Thank you for the review and feedback, fixing the quest up now based on that. Didn't notice the map/monster names in the Foundry, could've sworn I changed them... Guess it didn't go through or I didn't hit publish afterwards xD
Going to continue a bit more of your campaign tonight hopefully. Thanks again for the feedback!
Your welcome. I hope you enjoy the rest of mine as well, and thanks for playing.
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orangefireeMember, NW M9 PlaytestPosts: 1,148Arc User
edited March 2014
Part seven is out! Sorry for the delay.
Neverwinter players are stubborn things....until you strip them down to bone. (Cursed players, my flowers, MINE!) Oh how I plotted their demise.
orangefireeMember, NW M9 PlaytestPosts: 1,148Arc User
edited March 2014
Just ran through the quest with my 7k GS level 60 cleric to make sure the difficulty isn't too hard. I decided to nerf a couple fights and move a couple other encounters further apart based on his experience.
I also found a few typos which I fixed.
Neverwinter players are stubborn things....until you strip them down to bone. (Cursed players, my flowers, MINE!) Oh how I plotted their demise.
Shadow Investigation - 3/5
*The book explaining the previous chapters is a nice touch.
*Typo: "Hopefully your stay here will be a little more pleasant then last time." Should be "than".
*Why is the Lord Protector called Neverhelping? If it's supposed to be a dig at Lord Neverember, it doesn't really come off that way.
*Typo: "You here strange whispers..." should be "hear".
*Typo: "You have no idea how whispering can be louder then your normal voice..." Should be "than".
*With regards to the above sentence, it's pretty redundant. Essentially, "You have no idea how this works but it still doesn't make sense." It feels like the second part should be more along the lines of "yet somehow it is."
*When you talk to Vlathis upon entering Vijjial's "House," she tells you that Vijjial is powerful, however little is known about him, however this is not a house. The third sentence is completely unrelated to the first two and shouldn't start with "however."
*Vijjial sure seems to be a big fan of Szass Tam.
*Typo: "You friend spent five years in the Shadowfell." Should be "your".
*Typo: "I always have keep a few weeklings around as well." Should be "have to keep" and "weaklings".
*Typo: "In the mean time, I am out of ideas." Should be "meantime".
*Typo: "All right." Should be "Alright".
The End of Shadows - 3/5
*Typo: "Once they done the same..." Should be "they've".
*The rubble in the courtyard in the Shadowfell seems a bit... uniform, I guess? It has the impression of being just copy/pasted across the whole thing. Some more variation of ground cover would go a long way. Alternatively, you could probably add more - enough to cover the entire courtyard and overlapping with each other.
*Typo: "It looks like ther are not actively looking for me, though there are a lot more guards then when I escaped." Should be "they" and "than". ("Then" is an adverb meaning "at that time," whereas "than" is a conjunction used for comparing things.)
*Typo: "Lets go destroy some shadows then." Should be "Let's".
*The Temple of Shadow feels very claustrophobic. I like it.
*In fact, the design of the Temple of Shadow overall is quite effective. It could really use some music or ambient sound though.
*The Extreme Challenge Hard Mode wasn't nearly as hard as I was expecting from such a description.
Shadow Investigation - 3/5
*The book explaining the previous chapters is a nice touch.
*Typo: "Hopefully your stay here will be a little more pleasant then last time." Should be "than".
*Why is the Lord Protector called Neverhelping? If it's supposed to be a dig at Lord Neverember, it doesn't really come off that way.
*Typo: "You here strange whispers..." should be "hear".
*Typo: "You have no idea how whispering can be louder then your normal voice..." Should be "than".
*With regards to the above sentence, it's pretty redundant. Essentially, "You have no idea how this works but it still doesn't make sense." It feels like the second part should be more along the lines of "yet somehow it is."
*When you talk to Vlathis upon entering Vijjial's "House," she tells you that Vijjial is powerful, however little is known about him, however this is not a house. The third sentence is completely unrelated to the first two and shouldn't start with "however."
*Vijjial sure seems to be a big fan of Szass Tam.
*Typo: "You friend spent five years in the Shadowfell." Should be "your".
*Typo: "I always have keep a few weeklings around as well." Should be "have to keep" and "weaklings".
*Typo: "In the mean time, I am out of ideas." Should be "meantime".
*Typo: "All right." Should be "Alright".
The End of Shadows - 3/5
*Typo: "Once they done the same..." Should be "they've".
*The rubble in the courtyard in the Shadowfell seems a bit... uniform, I guess? It has the impression of being just copy/pasted across the whole thing. Some more variation of ground cover would go a long way. Alternatively, you could probably add more - enough to cover the entire courtyard and overlapping with each other.
*Typo: "It looks like ther are not actively looking for me, though there are a lot more guards then when I escaped." Should be "they" and "than". ("Then" is an adverb meaning "at that time," whereas "than" is a conjunction used for comparing things.)
*Typo: "Lets go destroy some shadows then." Should be "Let's".
*The Temple of Shadow feels very claustrophobic. I like it.
*In fact, the design of the Temple of Shadow overall is quite effective. It could really use some music or ambient sound though.
*The Extreme Challenge Hard Mode wasn't nearly as hard as I was expecting from such a description.
Weird, your part VII review isn't appearing unless I quote you. Thanks for playing them though.
Vlathis doesn't really like Neverember. Mainly since he is always sitting on his throne.
The rubble uses several different varieties, however those varieties do seem to look very similar.
The actually expected to extreme challenge hard mode to be a lot harder then it turned out.
