For the Decemberist, I had a flashback to the film Enemy at the Gates about the siege of Leningrad. So, how about making him a super-sniper, whose abilities emerged during the siege? Useful Powers could include Invisibility for sneaking around; Mind Scan to target foes at a great distance without even needing to see them; or No Range Penalty as a Naked Advantage for guns, representing his incredible accuracy with firearms. These abilities would make him a superb covert assassin for the KGB to send into other countries, which could bring him into conflict with the Falcon and your other PCs. Throw in some high-tech weapons and you'll have a dangerous opponent, maybe not in a stand-up fight but lethal from ambush.
RATHER... i think it would be more compelling to see a character who is a good person, raised by good people.... who has utterly lost the trust of his parents.
His older brother breaks into parents lab to steal advanced technology to sell on the black market (Older brother was taught good principles but left alone to follow them through pride and concete, becoming vain, spoiled, aloof, and arrogant... and in the end aquired debts and shady contacts through vice and wrecklessness)
Quin catches Davis in the act, looses a scuffle.... but in the end, he takes the rap for his brother.
Police raid the lab and find Quin. They ask who his confederates are but he refuses to name names.
arround the trial, davis pledges to "prove his brother's innocence" (which he does by yahting around Italy and playing lots of golf.)
Unable to recover from the distruction and theft of their work, his parents begin working for the government specifically, designing new weapons technology.
Through various circumstances, Quin is released after time served (15 months, with good behavior) to return home. His parents no longer trust or respect him, and though they treat him kindly... they dont show the same affection or openness they used to.
Quin, bitter at his parents rejection and his brother's betrayal (no way to even expose Davis, now that he was the criminal and his brother the saint).... Quin attempts to commit the crime he went to prison for.
breaking into his parents lab, he discovers the pieces of the suit. a weapon. Wracked with guilt, and angry that his parents are designing tools of distruction (where before they primarily worked on civil technology), he steals the suit and begins fighting crime.
Out of the suit, he's a young man most people overlook as a statistic. just another young black male who's been to prison.
In the suit he's a man to be respected, a role model, a hero.
In his own way, he's living up to the ideals his parents had, his brother claims to have, and Quin believes in. without the mask on, he may not ever be able to regain his parent's trust or respect, but that wont stop him from doing what he knows is right.
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Meanwhile, Davis used his stolen goods, and the money they aquired to live a life of luxury, indoctrinating himself into a world of high-tech crime for fun and profit. He used the money his parents give him to help his brother, to fund elaborate technological heists and used the gains from those heists to fund a small company of hi-tech theives and mercenaries.
Shortly after Quin begins hero work, Davis fakes his own death, to detach himself from his family and reinvent his persona as Crux, an international criminal kingpin....
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perhaps after being a hero for a while, Nexus Prime goes public, and finally reconsiles with his parents (and making himself a target to Crux and his various contacts.)
Thats brilliant on so many levels. Im definitly going to be taking alot of ideas from this Thank you very very much.
if its a more serious story, you might consider "why" Johnny can shape shift into a dingo.
likewise... WHY is he cold-hearted, anarchistic, and arrogant?
im not seeing much in the way of motivation.
with his attitude and powers, I'd go for a costume that fits his anti-establishment personality...
One of the character's in "rate-my-hero" had a top that was like sleeveless under-armor, with disconnected sleeves... something like that world work, maybe wear a jacket some of the time (with fake fur trim and patches!) or maybe the tanker-top is more like a super-tight hoody, hood up or hood down.
pants, just some baggy cargos and combat boots.
he changes into a dingo.... he's basically a werewolf.... take that to heart.... perhaps he can channel some of his "dingo-ness" while still looking human... biting, clawing, that sort of thing.
another thought is that, as a dingo... he has a "pack" that he belongs to... so while he's against human society, he DOES have a "community" to be a part of (could be especially fun to show some interactions between John and his packmates, as Dingos... or even using his ability to become human to help his brethren out.)
in game this could translate into some sort of "summon dingo" ability (or wolf, dog, something close, ya know?)
Name: John Nightshade (His last name was given do to his poisonous outlook on life. As well as his useo f poisons while fighting)
Nationality: Australian
Age: Late teens to early twenties
Physical Characteristics: Medium height, Lean built, Ginger hair, grey eyes, reddish skin
Emotional characteristics: Arrogance, Cold Hearted ,Anarchist
Mission Statemate: He doesn't care who gets hurt as long as the Job gets done.
Heroics: Hero for hire/ Anti hero
Possible Powers: Boomerang throwing, Shapeshifting into Dingo, Spear fighting, and Posions.
Background: Long ago in Austraila, several tribes of Aboriginals dedicated themselves to worshiping the god Canidae and his sons Vulpini and Canini. For awhile they lived in peace but then came the British supervillains brought over to imprisoned in their new prison colony. The tribes had no idea that three supervillains brother known as the swine brother would soon descend on them...Too be continued.
Costumes: Hoody, Jeans and sneaks.. he tends to like to blend in.
Help Needed: Hero Name and other powers that work well with shapeshifting more to come could still really use some help though.
Going to explain personality in his background.
Greetings. Sorta new around here, so while I'm waiting for the official release of Champions Online, I felt it appropriate to toss out the main idea I've got goin' for me for my upcoming hero.
Technically, though, he's not really a hero. Either found inside the basement of his house or at the local fast food joint, Gregory could hardly be called 'super'. Severely overweight, wears glasses, and isn't much for physical activity, he's got the brains where it counts, since he's an A+ college student. However, he's read too much comic books and manga that he decided to create his own robotic hero: The Iron Guardian. IG (short for Iron Guardian) and it's original programming were actually based off of an old AI program that Gregory made as a science project for the local fair, so it has independant thought. Often, however, Gregory will control IG's controls from his home computer (which often involves a pair of joysticks and several keypads, not to mention a healthy dose of caffeine). Gregory, however, had adaptibility in mind, so while IG uses the same basic robotic frame, Gregory can easily switch the robot between heavy-duty melee combat to skilled ranged firepower support or to stealthy operations. However, Gregory has noticed that IG is often very socially awkward, and not exactly keen on human nuances, so Gregory will sometimes override IG's actions and speech patterns, making some heroes that know IG to think that there's two people stuck in IG's harddrive.
Name: John Nightshade (His last name was given do to his poisonous outlook on life. As well as his useo f poisons while fighting)
Nationality: Australian
Age: Late teens to early twenties
Physical Characteristics: Medium height, Lean built, Ginger hair, grey eyes, reddish skin
Emotional characteristics: Arrogance, Cold Hearted ,Anarchist
Mission Statemate: He doesn't care who gets hurt as long as the Job gets done.
Heroics: Hero for hire/ Anti hero
Possible Powers: Boomerang throwing, Shapeshifting into Dingo, Spear fighting, and Posions.
Background: Long ago in Austraila, several tribes of Aboriginals dedicated themselves to worshiping the god Canidae and his sons Vulpini and Canini. For awhile they lived in peace but then came the British supervillains brought over to imprisoned in their new prison colony. The tribes had no idea that three supervillains brother known as the swine brother would soon descend on them...Too be continued.
Costumes: Hoody, Jeans and sneaks.. he tends to like to blend in.
Help Needed: Hero Name and other powers that work well with shapeshifting more to come could still really use some help though.
Going to explain personality in his background.
take this one back to the notepad, and hash it out a bit. honestly it doesnt make much sense.
another thing to consider... Nightshade, Belladonna, is known to force the eyes to dilate. It was used in romantic Italy by women to make them look amorous and intelligent (hence the plant's name "Beautiful Lady")
just a note on the different meanings of names.... you might do some research and look for a particularly "Australian" poison to use for John's name... ground him to his location a bit better.
Also, you speak of aboriginal customs as being the origin of John's powers.... but john is ruddy of Caucasian descent of some sort (Irish most likely with the ginger hair and light eyes)
if westerners were considered by the aborigines to be "villains" when they came, why would they bestow their skin-walker abilities on him?
is it something that, perhaps, he was born with, and sought the remnants of the tribe out for some sort of explanation?
I'm looking for information on Millennium City both current and prior to Detroits destruction.
I've tried everywhere but no where free, any help would be great, can you send me some info in a PM please.
From what I've heard, Detroit was pretty much just Detroit before the whole being destroyed thing. Though, there were super heroes, so that's different.
From what I've heard, Detroit was pretty much just Detroit before the whole being destroyed thing. Though, there were super heroes, so that's different.
What exactly are you looking for?
How did it get destroyed? Who took part in it? Who led the rebuilding process?
How did it get destroyed? Who took part in it? Who led the rebuilding process?
Dr. Destroyer (the big bad in Champions) blew it up with a space weapon and used it as a distraction to escape from a massive group of heroes. The US rebuilt it.
Dr. Destroyer (the big bad in Champions) blew it up with a space weapon and used it as a distraction to escape from a massive group of heroes. The US rebuilt it.
hi there GhostHak been awhile. I see you have kept rather busy. thats awesome.
I had real life get me when i least expected it. I am back now with a vengeance and a ton of ideas and backstory for one of my supers. What I am really interested in finding out. Is there a way to Copyright a name with a likeness for Superheros? if it as simple as saying Its my original idea and putting a Copyright symbol and date or do i need to go through certain channels?
I'm looking online right now to see what it entails. if you have any idea it would be appreciated.
I posted another intro thread just cause its been so long since i posted. I will be posting a nice piece of backstory tomorrow or monday for Fireplug. I would be most appreciative if you were to take a look at it Ghosthack.
as far as copywriting... its an offical thing, that needs to be paid for... saying its yours isnt good enough (neither is the old trick of dating a copy and mailing it to yourself, and never opening it.)
as for the story, I'm judging the writing contest atm, but if its a quick enough read, I'll definatly look at it
I got some problems character wise I hope you all can help out with.
Devil Squid is a cross between a comical and serious hero, depending on what's going on at the time and what kind of mood he's in. He got his powers via 'science gone awry.' The powers I have in mind for him are ink blasts and durability.
Sadly that's about as far as I can get at the moment. I don't have a good origin or idea for why 'science went awry' and I'm uncertain what kind of powers would be good for him. His fighting style would be more close quarters unarmed street fighting with some acrobatic and martial arts displays.
Any thoughts?
Thanks.:)
For an origin, I suggest medical research attempting to adapt cephalopod limb regeneration to humans who have lost their limbs due to disease or accident, perhaps infusing cephalopod genes into a human body. Devil Squid may have been the scientist developing the treatment, or someone close to that scientist. There should be a reason why the treatment had an unpredictable result -- perhaps it wasn't thoroughly tested, but Devil Squid was desperate to regain mobility, e.g. because he used to be an athlete (which might have a bearing on his fighting style).
As far as powers go, the degree to which Devil Squid's body has mutated could affect what you can justify. How much does Devil Squid look like his namesake? Ink blasts to blind an opponent are not unreasonable even for a human form, but cephalopods also propel themselves via water "jets," and if his body is sufficiently adapted he might be able to fire bursts of air, for movement or to attack. His arms might stretch like tentacles, or even form tentacles; and suction pads could enable him to cling to walls like Spider-Man. He could grow additional limbs, permanently or "on demand." Squids and octopi have very strong beaks for cracking shellfish, and squids have claws on the ends of some of their tentacles. If Devil Squid also has some octopus DNA in him, he might gain that creature's ability to mimic the color of his surroundings for camoflage. Of course this origin presupposes research into regeneration, so he ought to have the ability to rapidly heal wounds and grow back lost body parts.
For an origin, I suggest medical research attempting to adapt cephalopod limb regeneration to humans who have lost their limbs due to disease or accident, perhaps infusing cephalopod genes into a human body. Devil Squid may have been the scientist developing the treatment, or someone close to that scientist. There should be a reason why the treatment had an unpredictable result -- perhaps it wasn't thoroughly tested, but Devil Squid was desperate to regain mobility, e.g. because he used to be an athlete (which might have a bearing on his fighting style).
As far as powers go, the degree to which Devil Squid's body has mutated could affect what you can justify. How much does Devil Squid look like his namesake? Ink blasts to blind an opponent are not unreasonable even for a human form, but cephalopods also propel themselves via water "jets," and if his body is sufficiently adapted he might be able to fire bursts of air, for movement or to attack. His arms might stretch like tentacles, or even form tentacles; and suction pads could enable him to cling to walls like Spider-Man. He could grow additional limbs, permanently or "on demand." Squids and octopi have very strong beaks for cracking shellfish, and squids have claws on the ends of some of their tentacles. If Devil Squid also has some octopus DNA in him, he might gain that creature's ability to mimic the color of his surroundings for camoflage. Of course this origin presupposes research into regeneration, so he ought to have the ability to rapidly heal wounds and grow back lost body parts.
It certainly gives me a lot to think about. Do cephalapods grow back limbs? I didn't know that.
The suction pads would definitely be cool, as well as the tentacle/suction pad claws.
And regeneration is always cool.
As for origins, I don't think the character I have in mind would be a scientist, though friend to a scientist might work. Not sure about him missing a limb though, the idea was it was completely an accident, plus I like the idea of him falling in a pool of stuff. Maybe some of the prototype chemicals fell into the squid experiment tank/pool shortly before/after him.
A speedy, electric-based hero who's a little bit cocky and loves to take risks. He knows it's a stupid thing to do, but he doesn't care. Despite this, he's still a great hero and always thinking about what's best for the world. I'm not too sure what his nemesis will be like, but he'll probably be big and strong and easily annoyed by Sparky's insane antics. Any ideas for a backstory?
Okay, I need help with my guy. I know a few specific things about him, but not really how to put it down well.
Name:
- Kolman Anderson (Might need another last name, but Kolman is definately the first name)
Hero Name:
- Gonna need one of these
Desciption:
- 6'5"
- White (pretty pale)
- Skinny (really skinny )
- Blonde hair, grey-green eyes.
