@aten66 - Dude, this was awesome stuff. Favorite line: "It's been another year gone by, at least that's what I can glean from these tight lipped fools." That actually made me chuckle audibly enough for a nearby patron to look at me as I read this at a local Blimpie.
@hawku001x - Chaos captured uniquely here. Poor Seifer, yet he gets what he deserves!
@starsword - Dare I say, this entry was "pretty" I think a lot of the military jargon and acronyms was a little distracting for me, yet I do recognize some of them and true meaning can relatively understood. Plus it fits the Kanril's style of speech, as it were.
Kathryn has disappeared in a transporter accident ... or has she?
So, I had a Talaxian BOff because I was a sucker. I never really liked the race (Neelix notwithstanding) and they never really did anything for me in the game. I need to make space and of all my BOffs, Brin had to go. At the same time, Cira was an underused BOff that got placed on the bridge of Solaris in-game so I wanted to put her somewhere she is likely to be seen more often (kinda like how Miles O’Brien did in TNG, and I like the actress).
Sticking with the vignette style, I actually trimmed some description, some explaining and Kathryn's response back on the ship. I think the piece was made better for that decision.
Sticking with the vignette style, I actually trimmed some description, some explaining and Kathryn's response back on the ship. I think the piece was made better for that decision.
It felt very tight - it didn't feel like there were any gaps in the story (nothing crucial was removed)
Fate - protects fools, small children, and ships named Enterprise Will Riker
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Kathryn has disappeared in a transporter accident ... or has she?
So, I had a Talaxian BOff because I was a sucker. I never really liked the race (Neelix notwithstanding) and they never really did anything for me in the game. I need to make space and of all my BOffs, Brin had to go. At the same time, Cira was an underused BOff that got placed on the bridge of Solaris in-game so I wanted to put her somewhere she is likely to be seen more often (kinda like how Miles O’Brien did in TNG, and I like the actress).
Kathryn has disappeared in a transporter accident ... or has she?
So, I had a Talaxian BOff because I was a sucker. I never really liked the race (Neelix notwithstanding) and they never really did anything for me in the game. I need to make space and of all my BOffs, Brin had to go. At the same time, Cira was an underused BOff that got placed on the bridge of Solaris in-game so I wanted to put her somewhere she is likely to be seen more often (kinda like how Miles O’Brien did in TNG, and I like the actress).
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@hawku001x - Chaos captured uniquely here. Poor Seifer, yet he gets what he deserves!
@starsword - Dare I say, this entry was "pretty"
So, I had a Talaxian BOff because I was a sucker. I never really liked the race (Neelix notwithstanding) and they never really did anything for me in the game. I need to make space and of all my BOffs, Brin had to go. At the same time, Cira was an underused BOff that got placed on the bridge of Solaris in-game so I wanted to put her somewhere she is likely to be seen more often (kinda like how Miles O’Brien did in TNG, and I like the actress).
I hope you enjoy
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Cast for crew:
Kathryn Beringer - Rachel Nichols
Anthi Ythysi - Katheryn Winnick
Staza Murai - Sarah Lind
Cira Beitz - Selma Blair
Omazei - Gemma Arterton
Brin - Miles Teller
Vaadwaur Commando - Male street extra 1
Vaadwaur Soldiers (2) - Male street extra 2 and 3
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Sticking with the vignette style, I actually trimmed some description, some explaining and Kathryn's response back on the ship. I think the piece was made better for that decision.
It felt very tight - it didn't feel like there were any gaps in the story (nothing crucial was removed)
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So much action and well written. Love it. Awesome work!