Neverwinter players are stubborn things....until you strip them down to bone. (Cursed players, my flowers, MINE!) Oh how I plotted their demise.
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orangefireeMember, NW M9 PlaytestPosts: 1,148Arc User
edited March 2014
Part VIII: The Halls of Insanity is now released!
Neverwinter players are stubborn things....until you strip them down to bone. (Cursed players, my flowers, MINE!) Oh how I plotted their demise.
I played the first 3 parts of the series and left you detailed PMs on SE about where they could use tweaking. For the most part they were enjoyable and I'm going to begin on the next 3 tomorrow.
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orangefireeMember, NW M9 PlaytestPosts: 1,148Arc User
I played the first 3 parts of the series and left you detailed PMs on SE about where they could use tweaking. For the most part they were enjoyable and I'm going to begin on the next 3 tomorrow.
Thanks for the feedback. Looking forward to seeing your review for the rest.
I'm working on getting some more feedback for your quests, though I plan to be in the foundry most of today.
I sent a couple PMs on Scribes' Enclave though for two more of your quests.
Neverwinter players are stubborn things....until you strip them down to bone. (Cursed players, my flowers, MINE!) Oh how I plotted their demise.
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orangefireeMember, NW M9 PlaytestPosts: 1,148Arc User
edited April 2014
Lets see if this works
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orangefireeMember, NW M9 PlaytestPosts: 1,148Arc User
edited April 2014
Just another attachment test.
Edit: Yay! It worked! Now to get some screenshots from my foundry quests. Pretty easy if I could actually get in game.
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orangefireeMember, NW M9 PlaytestPosts: 1,148Arc User
edited April 2014
Here are some screenshots for Part I: The Shadowfell Disciples. Enjoy.
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orangefireeMember, NW M9 PlaytestPosts: 1,148Arc User
edited April 2014
And some screenshots for Part II: The Demonweb Game.
Neverwinter players are stubborn things....until you strip them down to bone. (Cursed players, my flowers, MINE!) Oh how I plotted their demise.
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Your welcome. I hope you enjoy the rest of mine as well, and thanks for playing.
I will seek it out soon as I get time.
I also found a few typos which I fixed.
*The book explaining the previous chapters is a nice touch.
*Typo: "Hopefully your stay here will be a little more pleasant then last time." Should be "than".
*Why is the Lord Protector called Neverhelping? If it's supposed to be a dig at Lord Neverember, it doesn't really come off that way.
*Typo: "You here strange whispers..." should be "hear".
*Typo: "You have no idea how whispering can be louder then your normal voice..." Should be "than".
*With regards to the above sentence, it's pretty redundant. Essentially, "You have no idea how this works but it still doesn't make sense." It feels like the second part should be more along the lines of "yet somehow it is."
*When you talk to Vlathis upon entering Vijjial's "House," she tells you that Vijjial is powerful, however little is known about him, however this is not a house. The third sentence is completely unrelated to the first two and shouldn't start with "however."
*Vijjial sure seems to be a big fan of Szass Tam.
*Typo: "You friend spent five years in the Shadowfell." Should be "your".
*Typo: "I always have keep a few weeklings around as well." Should be "have to keep" and "weaklings".
*Typo: "In the mean time, I am out of ideas." Should be "meantime".
*Typo: "All right." Should be "Alright".
The End of Shadows - 3/5
*Typo: "Once they done the same..." Should be "they've".
*The rubble in the courtyard in the Shadowfell seems a bit... uniform, I guess? It has the impression of being just copy/pasted across the whole thing. Some more variation of ground cover would go a long way. Alternatively, you could probably add more - enough to cover the entire courtyard and overlapping with each other.
*Typo: "It looks like ther are not actively looking for me, though there are a lot more guards then when I escaped." Should be "they" and "than". ("Then" is an adverb meaning "at that time," whereas "than" is a conjunction used for comparing things.)
*Typo: "Lets go destroy some shadows then." Should be "Let's".
*The Temple of Shadow feels very claustrophobic. I like it.
*In fact, the design of the Temple of Shadow overall is quite effective. It could really use some music or ambient sound though.
*The Extreme Challenge Hard Mode wasn't nearly as hard as I was expecting from such a description.
Check out my Foundry questline, The Brightstone Explorers' Guild, now archived on Youtube!
Weird, your part VII review isn't appearing unless I quote you. Thanks for playing them though.
Vlathis doesn't really like Neverember. Mainly since he is always sitting on his throne.
The rubble uses several different varieties, however those varieties do seem to look very similar.
The actually expected to extreme challenge hard mode to be a lot harder then it turned out.
I played the first 3 parts of the series and left you detailed PMs on SE about where they could use tweaking. For the most part they were enjoyable and I'm going to begin on the next 3 tomorrow.
"...projects are never finished, only abandoned....."
HellsHot is a proud member of Scribes' Enclave.
1. The Haronomous Saga NWS-DJIKP5IWK a four part, story driven, campaign.
2. The Ruins of Xylon NWS-DC76ORA4I a two part, dungeon crawl.
3. Armor Odyssey NWS-DAUPTR46M a three part, story driven, odyssey.
Thanks for the feedback. Looking forward to seeing your review for the rest.
I'm working on getting some more feedback for your quests, though I plan to be in the foundry most of today.
I sent a couple PMs on Scribes' Enclave though for two more of your quests.
Edit: Yay! It worked! Now to get some screenshots from my foundry quests. Pretty easy if I could actually get in game.