- 19 years old
Basic backstory:
Kolman developed powers when he was about 16 years old, but never really showed them off or told anybody because he thought people would think he was weird. His power was the ability to create and control fire, blue fire to be exact. His powers were relatively weak because he had no idea how to properly use them, but he was still able to produce balls of fire and focus the flame around his feet to hover a couple of feet off of the ground, but he was angry that he was not able to do more.
While out one day Kolman saw the edge of a poster out of the shadow in a dark alleyway... it said something about "Powers". When he got closer he noticed it said "Are you different? Better than the rest? Join [company/school name here] and learn to control you powers." Thinking this was the best thing he had ever seen, Kolman decided to run away from home that night. He arrived at the [school/building, whatever.] and realized it wasn't exactly what he expected, but it was too late to turn back and he went inside.
Upon entering the [school/building] he was greeted by an older man named Dr. [needs a name, but I'll get to this a bit later]. Dr. [needs a name] talked to Kolman and told him about all of the wonderful things the [school/company] would be able to offer him to help with his powers. Kolman practiced and trained for the next three years, not much more than working on his powers. During his training The Scientist [Dr. What's-his-name] asked Kolman if he would like a job helping the [school/company] with some problems they were having. Excitedly, Kolman accepted the offer.
The Scientist went on to show Kolman some of the lesser known part of the facility [school/company building??] in which he was working on things such as high-tech "servant" robots, suits of power armor, and doors to areas Kolman was never to enter. The Scientist, unfortunately, told Kolman his powers weren't nearly as strong as they "should be". Kolman found this odd, but asked Dr. "What's-his-name" what he should do. Dr. [name here] said, "Don't worry, I have something that may help you.", and he lead Kolman into an area where they made Power Armor. Dr. [needs a name!!] walked ahead of Kolman to a pedestal with a suit of armor standing on it. The armor was relatively old-looking compared to the other suits the Scientist had throughout the room. Dr. [name] said, "This," pointing to the suit of armor," is now yours." Kolman was in shock, he had never been given anything that would come close to this.
The Scientist went on to introduce Kolman to a series of trainers who would help in learning how to use the armor and repair it. One of the newest researchers, [Needs a name, a cool guy name. ], became good friends with Kolman and showed him some extra tips he said the other trainers wouldn't show him and even showed him how to upgrade the armor. [New researcher guy] told Kolman that he had been recruited in much the same way as Kolman, seeing advertisement about a facility in need of researchers who want to work on things "the world had never seen before."
This suit was amazing, it amplified (right word?) Kolman's power to create and control fire and even boosted his control of how the fire worked around his body, giving him the ability to concentrate it to [power here] ("Fly throught he air with ease, Emit controlled burst of fire [jumping], Boost his overall mobility [acrobatics], I dunno. Haha!)
After going on a few missions (might need a better word for this), where he had to protect a convoy and another where he had to pick up some items left for The Scientist by an unknown group, Kolman became suspicious of what Dr. [non-named dude] was planning.
One day, Kolman got back from an overnight mission and found the facility almost completely empty except for [Cool researcher guy] and a few of the other student workers (needs a better word, definately). So, he thought he would have a look around in some of the areas The Scientist told him not to... he thought nothing bad would happen. He went into on of the first rooms and found a large computer system with a lot of information about all of the other students abilities and how they could be "fixed" or altered. He didn't know what to think of this, so he went on to another room and found a few pieces of power armor that were a very impressive compared to his current suit, so he stashed a few of the pieces in his satchel and decided to move on to another room.... This room was horrifying, all along the walls and and in rows through the middle were giant glass tubes with THINGS inside of them... but some of these things looked almost.. familiar. He saw a tank with a cat-like mutant that reminded him of one of his old classmates, but the specimen in the tank was much stronger and much more animal-like than his friend, who Kolman thought had graduated (needs a better word?). Along the wall with this cat-beast were tanks of various animal-like humanoids.. some half-bird half-man creatues that were missing body parts, wolf-like creatures that seemed to be more animal than human, Huge snake-creatues with suit of power armor nearby that looked like they would work as the arms and legs if these creatures were to get into the suits. Other parts of the lab had version of the "servant" robots Kolman had seen previously, but these were outfitted with mini-guns and rocket launchers, along with many other things.
Kolman realized one thing, this was all WRONG. He could no longer be a part of this. He had to escape. He ran to the lab where [Cool researcher guy] was working, or rather.. sleeping. Woke him up and told him everything. [Researcher dude] was shocked and horrified and knew it was definately time to get out of there. Suddenly, Kolman and [Researcher dude] heard animal screams and the sounds of the robots activating. Kolman grabbed [Researcher guy] and ran through the facility till he could get to an open area where he could take off [may change depending on travel power chosen.]... Kolman and [cool research guy] had escaped the facility, but they had no idea of the fate of the other students.
So... good story? Long enough? Made nearly all of that up right then!
Side note: Dr. [Name here] and "The Scientist" are the same guy, if you didn't catch that. Heh-heh... He may be my Nemesis, using weaponry and power armor. His minions will be mutant animal-people, robots, and/or guys in power armor. I do plan on at least trying to roleplay.. and I am too tired to work on the rest of this.
Another side note: Did I seriously just type all that?!!? :eek: I do need help though, even if it doesn't really look like it. xD PM me if you help me, please?
Editted: Had a "Not" instead of "now", big difference!
Seems like a perfectly good and reasonably-lengthed origin story to me. I would suggest that you give a little more consideration to Kolman's background outside of this group/laboratory that he was involved with. Does he have any family or close friends? What were they doing while Kolman was training with this group? If he had no one close in his life before this, why? What influence would that fact have on his personality? If Kolman was afraid of being labeled a "freak" because of his powers, why did he want to be able to "do more?" Is there something about his personality, or the way he'd been treated, that made that poster asking if he was "better than the rest" appealing to him?
The background you describe would fit well with ARGENT, a major villainous organization from the official Champions Universe. ARGENT (Advanced Research Group Enterprises) is structured like a corporation, and is devoted to research, development, and sales of all manner of advanced technology to criminals and unscrupulous governments. It often works through various front companies that appear to be innocuous, many of whose employees have no idea they're actually working for ARGENT. The group also has a history of "recruiting" test subjects for its experiments from among runaways, indigents, and other easily-manipulated people who are unlikely to be missed... particularly if they already have superhuman potential.
For a name for the character, given his powers and armor I was thinking Canned Heat, the more colloquial name for Sterno. OTOH if you named him "Charles Kolman," that would be a natural to contract to Charcoal. For the malevolent Doctor, there's a name I've always wanted to use: Dr. Therion, Classical Greek for "beast."
Name:
- Charles Kolman (Charley as a Nickname? Haha.. Charley K.?)
Hero Name:
- Gonna need one of these
Desciption:
- 6'5"
- White (pretty pale)
- Skinny (really skinny)
- Blonde hair, grey-green eyes.
- 19 years old (at the end of this story)
Powers:
- Fire (blue color)
- Power Armor (after he gets it of course, dunno if I would roleplay this story or start at the end.)
Basic backstory:
Charley distanced himself from the rest of his family. They were what the his friends called "Normals". Charley was a sort of loner, he had a few close friends who had powers like himself. They would hang out and practice with their powers in very secluded areas, trying to get better at using them. They always tried to make sure noone was nearby, but they couldn't help but notice that some of the bums around the city would still stumble onto their practice areas. But they never worried about them, there was always a bum on every other street corner shouting "All of you are freaks!! Noone should be able to shoot fire from their hands!!", but they shouted that at everybody that passed... even at cars, trash can, and cats... He and his friends wouldn't have to worry.
Charley first started developed his powers when he was about 16 years old, but he only used them when practicing with his friend, never telling his parents or younger siblings about them.. or even telling them that he had powers. His power was the ability to create and control fire, blue fire to be exact. His powers were relatively weak because he had no idea, even with practice, how to properly use them. He was still able to produce balls of fire and focus the flame around his body to boost his power slightly, but he was angry that he was not able to do more.
While on his way home from practicing, Charley heard a strange, gravely voice say "Why, hello there."
Charley looked around and realized the voice was coming from an alleyway where a man wearing a suit.
Charley replied, "Are you talking to me?"
"Yes, I am." said the man,"Come over here so we may talk."
Charley hesitated, but quietly moved over the strange person. He knew his powers were weak, but surely he could defend himself from just one man.
"Hello, young man." said the man,"I saw you and some other children using some powers down by the old baseball field. Looked to me like you could use some help... I can offer that help."
Charley and his friends always talked about joining a group and truely learning how to use their powers. Thinking this was the best thing he had ever seen, but again, he hesitated. This man looked suspicious. As Charley got closer he noticed a scar running down the right side of the man's face. He had never seen this man before.
"Who are you?" said Charley,"How do you could you possibly help me and my friends?"
"My name is Alfred Therion, but you can call me Dr. Therion. I help people just like you, people with powers. I would like to have you and your friends join me and learn to properly use your powers, and possibly work for me in the future."
Charley was unsure of this man, but knew he and his friends always wanted to improve their powers.
"Okay" said Charley,"I'll talk to me friends and see if we want your help."
"Splendid," said Dr. Therion. "Here is my card."
Charley looked at the card and flipped it over, the words: "Advanced Research Group Enterprises" were stamped on it with the name ARGENT above it in bold letters. He had never heard of this organization and neither had any of his friends once he showed them the card. They decided to run away that night. They hitchhiked their way to a large building in the middle of nowhere, it wasn't what they expected, but it was too late to turn back.
Upon entering the building, they were greeted by Dr. Therion. In the light, Charley was finally able to get a better look at Dr. Therion. He was a tall, thin man built similarly to Charley, but he had black hair and glasses. the scar running down the side of his face was more visible in the light and it looked like a big cut.
Dr. Therion talked to Charley and told him about all of the wonderful things ARGENT would be able to offer him. Charley practiced and trained for some time. Dr. Therion was always interested in Charley's ability to produce a blue fire. He always recorded Charley's training sessions and used different sensors to find out information about his powers. After training with them for some time, Dr. Therion asked Charley if he would like to begin working for ARGENT and help them with some problems they were having. Excited to finally be doing some work, Charley accepted the offer.
Dr. Therion told Charley that he was not to question any order he was given and not to look into any of the crate he was to retrieve or talk to anyone where he was going. Charley was a bit surprised, but accepted this. Dr. Therion went on to show Charley some of the lesser known parts of the facility in which ARGENT's scientist were working on things such as high-tech "servant" robots, suits of power armor, and all other sorts of technilogical gadgetry. Charley was also shown doors to areas he was never to enter.
After showing Charley around, Dr. Therion told him that although he had improved through his training, his powers weren't nearly as strong as they "should be". But, Dr. Therion told Charley that they had a solution. Charley found this odd, but asked Dr. Therion what he should do.
Dr. Therion said, "Don't worry, I have something that may help you."
He lead Charley into an area where they made Power Armor. Dr. Therion walked ahead of Charley to a pedestal with a suit of armor standing on it. The armor was relatively old-looking compared to the other suits throughout the room. Dr. Therion said, "This," pointing to the suit of armor, "is now yours." Charley was in shock, he had never been given anything that would come close to this.
The suit was amazing! Not only did it amplify Charley's power to create and control fire, but it was also highly resistant to damage. The suit was also able to be upgraded in a number of ways, including travel. He could equipt it with rocket boots, a jetpack, grappling hooks, jump-jets, or any of a number of other choices, but he couldn't have more than one.
Dr, Therion went on to introduce Charley to a series of trainers who would teach him how to properly use the armor. He was also introduced to a group of researchers who were going to show him how to repair the armor. One of the newest researchers, Nelson Rockwell, became good friends with Charley. Nelson seemed very different than the other people in ARGENT. Nelson told Charley that he had been recruited by ARGENT in a similar way, seeing advertisement about a facility in need of researchers who want to work on things "the world had never seen before." Nelson even shared some extra tips with Charley on how to get more out of his armor. He even showed Charley how to upgrade his armor in a few small ways.
After going on a few missions, where he had to protect a convoy and another where he had to pick up some crates for Dr. Therion. Charley became suspicious of what ARGENT was really about.
That night, Charley got back from his mission, he found that the facility almost completely deserted. Charley saw this as a opportunity to find out about ARGENT. Still in his suit of power armor, he decided to look around and see some of the areas Dr. Therion told him not to... he thought nothing bad would happen.
He went into one of the first rooms and found a large computer system. He went up to the first computer which was still on and found a folder with a lot of information about people with abilities. Some of the people he recognizes as his friends and some of the newer recruits. He opened up a few of the files and read through them quickly... some of them talked about how the "subjects" could be "improved" and what ARGENT's scientists could learn from them. He didn't know what to think of this.
He continued on to another room and found a few pieces of power armor that were a very impressive compared to his current suit. He thought noone would notice, so he stashed a few of the pieces in his satchel and decided to move on to another room....
This room was horrifying. All along the walls and and in rows through the middle were giant glass tubes with THINGS inside of them... but some of these things looked almost.. familiar. He saw a tank with a cat-like mutant that reminded him of one of his old classmates, but the specimen in the tank was much more muscular and animal-like than his friend... but Charley knew his friend had been killed monthes earlier, at least... that's what Dr. Therion told him. Along the wall with this cat-beast were tanks of various animal-like humanoids.. some half-bird half-man creatures that looked very strange because they were mostly human shaped with huge wings on their backs, but they had no arms. Near the tank was a harness with a pair on robotic arms that Charley could only guess would be worn by this bird-man. There were also wolf-like creatures that seemed to be more animal than human, and huge snake-creatures with suit of power armor nearby that looked like they would work as the arms and legs if these creatures were to get into the suits. Other parts of the lab had version of the "servant" robots Charley had seen previously, but these were nothing like the "servant" models. These were outfitted with thick armor, mini-guns, and rocket launchers, along with many other things.
Charley realized one thing, this was all WRONG. He could no longer be a part of this. He had to escape. He ran to Nelson's lab where he was working, or rather.. sleeping. Woke him up and told him everything. Nelson was shocked and horrified. He told Charley he had no idea this is what ARGENT was really doing. They headed towards the door and were stopped by none other than Dr. Therion himself.
