reincarnation and certain forms of nature worship mixed with aspects of Sumerian mythology and taken up to eleven. It was hard but fun to come up with.
I'm glad that you enjoyed it, and thanks for the review!
Well, thank you! I have to say that I love "Heroes" as a piece of art, but I can never forgive them for killing off Janet...:mad:
I'm not very good at names, especially alien names, so I'm looking for some help. I'm looking for some 2409 celebrity names that allude to our current Hollywood Celebrities.
What would you name a Klingon Robert De Niro? or an Andorian Brad Pitt? or a Vulcan Jennifer Lawrence?
Oh, and K'im Cardassian need not apply... :P
Brad ch'Pitt
T'lawrence
R'obert of the House of Niro
Best I could come up with really fast...
I really liked this one. It was tight and controlled as well as playing to the nature of the stories that D'trel usually finds herself in. I also really liked the ending. Somber, yes, but also very positive in its own way.
My only other note is that I found the alien thoughts words you crammed in to interesting and appropriate. You do have a knack for making alien species living things in your writing and I was happy to see another one.