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Literary Challenge #48 Discussion Thread
pwebranflakes
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Literary Challenge #48 : The Long Road
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Ick. /10char
Infinite possibilities have implications that could not be completely understood if you turned this entire universe into a giant supercomputer.
Absolutely
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Cheers,
Brandon =/\=
I'll see if I can come up with anything, and look forward to what everyone else writes. :cool:
...Oh, baby, you know, I've really got to leave you / Oh, I can hear it callin 'me / I said don't you hear it callin' me the way it used to do?...
- Anne Bredon
Ok you win.
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Enjoy, and as always, feedback is most appreciated!
@icegavel - good story. Technical points: It reads easier if you put a paragraph break every time the speaker changes in a conversation. Keeping track of who's saying what in a single paragraph can get confusing. Also, a few redundancies - for instance, when the admiral says, "Put it on the main screen," it isn't necessary to note, "...it was done." We assume that a trained Starfleet crew follows basic instructions. You can, if you'd like, note what sort of image has just appeared - that gives a nice transition, as well as an excuse to describe the image you have in your head.
Your characterization, OTOH, was good. Once I worked out who was who in those conversations, they did indeed have their own voices.
Sshhh, you're asking too many questions, it's classified!
But to be quite honest, I haven't really put that much thought into the incident itself. I was more interested in how the crew (or at least the senior officers) deal with the aftermath of a mission where in the end you're torn between being happy and amazed at what you've got out of it, and mourning the friends and colleagues that you've lost.
I'll take your questions as a sign that I did a half-way decent job with it, though
Same here, i used this to tell an older story, though for once, even though it was asked, i didn't do it in the narrative of telling a report. Either way, my entry is up, so hopefully it's acceptable.
It is a very long story. It may take a while to write. But write it I shall.
Note that events have happened between this story and the last one, so there have been some crew changes. I will eventually get to writting those stories too.
HOLY TRIBBLE DUDE! You put a Wraith loose on your ship? That story needs to continue!
A Romulan Strike Team, Missing Farmers and an ancient base on a Klingon Border world. But what connects them? Find out in my First Foundary mission: 'The Jeroan Farmer Escapade'
I'm going to assume we're thinking about the same type of Wraith, and note that my younger brother actually made a costume that vaguely resembles a male Wraith using the Federation alien generator.
Now that the KDF and Romulans can also have off-duty robes, it can be transferred to those factions.
Infinite possibilities have implications that could not be completely understood if you turned this entire universe into a giant supercomputer.
I got around to writing an introduction for one of the main characters, and it rather fits the theme of this challenge - indeed, actually uses the phrase "long, strange road" at one point. So, what the heck, I'm putting it up.
(And I see it has some elements in common with @jonsills's entry... well, there are lots worse people to have elements in common with!)
I was also contemplating a dual time-frame story for this entry. Back to the drawing board...
Well technically i already have been writing more about him, he's my main toon in the game. This was just me going back and telling how he came to be onboard the ship. I haven't seen a whole lot of SG:A, to know about their wraith.... unless you're talking about a different kind from that, in which case then i'm completely lost.
A Romulan Strike Team, Missing Farmers and an ancient base on a Klingon Border world. But what connects them? Find out in my First Foundary mission: 'The Jeroan Farmer Escapade'
I might have to go back and what that now, the only one ive seen was part of the one with Trip from enterprize
I'd like any responses I get, as well as helpful criticism.
I hope it opens a new side to my character.
The story of how Ronnie got liberated without any outside assistance would definitely be an interesting one...seems like there's something there.
Her reaction to assimilation and the irreversible aspects of her Borgification reminds me of my own Admiral N'Riuw, who in my take on the STO universe is one of the lead figures in Task Force Omega. N'Riuw lives hard, parties hard, and drinks hard, perhaps as a way of giving the Borg the middle finger. He's very much on the edge of spinning out of control...an adrenaline junkie because the rush proves he can feel.
Is there something similar going on in Ronnie, maybe?
Grau and N'Riuw would be a scary combination for any bar that managed to contain both of them at the same time, for sure.
One question for you guys...I've done some looking, and does anyone have any specific information on what was going on in the STO universe in Cardassian space from the years 2400-2407? I am toying with the idea of writing a story about Alyosha when he was the XO of the Avandar.
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Seriously, I just decided to leave the X'es of the background story in place, a secret mission and a worried relative trying to fill those gaps.
Hope you enjoy it and I'm open for any constructive hints.