"Ah, now we can't have everyone finding out more about ARGENT now, can we?" said Dr. Therion.
"Let us go, or I will be forced to do something I don't want to." said Charley as he focused his fire around his fists.
"And what would that be?" laughed Dr. Therion. "If you kill me you would have all of ARGENT after you. Then again, if you let me live, you will still have ARGENT after you for the rest of your life."
"Then you won't mind if I do this!" yelled Charley as he blasted Dr. Therion in the chest with a blast of blue fire.
Dr. Therion flew back and hit a wall. "I see you have gotten stronger.. but you are no match for ARGENT. It's too late for you now..." Dr. Therion laid there burnt and broken.. he passed out from the pain.
Suddenly, they heard animal screams and the sounds of the robots activating. Charley and Nelson knew they had to get out FAST. They ran through the facility while being chased by mutant creatures and robots.. the facility was swarming with these things. During their fight to escape Charley's suit was damages and Nelson was knocked unconsious.
However, Charley and Nelson managed to escaped the facility, but they had no idea of the fate of the other students. Together they went on to form W.A.R (Warriors and Rebels), a group for anyone who had been tricked, tested on, or anything similar by any organization such as VIPER or ARGENT.
Looks pretty good. Interesting that Charley "had a few close friends who had powers like himself" -- sounds like you're leaving an opening to join a guild. Also interesting that you mentioned Dr. Therion was "built similarly to Charley." Any chance that Charley was adopted? :eek:
Here's a nemesis suggestion: Dr. Therion discovers Charley in that secret genetics laboratory and tries to stop him from leaving, resulting in a struggle that doused the Doctor in some of the lab's experimental samples. When Charley next encounters him Dr. Therion has been mutated into a literal "beast," with various animal features and body parts, which gives him a strong revenge motive for pursuing Charley.
Just as a point of continuity, ARGENT is well-known internationally for its unscrupulous practices, and is an illegal criminal organization in the United States and many other countries (although some nations allow it to operate freely within their borders, and even sponsor it), so it's unlikely the group would put its name on a poster in a public place, or reveal it to recruits or operatives until the group was sure of their loyalty.
Looks pretty good. Interesting that Charley "had a few close friends who had powers like himself" -- sounds like you're leaving an opening to join a guild. Also interesting that you mentioned Dr. Therion was "built similarly to Charley." Any chance that Charley was adopted? :eek:
Here's a nemesis suggestion: Dr. Therion discovers Charley in that secret genetics laboratory and tries to stop him from leaving, resulting in a struggle that doused the Doctor in some of the lab's experimental samples. When Charley next encounters him Dr. Therion has been mutated into a literal "beast," with various animal features and body parts, which gives him a strong revenge motive for pursuing Charley.
Just as a point of continuity, ARGENT is well-known internationally for its unscrupulous practices, and is an illegal criminal organization in the United States and many other countries (although some nations allow it to operate freely within their borders, and even sponsor it), so it's unlikely the group would put its name on a poster in a public place, or reveal it to recruits or operatives until the group was sure of their loyalty.
Dang it, knew I forgot Therion finding them! I am gonna add it in really quick.
As for the "Non-public" thing, what could I use? Did ARGENT ever use any false names or anything like that? Or should I make up a name? I would prefer if there was a real fake name they used.
As for the "Non-public" thing, what could I use? Did ARGENT ever use any false names or anything like that? Or should I make up a name? I would prefer if there was a real fake name they used.
Well, one of the Champions PnP game sourcebooks (Teen Champions, appropriately enough) mentions an ARGENT front company called the Greenworld Foundation, which held a contest supposedly for underprivileged young people to win a summer trip to an outdoor camp. (ARGENT actually faked their deaths and kidnapped the youngsters to use as experimental subjects.) I could easily see broadening the Greenworld Foundation's public mission to "helping young people discover their potential." And it's hard to imagine a more innocuous or positive-sounding name.
Well, one of the Champions PnP game sourcebooks (Teen Champions, appropriately enough) mentions an ARGENT front company called the Greenworld Foundation, which held a contest supposedly for underprivileged young people to win a summer trip to an outdoor camp. (ARGENT actually faked their deaths and kidnapped the youngsters to use as experimental subjects.) I could easily see broadening the Greenworld Foundation's public mission to "helping young people discover their potential." And it's hard to imagine a more innocuous or positive-sounding name.
Oooh, very cool. My only thing would be that it changes a lot from the beginning of my guy's story. I want it to be my own. Changed the end of the story around to go more into my supergroup (which isn't going to really be RP for anyone who would ask, but it will be pretty cool... if people join! Haha). Also changed the beginning to something better, in my opinion. Also changed the text around to seem more like they were talking and less like a story about something that happened... maybe so I can visualize it better (right phrase?). I just hope I have room enough to fit it in one post! xD
Also, the idea with "his close friends" is that I can make more similarly designed characters.. and I also put in a bit about his "younger siblings" which could be future characters.. you never know!
And so you know, I editted the post earlier so I wouldn't take up another whole page with a post. xD
Heres what I've gotten so far. Just throw in whatever you think might work better or just straight out tell me what sucks. Just don't tell me that it overall sucks... because that would suck.
Name: The Vanguard (Haven't quite decided yet.)
Real name: Ian James
Description: When not wearing his armor Ian is a guy in his mid twenties. He is of average height (around 5'8 or 5'7) and has a slender but athletic build. His hair is brown and usually a bit of a mess. His eyes are a light brown. One easily distinguishable feature about him is a scar he has across his the left side of his face. He can be a bit of a pessimist and is quite sarcastic with a caustic sense of humor.
When in costume he is clad in a light and thin armor. The armor is fitted to the contours of his body and allows easy movement and flexibility in its design. His helm, which covers his entire face, (save for two slits in it for his eyes) is fitted to the contours of his face much like the rest of his armor. The armor on his torso, head, and lower body is a bright golden color. However the armor on his arms is mostly metallic silvery color with some golden highlights.
Powers: The vanguard has super human speed, accuracy, and agility. He also has electrical powers as a bi-product of his first power. His enhanced metabolism allows him to heal at a fast pace. However, the healing is not instant. He could if damaged enough bleed out and die. (He is not invincible)
Origin: Ian James was a med student studying at a prestigious school just outside Millennium City. He ran track for the school and was a terrific athlete at the expense of his grades. During a meet Ian's heart fails and he collapses. He is later resuscitated, but left in a comatose state due to a lack of oxygen to his brain. His parents are given the decision on whether to keep him on life support or pull the plug. As they sat grieving over their son a mysterious man entered the room. He informed them of a new experimental drug that he was "sure" would bring their son back to life. His parents of course took this offer wanting to do anything to save their child.
Ian would later awaken on the floor in a large room filled with hospital beds. He had a tube down his throat, and an arm full of different IVs. He felt terrible, cold, every single noise appeared to be amplified by a tenfold. The light hurt his eyes and it took him some time to realize he was in the medical center of his university. He smelt smoke, the building was on fire.
All hell had broken loose. A throng of patients and students had been given strange new abilities. Some stood blankly in shock; others were busy taking revenge on the doctors and innocents in and outside the medical center. As Ian stumbled outside he saw one of his former classmates, a girl named Ellen Deane, being held by the throat by what appeared to be a half-man half-lizard in a hospital gown.
He uses his powers for the first time and rams the mutated student with a high speed tackle. This followed by a storm of electricity firing from his body into the mutant, cooking him internally. Ellen walked over to Ian and then threw him into a car in the adjacent parking lot with extreme force. Ellen looked back at him before going back into the chaos and yelled to him "did you really think I would need help from someone like you."
Ian watched from a distance as his former friends either killed or were the recipients of a brutal violent assault from freshly formed super humans. Several vans arrived at the scene, their back doors opened and many agents wearing suites and others wearing hazmat suites began gathering up the students.
Ian escapes the massacre as do many of the other supers... Looking back on what happened he holds a grudge with himself. He wonders why he didn't try and stop what happened that day. He chooses to never think twice about rushing into danger whatever the sacrifice may be.
This is all I got so far... Not quite sure how he should get his suit .... Nothing seems to work out too well. I wanted him to forge it himself but he really has no resources to do so... He is a work in progress but I think he's understandable.
I like your story, could you give me feedback on mine?
My only thing is where you said
Several vans arrived at the scene, their back doors opened and many agents wearing suites and others wearing hazmat suites began gathering up the students.
Why would some men wear normal suits while other wear hazmat suits? Are the "regular suit" guys superpowers? Genetically enhanced? I think maybe if you had them all in "faceless" hazmat suits it would add a bit to the chaos. Well, depending on who they are.. are they trying to capture the students or save them? Were these the people who did the experiments? I am not really sure.
Also, your character story would totally go with my supergroup. W.A.R. (Warriors and Rebels) a group of people who were tricked, tested on, and many other things who have decided to fight back against the people who did thins to them. Well... that's the basic idea.
Yeah the van thing was just me being vague. I didn't mean to be I am just running out of "good" ideas. I haven't quite decided why the agents arrive I just know I need to revise it so Ellen and Ian are good friends, have her get captured and him get away. This makes it easier to create a common hate between the two of them.
Now onto your background.
I like your idea of the power suit giving him control of his power rather than "giving" the power to him. However, I think his suit should take damage while leaving the test facility. It would make things more difficult and put him in a more vulnerable situation. This would make it so instead of running it would become maybe a regular necessity to confront ARGENT troops in order to repair his suit. And the doctor should definetly become the nemesis. Like a post before mine said he should become the victim of his own work and become horribly mutated but extremely powerful.
Hope I was able to help you a little bit. As for names.... How bout Fire Storm? Crimson Warden? His name should incorporate his main power with some sort of structure or title that represents toughness.
Name:
- Eric (might change & last name unknown)
Hero Name/Nemesis Name:
- Xeroh (undecided)
Alignment
-N/A
Description:
- 6'2''
- Mixed with Black & White
- Fit,around 175 pound
- Black Hair - Hazel Eyes
- 17 years old
Basic back story:
As a young boy Eric grew up worshiping his father, Keagan. Keagan was known through the world as one of the "Elements". The "Elements" Which was a group of 6 super humans wielding the powers of Fire, Wind, Lightning, Water, Ice, and Keagan wielding the power of earth. Each of the members wears a necklace indicating their element. Eric however wielded the power of arcane energy.
When challenged to the death the "Elements" always accepting, taking it as another opportunity to prove their dominance. Keagan was challenged by a man in a black trench coat(buttoned-up to hide the 2 swords he used in combat) and a white mask, with a blank face on it. This masked man was known as "Blank"(Name may change). Every time he expressed an emotion, his face molded into that emotion, (i.e, happy his mask molds into a smiley face . Sad mask molds into a sad face. ) Blank had the power of super speed and wielded dual swords (example of swords - identical to Cervantes from Soul Caliber). The fight was to be fought atop a large plateau. Keagan thought this to be an easy victory, considering they would be fighting upon rock making him nearly unstoppable.
Eric watches with a smile on his face as he is about to watch his father in action. The fight begins and Keagan makes the first move. (OK, it would be pretty difficult to portray this whole fight scene so i'm gonna have to skip it.. It ends with blank getting close enough to Keagan, hitting his pressure points rendering his arms useless, making it impossible for him to use his powers. Blank knocks him to his knees you see a smile on his mask and blank finishes him off.) *the smile slowly "falls off" the face of Eric*
Blank picks up Keagans limp body, and rips off the necklace, claiming his prize. Blank walks to Eric and says "I'm sorry you had to see this child, but when you're old enough seek me out and maybe you can claim this necklace back one day. (Blank - ) Then Blank backhands Eric with full force sending him off the mountain and into the nearby river.
Now, Eric awakes in a small shack, laying on a man made bed. He glances at his body notices the damage and the bandages covering his body. Now, he lays there inert with the images of his father's death playing over and over again in his head. A man enters the room, disrupting Eric's trance. It is hard to make out the man's face, for it is dark. The man sits Eric up, and puts a cup to his mouth. "Drink this, you need your rest" *Eric drinks the liquid substance* it is bitter, nasty flavor. Eric can hear the crash of waves outside, then he lays down and begins to sleep. The man leaves the shack and on his way out says "we've got a lot of work to do.."
Eric wakes up a few days later. As he gets up he feels his body pulsate in pain. He stumbles over to the sink and mirror and glances at himself. *The shack door opens, and Jingov (The unknown man from before) stand in the doorway*
Jingov- "I see you're awake child. What is your name?"
Eric- " ....... "
Jingov- "Follow me."
Eric follows Jingov outside to a campfire. Jingov sitting on a long oak like log, Eric sitting across from him. Jingov then says...
"What happened to you?"
Eric sits there, with his head down and images of his father's death running over and over again in his mind. Then, a single tear drops from His left eye. Eric then tells Jingov of the murder of his father and how he wants his revenge. Jingov then says...
"Your life CANNOT be based on revenge... Revenge corrupts the mind... the body.. the soul!"
Jingov then spends the next few years treating Eric as his own son. Jingov thought of this as a Father-Son relationship. But Eric knew that no one could replace his father. Jingov began teaching Eric to use his powers properly, how to control his arcane magics. And to use them to defend and heal himself. Jingov also taught Eric many different trades, He taught Eric to use his powers to hunt, fish, create armors from leather found on different animals and fend for himself.
Using these trades Eric created his own armor made of tough hide, Strong enough to stop bullets. And to stop the slashing attacks of a sword. Eric also created a cloak, which was used to cover his entire body, from the neck down. (example - Cloak used by the akatsuki from Naruto.)
One night, Eric snuck from Jingov's camp and ventured many miles to a town. He sat in a tavern for a few hours. While there he overheard a drunk man talk of the "Elements" and how the man of Earth was murdered a few years ago. Eric could barely contain himself as the drunk man went on blabbering of his father. Eric spun around launching arcane energy in every direction. The drunk man fled in terror. But Eric would not let this man get away.
The drunk man ran into an alley way and ran into a dead end. Eric slowly walks to the man forming arcane energy around his body. As the anger builds the arcane energy which is normally blue formed into a dark purple/black color. Eric could sense the fear in the man. Eric then concentrates all of the dark energy into his right first. Then, punching through the man without hesitation.
Eric throws the body to the side and leaves the town. On his way back to Jingov's camp, Eric realizes that this dark energy is much, much stronger than that of the blue arcane energy. The revenge and anger in his body has converted his blue arcane energy to a black aura of arcane energy. Thus making him stronger. Eric then packs his things and on his way of leaving the camp, Eric is intercepted by Jingov. Jingov sense the evil in Eric's presence. Jingov knows what he must do - he must put an end to this evil.
*Jingov reaches for his pocket and takes out a necklace, which was a symbol lightening and puts it on* Eric then realizes that Jingov has been a member of the Elements all this time. Eric then begins to build all of the dark energy that can for the fight ahead of him. ( blah blah blah, another fight scene... ends with Eric unknowingly opening the portals to the abyss, thus ripping Jingov apart.)
*Eric then takes shards of the necklace and walks away*
"From this day forth i shall be known as Xeroh! (name may change) And i shall revenge my father at any means necessary! "
To Be Continued...
( I know, it's a little choppy still needs a lot of work, threw it together in a rush lol. It is completely made form scratch. I barely have any backround of Champions. Just thought it would be fun to make a story haha. feed back would be nice though. thanks. )
I got another one, a villain this time. As silly as it sounds, he's a jellyfish themed nemesis. But he's deadly to my hero. He has a stinging touch, nematacysts in his hands deliver toxins. Not only that, but he can grow some stinging tentacles from his arms that he can whip about as a weapon. That's all I got powerwise, so if you can think of something else, that'd be great.
But mostly what I need is some ideas for his background, his origin. Once more I want it to be a science thing, lab accident, voluntary experiment, etc.
I got another one, a villain this time. As silly as it sounds, he's a jellyfish themed nemesis. But he's deadly to my hero. He has a stinging touch, nematacysts in his hands deliver toxins. Not only that, but he can grow some stinging tentacles from his arms that he can whip about as a weapon. That's all I got powerwise, so if you can think of something else, that'd be great.
But mostly what I need is some ideas for his background, his origin. Once more I want it to be a science thing, lab accident, voluntary experiment, etc.
Your nemesis should be an old man slowly falling apart from aging, obsessed with finding a way to reverse the aging process because of the pain he is wracked with daily by arthritis and other ailments. He should turn to the experimentation of the box jelly fish for it's four brains and the turritposis nutricula for it's ability to rejuvinate.
His break through should come out of the ability of rejuvination from the second jelly fish. His poor hands make a mistake however and he accidently adds box-jelly fish DNA into the first sample. The code is altered... He decides to become the first test subject of what he believes to be an awesome medical breakthrough and it is... Just not how he would imagine.
His body undergoes an intense transformation and he takes on features of a jelly fish. His bones disappear melt into his body, his brain seperates into four smaller individual brains and grows 6 eye balls, his skin loses all pigment and becomes transparent enabling you to see his nervous system and heart (along with the veins and arteries connected to is. Every other organ in his body vanishes... He becomes a human jelly fish.
His initial breakthrough should be correct. He becomes ageless and immortal. In order to die his nervous system must be removed from his body. If he is torn apart he cannot grow back all the way until that junk of himself is returned to well the rest of himself. He should be able to change the shape of his body to avoid attacks and turn himself into a living jelly fish tentacle whose sting can kill normal men (the box jelly fish is the most deadly jelly fish.) Give it a limit though, he can't stretch himself forever, that would break a physics law. Rather to reach farther he would have to exchange a portion of his body to be put into the other portion of his body being stretched. So if he needs his right arm longer then he loses his left arm momentarily, if he needs it longer than that he loses his head and his left arm and so one and so forth.
So I got this Power Armoured hero idea,
He is a student from Europe (the Netherlands) who is studying abroad, he creates a power amour as a school project.
But now I wonder how a student is able to have a power source that is good enough to power a highly developed power armour?
Is was thinking about him being a mutant who has the ability to charge objects witch he uses to create the right power source. But I feel that there is something lacking, I do not fully like the mutant idea.
Anyone got suggestions/better ideas?
(I am sorry for my somewhat broken English, I'm Dutch)
Don't be concerned over your English, SilverShell, it's perfectly understandable. Certainly clearer than some of the presumed native English speakers who post here.
One of the classic gadget-oriented superhero origins is for the hero to have been assisting a research/design project that's secretly funded by a criminal organization, like VIPER or ARGENT in the official Champions Universe. When the project's completed its backers come to collect it, but the hero happens to be in the lab at the time, realizes what's going on, and uses the device to thwart the villains. He realizes that he has to keep the device out of the villains' hands -- and also has the chance to use it himself to Do Cool Stuff. :cool:
This kind of origin gives your character a cutting-edge suit of armor that he doesn't necessarily have the knowledge or resources to reproduce, and a reason to keep his identity secret from the villains who want the armor. If your character had a friend or mentor on the project -- perhaps the armor's main inventor -- who was killed during the villains' attack, that would give him a strong motivation to use the armor for good, to make his friends' death count for something.
Don't be concerned over your English, SilverShell, it's perfectly understandable. Certainly clearer than some of the presumed native English speakers who post here.
One of the classic gadget-oriented superhero origins is for the hero to have been assisting a research/design project that's secretly funded by a criminal organization, like VIPER or ARGENT in the official Champions Universe. When the project's completed its backers come to collect it, but the hero happens to be in the lab at the time, realizes what's going on, and uses the device to thwart the villains. He realizes that he has to keep the device out of the villains' hands -- and also has the chance to use it himself to Do Cool Stuff. :cool:
This kind of origin gives your character a cutting-edge suit of armor that he doesn't necessarily have the knowledge or resources to reproduce, and a reason to keep his identity secret from the villains who want the armor. If your character had a friend or mentor on the project -- perhaps the armor's main inventor -- who was killed during the villains' attack, that would give him a strong motivation to use the armor for good, to make his friends' death count for something.
Any of that work for you?
I suppose that I would be able to work with this input,
If I use this story I need to change the story here and there but that shouldn't be that much of a problem
Thank you for the quick reply, much appreciated
Okay, here's the start to my hero Dick Steels origins!
(yeah, I know it's not the most original idea, but I like this kind of hero)
Name: Dick Steel
Powers: Gadgeteering, and either Munitions or Martial Arts
Travel: Rocket boots! (Or a car, if that's implemented)
Costume: A classic tuxedo!
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Dick Steel was born as Tulcifer Lorunderbottom, in a tiny apartment, more shoe-box than anything
else, to a his single mother, Lorita Lorunderbottom. They lived in the more dangerous part of
the New York-slums, and life was a constant struggle to survive from one day to the next,
especially on Loritas minimum-wage waitress job. His father had left Lorita as soon as she
announced, in a burst of joy, that she carried their lovechild. Sadly, Lorita never stopped
loving him in a way. That is why, when little Tulcifer, a few weeks after he started pre-school,
asked her about his dad, in a quite distressed voice.
"All the boys in my class has a dad, and the girls do too! Why don't I have a dad Mom?"
Seeing how close to tears he was, she couldn't bear to tell him the truth. The truth, that Edgar,
a used cars-sales man had split as soon as the risk of some real responsibilty might fall
on his shoulders, left as fast as his feet could take him, was almost too much for Lorita to face
so she couldn't stand to destroy her precious little son's life.
"Well, Tulcy, your dad is actually a, uh, secret agent, called Max Strong! He has to beundercover
all the time, or else the bad guys will get him!"
She knew this was a bad lie at best, but Tulcifers face filled with nothing but earnest exctitement
and joy.
"Wow!! Really?!" he almost shouts out
"Yup, he travels all over the world in his rocket boots, and fights the evil S.I.N.I.S.T.E.R.
and their leader, uh, Alabaster van der Kwaast. He is trying to take over the world, and
your dad is the only one that can stop him!"
"Oh no!" Tulcifer exclaims, and puts his hand in front of his mouth, as to stop the words from
escaping.
"Yes, but he is not alone. His good friend, Quantum Smith, (by know Lorita was really getting
into the feel of this) gives him all sorts of gadgets and things that help your dad defeat
the Alabaster and his goons."
"What kinds of things Mum? Exploding coffee-cups, laser pens and shark boats?!"
"Uh, yeah, exactly like that! But you can't tell anyone about this, Tulcifer, or else someone
might come and take you instead!"
"I promise I won't tell anyone, Mummy, I promise so hard!"
Lorita sighs as Tulcifer runs into his room, obsessed about his dad. "Well, I'll just tell him
the the truth when he gets old enough, I'll let him enjoy this for now." she thinks, and
starts to do the dishes.
The weeks pass, and soon months, without Tulcifer doubting her story for
even one second. He just keeps asking her to tell more stories of his dad's fantastic
adventures, and everyone always ends the same way. Max foiling Alabasters plan at the last
minute, and gets away unharmed, and Tulcifer after each one, with growing determination says
"When I grow up, I'm going to be just like Dad!"
At first, when he was still wearing his litte glasses, and a beanie, Lorita just thought it was
something all kids go through, but when he insisted on the stories well into his thirteenth
year, as well as always wanting "Daddys Little Electrician" and "Physics - for KIDS!" and
stuff like that for christmas and birthdays she was a little distressed. But he still got good grades in school, had some
friends and generally seemed like any 13-year old. But Lorita was worried that she could never
tell the truth about Edgar, lest it would destroy everything the boy believed in. So she decided to let him keep this illusion of his great heroic father, as it seemd to motivating him, to make Daddy proud, as Tulcifer said, more and more frequently, and whenever he did, a strange look fell to his eyes and a steel-like expression crept over his face.
He had even started working out, because Secret Agents need to be in shape!. Lorita decided that, all in all, Tulcifer could have a much worse childhood, so she let him at it.
The years went by, and Tulcifer became a fine young man. His body was well-toned, his grades were perfect, and he had made quite a lot of lady-friends. Still, Tulcifer had never faltered in his belief that his dad really was a secret super-agent, and this worried Lorita greatly. So when Tulcifers 18th birthday was coming up, she decided that, no matter how hard he would take it, he deserved to know the truth.
But then, on the night of his 18th birthday...
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I just don't know what will come next, what is the spark that will get Tulcifer of his **** and dons the tuxedo.
Some thing's should be revealed, SINISTER is an actual organisation, and Alabaster will of course be his nemesis.
But should his mom be killed / kidnapped ? Should Edgar show up dead, with a sign from SINISTER, that proves he really was a secret agent, and that the car salesman-story just was a clever ruse?
Hmm... one complication I see from the background you've presented, is that Tulcifer's mother believes Max Strong is fiction, and has supposedly been making up these stories as she goes along. If you actually want to make Alabaster and SINISTER real, that begs the question of how Tulcifer's mother knew all this stuff, and why she believed it was imaginary.
My suggestion to make that work: his mother was actually "programmed" with true information which she believed to be false (either through brainwashing, or her really being an artificial android), so that the future Dick Steel could be raised in obscurity safe from his father's enemies, while she unconsciously encouraged him to prepare to succeed his father. On Tulcifer's 18th birthday his mother's true memories are unlocked, and she explains the situation and reveals to Dick Steel a hidden laboratory/arsenal of gadgets Max Strong once used, maintained by Quantum Smith. Max Strong disappeared years ago, and Dick now has to find his father and aid him against SINISTER.
(BTW there are other venerable villain organizations within the Champions Universe, such as VIPER or ARGENT, that you could substitute for SINISTER if you'd like to tie your character more closely to the setting.)
have Mom start looking through her old things, trying to find some pictures of Ed.. some sort of proof, cause she knows that Tulc wont believe her...
and she finds a picture of her and egar in Paris (where she's never been) with a scrawl on it saying something like "We'll be together soon: You, me, and our little one. Love, Ed."
it turns out, that SINISTER has the know-how to erase people's memories and replace them with lies.
they did this to Tulc's mom, and relocated her to New York, and have secretly been keeping an eye on her all these years...
Using her as a weapon against Ed.
what she thought she was making up, was, in fact, the truth... she just didnt remember she remembered it.
Mom is a little shocked, but cant really believe what she's seeing... she shoves it to the back of her mind, and still resolves to tell her son.
But her son has a story of his own, when he gets home.
He created rocket shoes! he test flew them for the first time, today, and they worked!
moments later, SINISTER agents shatter through the windows of the tiny apartment, and Tulc tries to fight them off. When all looks super grim... In bursts Ed!
he routs all the SINISTER robo-ninjas, hugs his wife (who is stunned into shock) and stands face to face with his son, glowing with pride.
...then the sniper round pulses through Ed's chest, He's down, but maybe not out. he takes a key out of his pocket, and tells his son to run, take his mom and run... the key will help him. Tulc tries to refuse, but they both see dozens of gun sight laser lines criss crossing through the room, and Ed knows its Alabaster. He slaps a teleporter gadget into Tulc's hand, and tells him to get his mom out, again, before standing up to face his Nemesis. Tulc catches a glimps of Alabaster just as he teleports away (breaking the little device as he goes)
Tulc figures out that the teeth of the key, when laid on a map, of the city gives a list of street addresses, and figures out a pattern in them, that tells him where to use the key (a special warehouse or apartment, something.,..)
In it, he's able to hide his mom out, and finds all of his dad's gadgets (maybe meets Smith, who was expecting Ed.)
viola!
Smith begins reparing Mom's memories, while Tulc takes up the mantle.
I have an idea kicking around my head, and I was just wanting to get an opinion more on how it would be received by the overall RP community.
TL;DR version is a Inquisitor from Warhammer 40K.
IE displaced in time, figures out he is on Terra some 30K years before the Heresy, and eventually decides it was the Emperor who sent him not the Ruinous Powers once the Qu'larr invade.
This idea strikes as a really good NPC to give PCs fits in a actual PnP campaign and I reserve the right to do that as well in the future but I just got to thinking about a costume of Power Armor, and Munitions with maybe Ego powers. Not sure the look would work, but more concerned about once people figure out where I am coming from what the reaction would be.
It's also possible that I am just jonesing for a 40K fix with the wife in school and thus rebuilding my armies is not even happening.
I find blending IP's generally reprehensible... so yes, I'd say your just looking for a fix.
why not try to make a character with the beliefs of an Inquisitor, in a world where those beliefs are not part of the primary world dogma?
Consider how a person might grow up to have that attitude, and how they might combat their percieved enemies, in a world where they dont ammass as an army force across the battlefield...
use the inquisitor as inspiration.... instead of ducttaping it into a completely unrelated storyline and world.
I find blending IP's generally reprehensible... so yes, I'd say your just looking for a fix.
why not try to make a character with the beliefs of an Inquisitor, in a world where those beliefs are not part of the primary world dogma?
Consider how a person might grow up to have that attitude, and how they might combat their percieved enemies, in a world where they dont ammass as an army force across the battlefield...
use the inquisitor as inspiration.... instead of ducttaping it into a completely unrelated storyline and world.
Good point, GH. As an example, there's a character from the Champions PnP game called Nebula, from an interstellar state in the Andromeda Galaxy, who was accidentally transported to Earth. Back home she was a type of police officer, dedicated to justice and upholding the law. However, her people's concept of "law" is extremely draconian by our standards, with very harsh punishments for even minor offenses; and officers like Nebula have broad discretion to punish without supervision or appeal. Nebula has followed the same code of conduct on Earth, confining her efforts to punishing lawbreakers -- which, unfortunately, includes anyone trying to prevent her from the "lawful" exercise of her duties. As a result she's branded a vigilante and hunted by law-enforcement from our world. Nebula is incapable of understanding what she considers our ignorance of the most basic tenets of crime-fighting, especially since from what she's seen, our system isn't very effective at preventing crime.
I find blending IP's generally reprehensible... so yes, I'd say your just looking for a fix.
why not try to make a character with the beliefs of an Inquisitor, in a world where those beliefs are not part of the primary world dogma?
Consider how a person might grow up to have that attitude, and how they might combat their percieved enemies, in a world where they dont ammass as an army force across the battlefield...
use the inquisitor as inspiration.... instead of ducttaping it into a completely unrelated storyline and world.
Good point, GH. As an example, there's a character from the Champions PnP game called Nebula, from an interstellar state in the Andromeda Galaxy, who was accidentally transported to Earth. Back home she was a type of police officer, dedicated to justice and upholding the law. However, her people's concept of "law" is extremely draconian by our standards, with very harsh punishments for even minor offenses; and officers like Nebula have broad discretion to punish without supervision or appeal. Nebula has followed the same code of conduct on Earth, confining her efforts to punishing lawbreakers -- which, unfortunately, includes anyone trying to prevent her from the "lawful" exercise of her duties. As a result she's branded a vigilante and hunted by law-enforcement from our world. Nebula is incapable of understanding what she considers our ignorance of the most basic tenets of crime-fighting, especially since from what she's seen, our system isn't very effective at preventing crime.
You both make good points. My idea was similar to the Nebula one, only instead of making up a background, I was going to "borrow" one.
I think I will stick it on the back burner as far as CO goes.
My next question is are the Blood represented in CO? My first serious character was based on them, a sport with electrical powers. But if they are not even mentioned somewhere, even a slight mention in the timeline or some such.....
My next question is are the Blood represented in CO? My first serious character was based on them, a sport with electrical powers. But if they are not even mentioned somewhere, even a slight mention in the timeline or some such.....
Nope, no Blood is this version of the Champions Universe. The rights to those characters remain with their creator, Aaron Allston, so they're not part of the IP that Cryptic Studios bought.
Doesn't mean you can't create your own version of the Blood for the game, though. Alternate worlds are a well-established part of the official setting, so your character could come from one of your own devising.
Nope, no Blood is this version of the Champions Universe. The rights to those characters remain with their creator, Aaron Allston, so they're not part of the IP that Cryptic Studios bought.
Doesn't mean you can't create your own version of the Blood for the game, though. Alternate worlds are a well-established part of the official setting, so your character could come from one of your own devising.
Well fork. At least that gives me the author's name in order to try and track down the book. Yea I may have to just do a blatant rip off and hope he doesn't sue me
Seriously, I may use all but the name and just leave parts hazy and "mysterious" :rolleyes:
alright so if it wasn't for my writer's block i'd be able to translate this into a coherent back story. but here's what I've got going for my character
Shade. (<< common name? lol. sad face.)
Nathan Grimm.
Powers:
Martial Arts
Knives/small blades (don't know how that would be represented in game. perhaps just cosmetically like CoX.)
Darkness/Magic (i don't like how sorcery seems to center so much around summoning, but perhaps some magic bolts or some other powers i can customize to black or whatever dark color)
Teleport travel power.
I didn't really write this descriptively, it was all brainstormed in the shower this morning, lying in bed last night, and some times in class today when i probably should've been paying attention haha. So bear with me. There are two alternate intros. Hopefully this read doesn't seem daunting.
INTRO ONE:
Nathan is young, 12 or 13. He's coming home from school or any other youth activity (sports?) and walks into his house only to find his parents were the works of some evildoer (murdered/raped/etc. etc. dirty deeds). There is also a hero here subduing said evildoer, but somehow when nathan walks in the evildoer (before being killed/knocked out) makes it come off as if the hero did these things to his parents.
INTRO TWO: Same scenario, except both of Nathan's parents are secretly villains. He walks in to see the hero and his parents fighting. One of his parents is KOed and the other parent picks up the one KOed and runs/flys/teleports/tunnels away (never to return unless Nathan encounters them when he is a hero himself). Once again leaving the hero for the blame because obviously Nathan won't be able to comprehend and won't want to comprehend the idea of his parents being villains.
FOLLOWING INTRO:
Nathan proceeds to yell/harass/have a tantrum until the hero regretfully leaves. At this point Nathan is dealing with all kinds of emotions. He calls the authorities. Before the authorities show up Nathan discovers a pair of highly detailed one-of-a-kind knives left by the evildoer/villainous parents. He thinks nothing of them at the moment, and sets them aside. <insert filler here>
Later that night Nathan sneaks away from the police/investigative services to cut loose in his room. Pacing in his room, breaking things, releasing his anger/depression/confusion, doing the teenager thing. He stops and looks at himself in his mirror. (First glimpse of his darkness powers [probably because of all his emotions atm]. not darkness objectively like "evil" but darkness like shadows) The general shadows of the room cover his right shoulder and everything above his neck. All of which has completely disappeared besides his eyes; his eyes already noticeably blue are now a strong glowing blue. So picture strong glowing blue eyes floating above his now headless body. Nathan is caught off guard by what he sees and immediately looks away from the mirror and dives onto his bed to bury his head in his pillow.
He awakens to an eerily quiet empty house wondering why he seemed to have had the most terrible dream. When he walks into the main room and finds the knives set aside he is reminded of last nights events, but isntead of retreating into his depression he is suddenly filled with rage. Vengeance. He blames the hero for his parents' deaths/leaving, and he knows what he has to do.
[The rest may seem kind of rushed, only because it needs more work]
Nathan drops school, and becomes the neighborhood recluse. Some say he has gone crazy, his friends don't know what happened to him or where he went. He does nothing but remain within the basement of his home and train. train. train. train. He runs most of the night to build his endurance, he works out and trains with his knives during the day. He also teaches himself is own form of offensive martial arts.
Around the age of 18 or 19 (Yes, 5 or 6 years.) he goes out to hunt down the hero. I don't know how he finds him, but he does. Epic battle ensues. Hopefully I'm able to somehow incorporate more darkness/shadow magic into this fight, or maybe into the training before hand. Nathan fights the hero to the death. Before the hero dies he shares with Nathan some item or trinket or "wisdom about not letting vengeance take you over" that somehow shakes Nathan free of the revenge thinking and makes him realize the error of his ways (and maybe that his parents are indeed villains). He vows to turn his skills/abilities to fight crime and the works.
Shade. Still have to figure out how his name comes in. I was thinking something along the lines of him going through old family photos to find an article about his loon of a long lost great grandfather that was sent to a mental institution claiming he witnessed/has magical abilities dealing with shadows.
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Thats brilliant on so many levels. Im definitly going to be taking alot of ideas from this
Thank you Im going to post more soon
Nationality: Australian
Age: Late teens to early twenties
Physical Characteristics: Medium height, Lean built, Ginger hair, grey eyes, reddish skin
Emotional characteristics: Arrogance, Cold Hearted ,Anarchist
Mission Statemate: He doesn't care who gets hurt as long as the Job gets done.
Heroics: Hero for hire/ Anti hero
Possible Powers: Boomerang throwing, Shapeshifting into Dingo, Spear fighting, and Posions.
Background: Long ago in Austraila, several tribes of Aboriginals dedicated themselves to worshiping the god Canidae and his sons Vulpini and Canini. For awhile they lived in peace but then came the British supervillains brought over to imprisoned in their new prison colony. The tribes had no idea that three supervillains brother known as the swine brother would soon descend on them...Too be continued.
Costumes: Hoody, Jeans and sneaks.. he tends to like to blend in.
Help Needed: Hero Name and other powers that work well with shapeshifting more to come could still really use some help though.
Going to explain personality in his background.
Technically, though, he's not really a hero. Either found inside the basement of his house or at the local fast food joint, Gregory could hardly be called 'super'. Severely overweight, wears glasses, and isn't much for physical activity, he's got the brains where it counts, since he's an A+ college student. However, he's read too much comic books and manga that he decided to create his own robotic hero: The Iron Guardian. IG (short for Iron Guardian) and it's original programming were actually based off of an old AI program that Gregory made as a science project for the local fair, so it has independant thought. Often, however, Gregory will control IG's controls from his home computer (which often involves a pair of joysticks and several keypads, not to mention a healthy dose of caffeine). Gregory, however, had adaptibility in mind, so while IG uses the same basic robotic frame, Gregory can easily switch the robot between heavy-duty melee combat to skilled ranged firepower support or to stealthy operations. However, Gregory has noticed that IG is often very socially awkward, and not exactly keen on human nuances, so Gregory will sometimes override IG's actions and speech patterns, making some heroes that know IG to think that there's two people stuck in IG's harddrive.
take this one back to the notepad, and hash it out a bit. honestly it doesnt make much sense.
another thing to consider... Nightshade, Belladonna, is known to force the eyes to dilate. It was used in romantic Italy by women to make them look amorous and intelligent (hence the plant's name "Beautiful Lady")
just a note on the different meanings of names.... you might do some research and look for a particularly "Australian" poison to use for John's name... ground him to his location a bit better.
Also, you speak of aboriginal customs as being the origin of John's powers.... but john is ruddy of Caucasian descent of some sort (Irish most likely with the ginger hair and light eyes)
if westerners were considered by the aborigines to be "villains" when they came, why would they bestow their skin-walker abilities on him?
is it something that, perhaps, he was born with, and sought the remnants of the tribe out for some sort of explanation?
I've tried everywhere but no where free, any help would be great, can you send me some info in a PM please.
From what I've heard, Detroit was pretty much just Detroit before the whole being destroyed thing. Though, there were super heroes, so that's different.
What exactly are you looking for?
How did it get destroyed? Who took part in it? Who led the rebuilding process?
Dr. Destroyer (the big bad in Champions) blew it up with a space weapon and used it as a distraction to escape from a massive group of heroes. The US rebuilt it.
Ah ok, thanks, should be enough information.
I had real life get me when i least expected it. I am back now with a vengeance and a ton of ideas and backstory for one of my supers. What I am really interested in finding out. Is there a way to Copyright a name with a likeness for Superheros? if it as simple as saying Its my original idea and putting a Copyright symbol and date or do i need to go through certain channels?
I'm looking online right now to see what it entails. if you have any idea it would be appreciated.
I posted another intro thread just cause its been so long since i posted. I will be posting a nice piece of backstory tomorrow or monday for Fireplug. I would be most appreciative if you were to take a look at it Ghosthack.
thanks
Fireplug
as for the story, I'm judging the writing contest atm, but if its a quick enough read, I'll definatly look at it
Devil Squid is a cross between a comical and serious hero, depending on what's going on at the time and what kind of mood he's in. He got his powers via 'science gone awry.' The powers I have in mind for him are ink blasts and durability.
Sadly that's about as far as I can get at the moment. I don't have a good origin or idea for why 'science went awry' and I'm uncertain what kind of powers would be good for him. His fighting style would be more close quarters unarmed street fighting with some acrobatic and martial arts displays.
Any thoughts?
Thanks.:)
As far as powers go, the degree to which Devil Squid's body has mutated could affect what you can justify. How much does Devil Squid look like his namesake? Ink blasts to blind an opponent are not unreasonable even for a human form, but cephalopods also propel themselves via water "jets," and if his body is sufficiently adapted he might be able to fire bursts of air, for movement or to attack. His arms might stretch like tentacles, or even form tentacles; and suction pads could enable him to cling to walls like Spider-Man. He could grow additional limbs, permanently or "on demand." Squids and octopi have very strong beaks for cracking shellfish, and squids have claws on the ends of some of their tentacles. If Devil Squid also has some octopus DNA in him, he might gain that creature's ability to mimic the color of his surroundings for camoflage. Of course this origin presupposes research into regeneration, so he ought to have the ability to rapidly heal wounds and grow back lost body parts.
It certainly gives me a lot to think about. Do cephalapods grow back limbs? I didn't know that.
The suction pads would definitely be cool, as well as the tentacle/suction pad claws.
And regeneration is always cool.
As for origins, I don't think the character I have in mind would be a scientist, though friend to a scientist might work. Not sure about him missing a limb though, the idea was it was completely an accident, plus I like the idea of him falling in a pool of stuff. Maybe some of the prototype chemicals fell into the squid experiment tank/pool shortly before/after him.
Thanks a lot for the help!
Forum search is my friend.
Great thread, however.
A speedy, electric-based hero who's a little bit cocky and loves to take risks. He knows it's a stupid thing to do, but he doesn't care. Despite this, he's still a great hero and always thinking about what's best for the world. I'm not too sure what his nemesis will be like, but he'll probably be big and strong and easily annoyed by Sparky's insane antics. Any ideas for a backstory?
Name:
- Kolman Anderson (Might need another last name, but Kolman is definately the first name)
Hero Name:
- Gonna need one of these
Desciption:
- 6'5"
- White (pretty pale)
- Skinny (really skinny
- Blonde hair, grey-green eyes.
- 19 years old
Basic backstory:
Kolman developed powers when he was about 16 years old, but never really showed them off or told anybody because he thought people would think he was weird. His power was the ability to create and control fire, blue fire to be exact. His powers were relatively weak because he had no idea how to properly use them, but he was still able to produce balls of fire and focus the flame around his feet to hover a couple of feet off of the ground, but he was angry that he was not able to do more.
While out one day Kolman saw the edge of a poster out of the shadow in a dark alleyway... it said something about "Powers". When he got closer he noticed it said "Are you different? Better than the rest? Join [company/school name here] and learn to control you powers." Thinking this was the best thing he had ever seen, Kolman decided to run away from home that night. He arrived at the [school/building, whatever.] and realized it wasn't exactly what he expected, but it was too late to turn back and he went inside.
Upon entering the [school/building] he was greeted by an older man named Dr. [needs a name, but I'll get to this a bit later]. Dr. [needs a name] talked to Kolman and told him about all of the wonderful things the [school/company] would be able to offer him to help with his powers. Kolman practiced and trained for the next three years, not much more than working on his powers. During his training The Scientist [Dr. What's-his-name] asked Kolman if he would like a job helping the [school/company] with some problems they were having. Excitedly, Kolman accepted the offer.
The Scientist went on to show Kolman some of the lesser known part of the facility [school/company building??] in which he was working on things such as high-tech "servant" robots, suits of power armor, and doors to areas Kolman was never to enter. The Scientist, unfortunately, told Kolman his powers weren't nearly as strong as they "should be". Kolman found this odd, but asked Dr. "What's-his-name" what he should do. Dr. [name here] said, "Don't worry, I have something that may help you.", and he lead Kolman into an area where they made Power Armor. Dr. [needs a name!!] walked ahead of Kolman to a pedestal with a suit of armor standing on it. The armor was relatively old-looking compared to the other suits the Scientist had throughout the room. Dr. [name] said, "This," pointing to the suit of armor," is now yours." Kolman was in shock, he had never been given anything that would come close to this.
The Scientist went on to introduce Kolman to a series of trainers who would help in learning how to use the armor and repair it. One of the newest researchers, [Needs a name, a cool guy name.
This suit was amazing, it amplified (right word?) Kolman's power to create and control fire and even boosted his control of how the fire worked around his body, giving him the ability to concentrate it to [power here] ("Fly throught he air with ease, Emit controlled burst of fire [jumping], Boost his overall mobility [acrobatics], I dunno. Haha!)
After going on a few missions (might need a better word for this), where he had to protect a convoy and another where he had to pick up some items left for The Scientist by an unknown group, Kolman became suspicious of what Dr. [non-named dude] was planning.
One day, Kolman got back from an overnight mission and found the facility almost completely empty except for [Cool researcher guy] and a few of the other student workers (needs a better word, definately). So, he thought he would have a look around in some of the areas The Scientist told him not to... he thought nothing bad would happen. He went into on of the first rooms and found a large computer system with a lot of information about all of the other students abilities and how they could be "fixed" or altered. He didn't know what to think of this, so he went on to another room and found a few pieces of power armor that were a very impressive compared to his current suit, so he stashed a few of the pieces in his satchel and decided to move on to another room.... This room was horrifying, all along the walls and and in rows through the middle were giant glass tubes with THINGS inside of them... but some of these things looked almost.. familiar. He saw a tank with a cat-like mutant that reminded him of one of his old classmates, but the specimen in the tank was much stronger and much more animal-like than his friend, who Kolman thought had graduated (needs a better word?). Along the wall with this cat-beast were tanks of various animal-like humanoids.. some half-bird half-man creatues that were missing body parts, wolf-like creatures that seemed to be more animal than human, Huge snake-creatues with suit of power armor nearby that looked like they would work as the arms and legs if these creatures were to get into the suits. Other parts of the lab had version of the "servant" robots Kolman had seen previously, but these were outfitted with mini-guns and rocket launchers, along with many other things.
Kolman realized one thing, this was all WRONG. He could no longer be a part of this. He had to escape. He ran to the lab where [Cool researcher guy] was working, or rather.. sleeping. Woke him up and told him everything. [Researcher dude] was shocked and horrified and knew it was definately time to get out of there. Suddenly, Kolman and [Researcher dude] heard animal screams and the sounds of the robots activating. Kolman grabbed [Researcher guy] and ran through the facility till he could get to an open area where he could take off [may change depending on travel power chosen.]... Kolman and [cool research guy] had escaped the facility, but they had no idea of the fate of the other students.
So... good story? Long enough? Made nearly all of that up right then!
Side note: Dr. [Name here] and "The Scientist" are the same guy, if you didn't catch that. Heh-heh... He may be my Nemesis, using weaponry and power armor. His minions will be mutant animal-people, robots, and/or guys in power armor. I do plan on at least trying to roleplay.. and I am too tired to work on the rest of this.
Another side note: Did I seriously just type all that?!!? :eek: I do need help though, even if it doesn't really look like it. xD PM me if you help me, please?
Editted: Had a "Not" instead of "now", big difference!
The background you describe would fit well with ARGENT, a major villainous organization from the official Champions Universe. ARGENT (Advanced Research Group Enterprises) is structured like a corporation, and is devoted to research, development, and sales of all manner of advanced technology to criminals and unscrupulous governments. It often works through various front companies that appear to be innocuous, many of whose employees have no idea they're actually working for ARGENT. The group also has a history of "recruiting" test subjects for its experiments from among runaways, indigents, and other easily-manipulated people who are unlikely to be missed... particularly if they already have superhuman potential.
For a name for the character, given his powers and armor I was thinking Canned Heat, the more colloquial name for Sterno.
- Charles Kolman (Charley as a Nickname? Haha.. Charley K.?)
Hero Name:
- Gonna need one of these
Desciption:
- 6'5"
- White (pretty pale)
- Skinny (really skinny)
- Blonde hair, grey-green eyes.
- 19 years old (at the end of this story)
Powers:
- Fire (blue color)
- Power Armor (after he gets it of course, dunno if I would roleplay this story or start at the end.)
Basic backstory:
Charley distanced himself from the rest of his family. They were what the his friends called "Normals". Charley was a sort of loner, he had a few close friends who had powers like himself. They would hang out and practice with their powers in very secluded areas, trying to get better at using them. They always tried to make sure noone was nearby, but they couldn't help but notice that some of the bums around the city would still stumble onto their practice areas. But they never worried about them, there was always a bum on every other street corner shouting "All of you are freaks!! Noone should be able to shoot fire from their hands!!", but they shouted that at everybody that passed... even at cars, trash can, and cats... He and his friends wouldn't have to worry.
Charley first started developed his powers when he was about 16 years old, but he only used them when practicing with his friend, never telling his parents or younger siblings about them.. or even telling them that he had powers. His power was the ability to create and control fire, blue fire to be exact. His powers were relatively weak because he had no idea, even with practice, how to properly use them. He was still able to produce balls of fire and focus the flame around his body to boost his power slightly, but he was angry that he was not able to do more.
While on his way home from practicing, Charley heard a strange, gravely voice say "Why, hello there."
Charley looked around and realized the voice was coming from an alleyway where a man wearing a suit.
Charley replied, "Are you talking to me?"
"Yes, I am." said the man,"Come over here so we may talk."
Charley hesitated, but quietly moved over the strange person. He knew his powers were weak, but surely he could defend himself from just one man.
"Hello, young man." said the man,"I saw you and some other children using some powers down by the old baseball field. Looked to me like you could use some help... I can offer that help."
Charley and his friends always talked about joining a group and truely learning how to use their powers. Thinking this was the best thing he had ever seen, but again, he hesitated. This man looked suspicious. As Charley got closer he noticed a scar running down the right side of the man's face. He had never seen this man before.
"Who are you?" said Charley,"How do you could you possibly help me and my friends?"
"My name is Alfred Therion, but you can call me Dr. Therion. I help people just like you, people with powers. I would like to have you and your friends join me and learn to properly use your powers, and possibly work for me in the future."
Charley was unsure of this man, but knew he and his friends always wanted to improve their powers.
"Okay" said Charley,"I'll talk to me friends and see if we want your help."
"Splendid," said Dr. Therion. "Here is my card."
Charley looked at the card and flipped it over, the words: "Advanced Research Group Enterprises" were stamped on it with the name ARGENT above it in bold letters. He had never heard of this organization and neither had any of his friends once he showed them the card. They decided to run away that night. They hitchhiked their way to a large building in the middle of nowhere, it wasn't what they expected, but it was too late to turn back.
Upon entering the building, they were greeted by Dr. Therion. In the light, Charley was finally able to get a better look at Dr. Therion. He was a tall, thin man built similarly to Charley, but he had black hair and glasses. the scar running down the side of his face was more visible in the light and it looked like a big cut.
Dr. Therion talked to Charley and told him about all of the wonderful things ARGENT would be able to offer him. Charley practiced and trained for some time. Dr. Therion was always interested in Charley's ability to produce a blue fire. He always recorded Charley's training sessions and used different sensors to find out information about his powers. After training with them for some time, Dr. Therion asked Charley if he would like to begin working for ARGENT and help them with some problems they were having. Excited to finally be doing some work, Charley accepted the offer.
Dr. Therion told Charley that he was not to question any order he was given and not to look into any of the crate he was to retrieve or talk to anyone where he was going. Charley was a bit surprised, but accepted this. Dr. Therion went on to show Charley some of the lesser known parts of the facility in which ARGENT's scientist were working on things such as high-tech "servant" robots, suits of power armor, and all other sorts of technilogical gadgetry. Charley was also shown doors to areas he was never to enter.
After showing Charley around, Dr. Therion told him that although he had improved through his training, his powers weren't nearly as strong as they "should be". But, Dr. Therion told Charley that they had a solution. Charley found this odd, but asked Dr. Therion what he should do.
Dr. Therion said, "Don't worry, I have something that may help you."
He lead Charley into an area where they made Power Armor. Dr. Therion walked ahead of Charley to a pedestal with a suit of armor standing on it. The armor was relatively old-looking compared to the other suits throughout the room. Dr. Therion said, "This," pointing to the suit of armor, "is now yours." Charley was in shock, he had never been given anything that would come close to this.
The suit was amazing! Not only did it amplify Charley's power to create and control fire, but it was also highly resistant to damage. The suit was also able to be upgraded in a number of ways, including travel. He could equipt it with rocket boots, a jetpack, grappling hooks, jump-jets, or any of a number of other choices, but he couldn't have more than one.
Dr, Therion went on to introduce Charley to a series of trainers who would teach him how to properly use the armor. He was also introduced to a group of researchers who were going to show him how to repair the armor. One of the newest researchers, Nelson Rockwell, became good friends with Charley. Nelson seemed very different than the other people in ARGENT. Nelson told Charley that he had been recruited by ARGENT in a similar way, seeing advertisement about a facility in need of researchers who want to work on things "the world had never seen before." Nelson even shared some extra tips with Charley on how to get more out of his armor. He even showed Charley how to upgrade his armor in a few small ways.
After going on a few missions, where he had to protect a convoy and another where he had to pick up some crates for Dr. Therion. Charley became suspicious of what ARGENT was really about.
That night, Charley got back from his mission, he found that the facility almost completely deserted. Charley saw this as a opportunity to find out about ARGENT. Still in his suit of power armor, he decided to look around and see some of the areas Dr. Therion told him not to... he thought nothing bad would happen.
He went into one of the first rooms and found a large computer system. He went up to the first computer which was still on and found a folder with a lot of information about people with abilities. Some of the people he recognizes as his friends and some of the newer recruits. He opened up a few of the files and read through them quickly... some of them talked about how the "subjects" could be "improved" and what ARGENT's scientists could learn from them. He didn't know what to think of this.
He continued on to another room and found a few pieces of power armor that were a very impressive compared to his current suit. He thought noone would notice, so he stashed a few of the pieces in his satchel and decided to move on to another room....
This room was horrifying. All along the walls and and in rows through the middle were giant glass tubes with THINGS inside of them... but some of these things looked almost.. familiar. He saw a tank with a cat-like mutant that reminded him of one of his old classmates, but the specimen in the tank was much more muscular and animal-like than his friend... but Charley knew his friend had been killed monthes earlier, at least... that's what Dr. Therion told him. Along the wall with this cat-beast were tanks of various animal-like humanoids.. some half-bird half-man creatures that looked very strange because they were mostly human shaped with huge wings on their backs, but they had no arms. Near the tank was a harness with a pair on robotic arms that Charley could only guess would be worn by this bird-man. There were also wolf-like creatures that seemed to be more animal than human, and huge snake-creatures with suit of power armor nearby that looked like they would work as the arms and legs if these creatures were to get into the suits. Other parts of the lab had version of the "servant" robots Charley had seen previously, but these were nothing like the "servant" models. These were outfitted with thick armor, mini-guns, and rocket launchers, along with many other things.
Charley realized one thing, this was all WRONG. He could no longer be a part of this. He had to escape. He ran to Nelson's lab where he was working, or rather.. sleeping. Woke him up and told him everything. Nelson was shocked and horrified. He told Charley he had no idea this is what ARGENT was really doing. They headed towards the door and were stopped by none other than Dr. Therion himself.
"Ah, now we can't have everyone finding out more about ARGENT now, can we?" said Dr. Therion.
"Let us go, or I will be forced to do something I don't want to." said Charley as he focused his fire around his fists.
"And what would that be?" laughed Dr. Therion. "If you kill me you would have all of ARGENT after you. Then again, if you let me live, you will still have ARGENT after you for the rest of your life."
"Then you won't mind if I do this!" yelled Charley as he blasted Dr. Therion in the chest with a blast of blue fire.
Dr. Therion flew back and hit a wall. "I see you have gotten stronger.. but you are no match for ARGENT. It's too late for you now..." Dr. Therion laid there burnt and broken.. he passed out from the pain.
Suddenly, they heard animal screams and the sounds of the robots activating. Charley and Nelson knew they had to get out FAST. They ran through the facility while being chased by mutant creatures and robots.. the facility was swarming with these things. During their fight to escape Charley's suit was damages and Nelson was knocked unconsious.
However, Charley and Nelson managed to escaped the facility, but they had no idea of the fate of the other students. Together they went on to form W.A.R (Warriors and Rebels), a group for anyone who had been tricked, tested on, or anything similar by any organization such as VIPER or ARGENT.
To be continued.....
Super long post. :eek:
Here's a nemesis suggestion: Dr. Therion discovers Charley in that secret genetics laboratory and tries to stop him from leaving, resulting in a struggle that doused the Doctor in some of the lab's experimental samples. When Charley next encounters him Dr. Therion has been mutated into a literal "beast," with various animal features and body parts, which gives him a strong revenge motive for pursuing Charley.
Just as a point of continuity, ARGENT is well-known internationally for its unscrupulous practices, and is an illegal criminal organization in the United States and many other countries (although some nations allow it to operate freely within their borders, and even sponsor it), so it's unlikely the group would put its name on a poster in a public place, or reveal it to recruits or operatives until the group was sure of their loyalty.
Dang it, knew I forgot Therion finding them! I am gonna add it in really quick.
As for the "Non-public" thing, what could I use? Did ARGENT ever use any false names or anything like that? Or should I make up a name? I would prefer if there was a real fake name they used.
Well, one of the Champions PnP game sourcebooks (Teen Champions, appropriately enough) mentions an ARGENT front company called the Greenworld Foundation, which held a contest supposedly for underprivileged young people to win a summer trip to an outdoor camp. (ARGENT actually faked their deaths and kidnapped the youngsters to use as experimental subjects.) I could easily see broadening the Greenworld Foundation's public mission to "helping young people discover their potential." And it's hard to imagine a more innocuous or positive-sounding name.
Oooh, very cool. My only thing would be that it changes a lot from the beginning of my guy's story. I want it to be my own. Changed the end of the story around to go more into my supergroup (which isn't going to really be RP for anyone who would ask, but it will be pretty cool... if people join! Haha). Also changed the beginning to something better, in my opinion. Also changed the text around to seem more like they were talking and less like a story about something that happened... maybe so I can visualize it better (right phrase?). I just hope I have room enough to fit it in one post! xD
Also, the idea with "his close friends" is that I can make more similarly designed characters.. and I also put in a bit about his "younger siblings" which could be future characters.. you never know!
And so you know, I editted the post earlier so I wouldn't take up another whole page with a post. xD
Name: The Vanguard (Haven't quite decided yet.)
Real name: Ian James
Description: When not wearing his armor Ian is a guy in his mid twenties. He is of average height (around 5'8 or 5'7) and has a slender but athletic build. His hair is brown and usually a bit of a mess. His eyes are a light brown. One easily distinguishable feature about him is a scar he has across his the left side of his face. He can be a bit of a pessimist and is quite sarcastic with a caustic sense of humor.
When in costume he is clad in a light and thin armor. The armor is fitted to the contours of his body and allows easy movement and flexibility in its design. His helm, which covers his entire face, (save for two slits in it for his eyes) is fitted to the contours of his face much like the rest of his armor. The armor on his torso, head, and lower body is a bright golden color. However the armor on his arms is mostly metallic silvery color with some golden highlights.
Powers: The vanguard has super human speed, accuracy, and agility. He also has electrical powers as a bi-product of his first power. His enhanced metabolism allows him to heal at a fast pace. However, the healing is not instant. He could if damaged enough bleed out and die. (He is not invincible)
Origin: Ian James was a med student studying at a prestigious school just outside Millennium City. He ran track for the school and was a terrific athlete at the expense of his grades. During a meet Ian's heart fails and he collapses. He is later resuscitated, but left in a comatose state due to a lack of oxygen to his brain. His parents are given the decision on whether to keep him on life support or pull the plug. As they sat grieving over their son a mysterious man entered the room. He informed them of a new experimental drug that he was "sure" would bring their son back to life. His parents of course took this offer wanting to do anything to save their child.
Ian would later awaken on the floor in a large room filled with hospital beds. He had a tube down his throat, and an arm full of different IVs. He felt terrible, cold, every single noise appeared to be amplified by a tenfold. The light hurt his eyes and it took him some time to realize he was in the medical center of his university. He smelt smoke, the building was on fire.
All hell had broken loose. A throng of patients and students had been given strange new abilities. Some stood blankly in shock; others were busy taking revenge on the doctors and innocents in and outside the medical center. As Ian stumbled outside he saw one of his former classmates, a girl named Ellen Deane, being held by the throat by what appeared to be a half-man half-lizard in a hospital gown.
He uses his powers for the first time and rams the mutated student with a high speed tackle. This followed by a storm of electricity firing from his body into the mutant, cooking him internally. Ellen walked over to Ian and then threw him into a car in the adjacent parking lot with extreme force. Ellen looked back at him before going back into the chaos and yelled to him "did you really think I would need help from someone like you."
Ian watched from a distance as his former friends either killed or were the recipients of a brutal violent assault from freshly formed super humans. Several vans arrived at the scene, their back doors opened and many agents wearing suites and others wearing hazmat suites began gathering up the students.
Ian escapes the massacre as do many of the other supers... Looking back on what happened he holds a grudge with himself. He wonders why he didn't try and stop what happened that day. He chooses to never think twice about rushing into danger whatever the sacrifice may be.
This is all I got so far... Not quite sure how he should get his suit .... Nothing seems to work out too well. I wanted him to forge it himself but he really has no resources to do so... He is a work in progress but I think he's understandable.
My only thing is where you said Why would some men wear normal suits while other wear hazmat suits?
Also, your character story would totally go with my supergroup.
Oh, and I think just Vanguard works well.
Now onto your background.
I like your idea of the power suit giving him control of his power rather than "giving" the power to him. However, I think his suit should take damage while leaving the test facility. It would make things more difficult and put him in a more vulnerable situation. This would make it so instead of running it would become maybe a regular necessity to confront ARGENT troops in order to repair his suit. And the doctor should definetly become the nemesis. Like a post before mine said he should become the victim of his own work and become horribly mutated but extremely powerful.
Hope I was able to help you a little bit. As for names.... How bout Fire Storm? Crimson Warden? His name should incorporate his main power with some sort of structure or title that represents toughness.
- Eric (might change & last name unknown)
Hero Name/Nemesis Name:
- Xeroh (undecided)
Alignment
-N/A
Description:
- 6'2''
- Mixed with Black & White
- Fit,around 175 pound
- Black Hair - Hazel Eyes
- 17 years old
Basic back story:
As a young boy Eric grew up worshiping his father, Keagan. Keagan was known through the world as one of the "Elements". The "Elements" Which was a group of 6 super humans wielding the powers of Fire, Wind, Lightning, Water, Ice, and Keagan wielding the power of earth. Each of the members wears a necklace indicating their element. Eric however wielded the power of arcane energy.
When challenged to the death the "Elements" always accepting, taking it as another opportunity to prove their dominance. Keagan was challenged by a man in a black trench coat(buttoned-up to hide the 2 swords he used in combat) and a white mask, with a blank face on it. This masked man was known as "Blank"(Name may change). Every time he expressed an emotion, his face molded into that emotion, (i.e, happy his mask molds into a smiley face
Eric watches with a smile on his face as he is about to watch his father in action. The fight begins and Keagan makes the first move. (OK, it would be pretty difficult to portray this whole fight scene so i'm gonna have to skip it.. It ends with blank getting close enough to Keagan, hitting his pressure points rendering his arms useless, making it impossible for him to use his powers. Blank knocks him to his knees you see a smile on his mask
Blank picks up Keagans limp body, and rips off the necklace, claiming his prize. Blank walks to Eric and says "I'm sorry you had to see this child, but when you're old enough seek me out and maybe you can claim this necklace back one day. (Blank -
Now, Eric awakes in a small shack, laying on a man made bed. He glances at his body notices the damage and the bandages covering his body. Now, he lays there inert with the images of his father's death playing over and over again in his head. A man enters the room, disrupting Eric's trance. It is hard to make out the man's face, for it is dark. The man sits Eric up, and puts a cup to his mouth. "Drink this, you need your rest" *Eric drinks the liquid substance* it is bitter, nasty flavor. Eric can hear the crash of waves outside, then he lays down and begins to sleep. The man leaves the shack and on his way out says "we've got a lot of work to do.."
Eric wakes up a few days later. As he gets up he feels his body pulsate in pain. He stumbles over to the sink and mirror and glances at himself. *The shack door opens, and Jingov (The unknown man from before) stand in the doorway*
Jingov- "I see you're awake child. What is your name?"
Eric- " ....... "
Jingov- "Follow me."
Eric follows Jingov outside to a campfire. Jingov sitting on a long oak like log, Eric sitting across from him. Jingov then says...
"What happened to you?"
Eric sits there, with his head down and images of his father's death running over and over again in his mind. Then, a single tear drops from His left eye. Eric then tells Jingov of the murder of his father and how he wants his revenge. Jingov then says...
"Your life CANNOT be based on revenge... Revenge corrupts the mind... the body.. the soul!"
Jingov then spends the next few years treating Eric as his own son. Jingov thought of this as a Father-Son relationship. But Eric knew that no one could replace his father. Jingov began teaching Eric to use his powers properly, how to control his arcane magics. And to use them to defend and heal himself. Jingov also taught Eric many different trades, He taught Eric to use his powers to hunt, fish, create armors from leather found on different animals and fend for himself.
Using these trades Eric created his own armor made of tough hide, Strong enough to stop bullets. And to stop the slashing attacks of a sword. Eric also created a cloak, which was used to cover his entire body, from the neck down. (example - Cloak used by the akatsuki from Naruto.)
One night, Eric snuck from Jingov's camp and ventured many miles to a town. He sat in a tavern for a few hours. While there he overheard a drunk man talk of the "Elements" and how the man of Earth was murdered a few years ago. Eric could barely contain himself as the drunk man went on blabbering of his father. Eric spun around launching arcane energy in every direction. The drunk man fled in terror. But Eric would not let this man get away.
The drunk man ran into an alley way and ran into a dead end. Eric slowly walks to the man forming arcane energy around his body. As the anger builds the arcane energy which is normally blue formed into a dark purple/black color. Eric could sense the fear in the man. Eric then concentrates all of the dark energy into his right first. Then, punching through the man without hesitation.
Eric throws the body to the side and leaves the town. On his way back to Jingov's camp, Eric realizes that this dark energy is much, much stronger than that of the blue arcane energy. The revenge and anger in his body has converted his blue arcane energy to a black aura of arcane energy. Thus making him stronger. Eric then packs his things and on his way of leaving the camp, Eric is intercepted by Jingov. Jingov sense the evil in Eric's presence. Jingov knows what he must do - he must put an end to this evil.
*Jingov reaches for his pocket and takes out a necklace, which was a symbol lightening and puts it on* Eric then realizes that Jingov has been a member of the Elements all this time. Eric then begins to build all of the dark energy that can for the fight ahead of him. ( blah blah blah, another fight scene... ends with Eric unknowingly opening the portals to the abyss, thus ripping Jingov apart.)
*Eric then takes shards of the necklace and walks away*
"From this day forth i shall be known as Xeroh! (name may change) And i shall revenge my father at any means necessary! "
To Be Continued...
( I know, it's a little choppy still needs a lot of work, threw it together in a rush lol. It is completely made form scratch. I barely have any backround of Champions. Just thought it would be fun to make a story haha. feed back would be nice though. thanks. )
But mostly what I need is some ideas for his background, his origin. Once more I want it to be a science thing, lab accident, voluntary experiment, etc.
Your nemesis should be an old man slowly falling apart from aging, obsessed with finding a way to reverse the aging process because of the pain he is wracked with daily by arthritis and other ailments. He should turn to the experimentation of the box jelly fish for it's four brains and the turritposis nutricula for it's ability to rejuvinate.
His break through should come out of the ability of rejuvination from the second jelly fish. His poor hands make a mistake however and he accidently adds box-jelly fish DNA into the first sample. The code is altered... He decides to become the first test subject of what he believes to be an awesome medical breakthrough and it is... Just not how he would imagine.
His body undergoes an intense transformation and he takes on features of a jelly fish. His bones disappear melt into his body, his brain seperates into four smaller individual brains and grows 6 eye balls, his skin loses all pigment and becomes transparent enabling you to see his nervous system and heart (along with the veins and arteries connected to is. Every other organ in his body vanishes... He becomes a human jelly fish.
His initial breakthrough should be correct. He becomes ageless and immortal. In order to die his nervous system must be removed from his body. If he is torn apart he cannot grow back all the way until that junk of himself is returned to well the rest of himself. He should be able to change the shape of his body to avoid attacks and turn himself into a living jelly fish tentacle whose sting can kill normal men (the box jelly fish is the most deadly jelly fish.) Give it a limit though, he can't stretch himself forever, that would break a physics law. Rather to reach farther he would have to exchange a portion of his body to be put into the other portion of his body being stretched. So if he needs his right arm longer then he loses his left arm momentarily, if he needs it longer than that he loses his head and his left arm and so one and so forth.
He is a student from Europe (the Netherlands) who is studying abroad, he creates a power amour as a school project.
But now I wonder how a student is able to have a power source that is good enough to power a highly developed power armour?
Is was thinking about him being a mutant who has the ability to charge objects witch he uses to create the right power source. But I feel that there is something lacking, I do not fully like the mutant idea.
Anyone got suggestions/better ideas?
(I am sorry for my somewhat broken English, I'm Dutch)
One of the classic gadget-oriented superhero origins is for the hero to have been assisting a research/design project that's secretly funded by a criminal organization, like VIPER or ARGENT in the official Champions Universe. When the project's completed its backers come to collect it, but the hero happens to be in the lab at the time, realizes what's going on, and uses the device to thwart the villains. He realizes that he has to keep the device out of the villains' hands -- and also has the chance to use it himself to Do Cool Stuff. :cool:
This kind of origin gives your character a cutting-edge suit of armor that he doesn't necessarily have the knowledge or resources to reproduce, and a reason to keep his identity secret from the villains who want the armor. If your character had a friend or mentor on the project -- perhaps the armor's main inventor -- who was killed during the villains' attack, that would give him a strong motivation to use the armor for good, to make his friends' death count for something.
Any of that work for you?
I suppose that I would be able to work with this input,
If I use this story I need to change the story here and there but that shouldn't be that much of a problem
Thank you for the quick reply, much appreciated
http://forums.prophecy.co.za/blogs/tank/origins-tank-stormhammer-363/
(yeah, I know it's not the most original idea, but I like this kind of hero)
Name: Dick Steel
Powers: Gadgeteering, and either Munitions or Martial Arts
Travel: Rocket boots! (Or a car, if that's implemented)
Costume: A classic tuxedo!
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Dick Steel was born as Tulcifer Lorunderbottom, in a tiny apartment, more shoe-box than anything
else, to a his single mother, Lorita Lorunderbottom. They lived in the more dangerous part of
the New York-slums, and life was a constant struggle to survive from one day to the next,
especially on Loritas minimum-wage waitress job. His father had left Lorita as soon as she
announced, in a burst of joy, that she carried their lovechild. Sadly, Lorita never stopped
loving him in a way. That is why, when little Tulcifer, a few weeks after he started pre-school,
asked her about his dad, in a quite distressed voice.
"All the boys in my class has a dad, and the girls do too! Why don't I have a dad Mom?"
Seeing how close to tears he was, she couldn't bear to tell him the truth. The truth, that Edgar,
a used cars-sales man had split as soon as the risk of some real responsibilty might fall
on his shoulders, left as fast as his feet could take him, was almost too much for Lorita to face
so she couldn't stand to destroy her precious little son's life.
"Well, Tulcy, your dad is actually a, uh, secret agent, called Max Strong! He has to beundercover
all the time, or else the bad guys will get him!"
She knew this was a bad lie at best, but Tulcifers face filled with nothing but earnest exctitement
and joy.
"Wow!! Really?!" he almost shouts out
"Yup, he travels all over the world in his rocket boots, and fights the evil S.I.N.I.S.T.E.R.
and their leader, uh, Alabaster van der Kwaast. He is trying to take over the world, and
your dad is the only one that can stop him!"
"Oh no!" Tulcifer exclaims, and puts his hand in front of his mouth, as to stop the words from
escaping.
"Yes, but he is not alone. His good friend, Quantum Smith, (by know Lorita was really getting
into the feel of this) gives him all sorts of gadgets and things that help your dad defeat
the Alabaster and his goons."
"What kinds of things Mum? Exploding coffee-cups, laser pens and shark boats?!"
"Uh, yeah, exactly like that! But you can't tell anyone about this, Tulcifer, or else someone
might come and take you instead!"
"I promise I won't tell anyone, Mummy, I promise so hard!"
Lorita sighs as Tulcifer runs into his room, obsessed about his dad. "Well, I'll just tell him
the the truth when he gets old enough, I'll let him enjoy this for now." she thinks, and
starts to do the dishes.
The weeks pass, and soon months, without Tulcifer doubting her story for
even one second. He just keeps asking her to tell more stories of his dad's fantastic
adventures, and everyone always ends the same way. Max foiling Alabasters plan at the last
minute, and gets away unharmed, and Tulcifer after each one, with growing determination says
"When I grow up, I'm going to be just like Dad!"
At first, when he was still wearing his litte glasses, and a beanie, Lorita just thought it was
something all kids go through, but when he insisted on the stories well into his thirteenth
year, as well as always wanting "Daddys Little Electrician" and "Physics - for KIDS!" and
stuff like that for christmas and birthdays she was a little distressed. But he still got good grades in school, had some
friends and generally seemed like any 13-year old. But Lorita was worried that she could never
tell the truth about Edgar, lest it would destroy everything the boy believed in. So she decided to let him keep this illusion of his great heroic father, as it seemd to motivating him, to make Daddy proud, as Tulcifer said, more and more frequently, and whenever he did, a strange look fell to his eyes and a steel-like expression crept over his face.
He had even started working out, because Secret Agents need to be in shape!. Lorita decided that, all in all, Tulcifer could have a much worse childhood, so she let him at it.
The years went by, and Tulcifer became a fine young man. His body was well-toned, his grades were perfect, and he had made quite a lot of lady-friends. Still, Tulcifer had never faltered in his belief that his dad really was a secret super-agent, and this worried Lorita greatly. So when Tulcifers 18th birthday was coming up, she decided that, no matter how hard he would take it, he deserved to know the truth.
But then, on the night of his 18th birthday...
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I just don't know what will come next, what is the spark that will get Tulcifer of his **** and dons the tuxedo.
Some thing's should be revealed, SINISTER is an actual organisation, and Alabaster will of course be his nemesis.
But should his mom be killed / kidnapped ? Should Edgar show up dead, with a sign from SINISTER, that proves he really was a secret agent, and that the car salesman-story just was a clever ruse?
Help plz
My suggestion to make that work: his mother was actually "programmed" with true information which she believed to be false (either through brainwashing, or her really being an artificial android), so that the future Dick Steel could be raised in obscurity safe from his father's enemies, while she unconsciously encouraged him to prepare to succeed his father. On Tulcifer's 18th birthday his mother's true memories are unlocked, and she explains the situation and reveals to Dick Steel a hidden laboratory/arsenal of gadgets Max Strong once used, maintained by Quantum Smith. Max Strong disappeared years ago, and Dick now has to find his father and aid him against SINISTER.
(BTW there are other venerable villain organizations within the Champions Universe, such as VIPER or ARGENT, that you could substitute for SINISTER if you'd like to tie your character more closely to the setting.)
and she finds a picture of her and egar in Paris (where she's never been) with a scrawl on it saying something like "We'll be together soon: You, me, and our little one. Love, Ed."
it turns out, that SINISTER has the know-how to erase people's memories and replace them with lies.
they did this to Tulc's mom, and relocated her to New York, and have secretly been keeping an eye on her all these years...
Using her as a weapon against Ed.
what she thought she was making up, was, in fact, the truth... she just didnt remember she remembered it.
Mom is a little shocked, but cant really believe what she's seeing... she shoves it to the back of her mind, and still resolves to tell her son.
But her son has a story of his own, when he gets home.
He created rocket shoes! he test flew them for the first time, today, and they worked!
moments later, SINISTER agents shatter through the windows of the tiny apartment, and Tulc tries to fight them off. When all looks super grim... In bursts Ed!
he routs all the SINISTER robo-ninjas, hugs his wife (who is stunned into shock) and stands face to face with his son, glowing with pride.
...then the sniper round pulses through Ed's chest, He's down, but maybe not out. he takes a key out of his pocket, and tells his son to run, take his mom and run... the key will help him. Tulc tries to refuse, but they both see dozens of gun sight laser lines criss crossing through the room, and Ed knows its Alabaster. He slaps a teleporter gadget into Tulc's hand, and tells him to get his mom out, again, before standing up to face his Nemesis. Tulc catches a glimps of Alabaster just as he teleports away (breaking the little device as he goes)
Tulc figures out that the teeth of the key, when laid on a map, of the city gives a list of street addresses, and figures out a pattern in them, that tells him where to use the key (a special warehouse or apartment, something.,..)
In it, he's able to hide his mom out, and finds all of his dad's gadgets (maybe meets Smith, who was expecting Ed.)
viola!
Smith begins reparing Mom's memories, while Tulc takes up the mantle.
TL;DR version is a Inquisitor from Warhammer 40K.
IE displaced in time, figures out he is on Terra some 30K years before the Heresy, and eventually decides it was the Emperor who sent him not the Ruinous Powers once the Qu'larr invade.
This idea strikes as a really good NPC to give PCs fits in a actual PnP campaign and I reserve the right to do that as well in the future
It's also possible that I am just jonesing for a 40K fix with the wife in school and thus rebuilding my armies is not even happening.
why not try to make a character with the beliefs of an Inquisitor, in a world where those beliefs are not part of the primary world dogma?
Consider how a person might grow up to have that attitude, and how they might combat their percieved enemies, in a world where they dont ammass as an army force across the battlefield...
use the inquisitor as inspiration.... instead of ducttaping it into a completely unrelated storyline and world.
Actually, I think I like your page better.
Good point, GH. As an example, there's a character from the Champions PnP game called Nebula, from an interstellar state in the Andromeda Galaxy, who was accidentally transported to Earth. Back home she was a type of police officer, dedicated to justice and upholding the law. However, her people's concept of "law" is extremely draconian by our standards, with very harsh punishments for even minor offenses; and officers like Nebula have broad discretion to punish without supervision or appeal. Nebula has followed the same code of conduct on Earth, confining her efforts to punishing lawbreakers -- which, unfortunately, includes anyone trying to prevent her from the "lawful" exercise of her duties. As a result she's branded a vigilante and hunted by law-enforcement from our world. Nebula is incapable of understanding what she considers our ignorance of the most basic tenets of crime-fighting, especially since from what she's seen, our system isn't very effective at preventing crime.
You both make good points. My idea was similar to the Nebula one, only instead of making up a background, I was going to "borrow" one.
I think I will stick it on the back burner as far as CO goes.
My next question is are the Blood represented in CO? My first serious character was based on them, a sport with electrical powers. But if they are not even mentioned somewhere, even a slight mention in the timeline or some such.....
Nope, no Blood is this version of the Champions Universe. The rights to those characters remain with their creator, Aaron Allston, so they're not part of the IP that Cryptic Studios bought.
Doesn't mean you can't create your own version of the Blood for the game, though. Alternate worlds are a well-established part of the official setting, so your character could come from one of your own devising.
Well fork. At least that gives me the author's name in order to try and track down the book. Yea I may have to just do a blatant rip off and hope he doesn't sue me
Seriously, I may use all but the name and just leave parts hazy and "mysterious" :rolleyes:
Shade. (<< common name? lol. sad face.)
Nathan Grimm.
Powers:
Martial Arts
Knives/small blades (don't know how that would be represented in game. perhaps just cosmetically like CoX.)
Darkness/Magic (i don't like how sorcery seems to center so much around summoning, but perhaps some magic bolts or some other powers i can customize to black or whatever dark color)
Teleport travel power.
I didn't really write this descriptively, it was all brainstormed in the shower this morning, lying in bed last night, and some times in class today when i probably should've been paying attention haha. So bear with me. There are two alternate intros. Hopefully this read doesn't seem daunting.
INTRO ONE:
Nathan is young, 12 or 13. He's coming home from school or any other youth activity (sports?) and walks into his house only to find his parents were the works of some evildoer (murdered/raped/etc. etc. dirty deeds). There is also a hero here subduing said evildoer, but somehow when nathan walks in the evildoer (before being killed/knocked out) makes it come off as if the hero did these things to his parents.
INTRO TWO: Same scenario, except both of Nathan's parents are secretly villains. He walks in to see the hero and his parents fighting. One of his parents is KOed and the other parent picks up the one KOed and runs/flys/teleports/tunnels away (never to return unless Nathan encounters them when he is a hero himself). Once again leaving the hero for the blame because obviously Nathan won't be able to comprehend and won't want to comprehend the idea of his parents being villains.
FOLLOWING INTRO:
Nathan proceeds to yell/harass/have a tantrum until the hero regretfully leaves. At this point Nathan is dealing with all kinds of emotions. He calls the authorities. Before the authorities show up Nathan discovers a pair of highly detailed one-of-a-kind knives left by the evildoer/villainous parents. He thinks nothing of them at the moment, and sets them aside. <insert filler here>
Later that night Nathan sneaks away from the police/investigative services to cut loose in his room. Pacing in his room, breaking things, releasing his anger/depression/confusion, doing the teenager thing. He stops and looks at himself in his mirror. (First glimpse of his darkness powers [probably because of all his emotions atm]. not darkness objectively like "evil" but darkness like shadows) The general shadows of the room cover his right shoulder and everything above his neck. All of which has completely disappeared besides his eyes; his eyes already noticeably blue are now a strong glowing blue. So picture strong glowing blue eyes floating above his now headless body. Nathan is caught off guard by what he sees and immediately looks away from the mirror and dives onto his bed to bury his head in his pillow.
He awakens to an eerily quiet empty house wondering why he seemed to have had the most terrible dream. When he walks into the main room and finds the knives set aside he is reminded of last nights events, but isntead of retreating into his depression he is suddenly filled with rage. Vengeance. He blames the hero for his parents' deaths/leaving, and he knows what he has to do.
[The rest may seem kind of rushed, only because it needs more work]
Nathan drops school, and becomes the neighborhood recluse. Some say he has gone crazy, his friends don't know what happened to him or where he went. He does nothing but remain within the basement of his home and train. train. train. train. He runs most of the night to build his endurance, he works out and trains with his knives during the day. He also teaches himself is own form of offensive martial arts.
Around the age of 18 or 19 (Yes, 5 or 6 years.) he goes out to hunt down the hero. I don't know how he finds him, but he does. Epic battle ensues. Hopefully I'm able to somehow incorporate more darkness/shadow magic into this fight, or maybe into the training before hand. Nathan fights the hero to the death. Before the hero dies he shares with Nathan some item or trinket or "wisdom about not letting vengeance take you over" that somehow shakes Nathan free of the revenge thinking and makes him realize the error of his ways (and maybe that his parents are indeed villains). He vows to turn his skills/abilities to fight crime and the works.
Shade. Still have to figure out how his name comes in. I was thinking something along the lines of him going through old family photos to find an article about his loon of a long lost great grandfather that was sent to a mental institution claiming he witnessed/has magical abilities dealing with shadows.
Feedback? =]