College Essay on PW

Last - Harshlands

How should i begin my hook? b:victory

Bloop - Harshlands

"In the Perfect World.."

Edit* Actually, what kind of essay is it?

Last - Harshlands

I want it to be blue in a colorless world.

Konariraiden - Heavens Tear

Here, I got an opening sentence for ya that'll guarantee you an A in whatever class you're taking...especially Business majors.

"HI, BILLY MAYS HERE!"

lifegod90

Lol South Park FTW.b:bye

MurderPriest - Harshlands

Depends on the class. For a communications class once, I used PWI as an example of a way people communicate on the internet. It was awesome.

This is a direct quote from the essay "lol i pwn3d j00 n00b."

BeingHope - Harshlands

Mhmmmm, thats interesting..... Begin with....

"A new world of adventures for people like you fails who don't understand this should leave" ROFL JK lmao >.<

Geeeeeh how about.....

"A place to escape from reality and become who you truly want to be or change yourself. A world of endless dreams......"

xD......................................... b:chuckleb:laugh

Rofl sorry, not the best at essays.. Stories, yes.... Essays however... b:sweat

Devoted - Lost City

essay on pw?


here's a thought..


"Hi, I'm Last. I have an addiction...

BeingHope - Harshlands

Devoted - Lost City wrote: »

essay on pw?


here's a thought..


"Hi, I'm Last. I have an addiction...

b:chuckle omg lmao b:laugh love it! b:pleased

Bond - Harshlands

Devoted - Lost City wrote: »

essay on pw?


here's a thought..


"Hi, I'm Last. I have an addiction...

"... like many others who also play this game known as Perfect World. I admit this freely. However, there are those who claim to have shed this addiction and even go so far as to condemn the game they once loved as a broken system of corruption and a haven for socially crippled human beings. In actuality their thoughts and attention are still very much chained to this game, as demonstrated by their continual scrutiny and harassment of its community. This essay will seek to examine the inner motives and struggles of these people in an attempt to uncover the disturbing truths that drive such hypocrisy."

Paimage - Harshlands

Bond - Harshlands wrote: »

"... like many others who also play this game known as Perfect World. I admit this freely. However, there are those who claim to have shed this addiction and even go so far as to condemn the game they once loved as a broken system of corruption and a haven for socially crippled human beings. In actuality their thoughts and attention are still very much chained to this game, as demonstrated by their continual scrutiny and harassment of its community. This essay will seek to examine the inner motives and struggles of these people in an attempt to uncover the disturbing truths that drive such hypocrisy."

Are you an english teacher? good english right there manb:cool

BeingHope - Harshlands

Paimage - Harshlands wrote: »

Are you an english teacher? good english right there manb:cool

O__O omg he is amazing... <.< what are you doing, get out there and write a novel!

Aznchristmas - Harshlands

Bond - Harshlands wrote: »

"... like many others who also play this game known as Perfect World. I admit this freely. However, there are those who claim to have shed this addiction and even go so far as to condemn the game they once loved as a broken system of corruption and a haven for socially crippled human beings. In actuality their thoughts and attention are still very much chained to this game, as demonstrated by their continual scrutiny and harassment of its community. This essay will seek to examine the inner motives and struggles of these people in an attempt to uncover the disturbing truths that drive such hypocrisy."

learn to make your words say more for less

"this game known as perfect world" - perfect world
"I admit this freely" - i admit this
"even go so far as to condemn" - condemn
"still very much chained" - chained
"this essay..." - lolbad

i am drunk

Bond - Harshlands

Aznchristmas - Harshlands wrote: »

learn to make your words say more for less

"this game known as perfect world" - perfect world
"I admit this freely" - i admit this
"even go so far as to condemn" - condemn
"still very much chained" - chained
"this essay..." - lolbad

i am drunk

There's a difference between using many words to say nothing and using many words to say exactly what you want. Anyone with half a high school education can recognize that your changes have crippled the message by removing critical nuances and details. As for the "this essay" complaint, go read some academic journals and then get back to me.

Though if you really were drunk, all is forgiven. Get off the computer and go get some ****.

Devoted - Lost City

Bond - Harshlands wrote: »

"... like many others who also play this game known as Perfect World. I admit this freely. However, there are those who claim to have shed this addiction and even go so far as to condemn the game they once loved as a broken system of corruption and a haven for socially crippled human beings. In actuality their thoughts and attention are still very much chained to this game, as demonstrated by their continual scrutiny and harassment of its community. This essay will seek to examine the inner motives and struggles of these people in an attempt to uncover the disturbing truths that drive such hypocrisy."

i r am an addiction. did u write this last night? i hope this wasnt the highlight of ur night :<

brb losing sleep over perfectworld. way to ruin my thanksgiving bond. b:cry

Aznchristmas - Harshlands

Bond - Harshlands wrote: »

There's a difference between using many words to say nothing and using many words to say exactly what you want. Anyone with half a high school education can recognize that your changes have crippled the message by removing critical nuances and details. As for the "this essay" complaint, go read some academic journals and then get back to me.

Though if you really were drunk, all is forgiven. Get off the computer and go get some ****.

"this essay" is fine, the rest of the sentence is loaded with baggage.

what nuance have you gained by saying anything you've said?

this game known as perfect world? - adds nothing, no substance

there are those who claim that blah blah
your subject is there, your verb is are, the object is "those who ..." b:cry clearly that's bad sentence structure

all your words do is make your paragraph longer.
anyone can see that you know big words.
some of us can see that those big words are meaningless

i'm not trying to flame (ok last night i was), but i'm curious as to why you think any of those additions are necessary

BeingHope - Harshlands

Aznchristmas - Harshlands wrote: »

"this essay" is fine, the rest of the sentence is loaded with baggage.

what nuance have you gained by saying anything you've said?

this game known as perfect world? - adds nothing, no substance

there are those who claim that blah blah
your subject is there, your verb is are, the object is "those who ..." b:cry clearly that's bad sentence structure

all your words do is make your paragraph longer.
anyone can see that you know big words.
some of us can see that those big words are meaningless

i'm not trying to flame (ok last night i was), but i'm curious as to why you think any of those additions are necessary

b:chuckle Wow, you would be better than my languages teacher at school, she's a good person and all but she's a fail, she's re-teaching what we learned in elementary LOL

MurderPriest - Harshlands

Aznchristmas - Harshlands wrote: »

"this essay" is fine, the rest of the sentence is loaded with baggage.

what nuance have you gained by saying anything you've said?

this game known as perfect world? - adds nothing, no substance

there are those who claim that blah blah
your subject is there, your verb is are, the object is "those who ..." b:cry clearly that's bad sentence structure

all your words do is make your paragraph longer.
anyone can see that you know big words.
some of us can see that those big words are meaningless

i'm not trying to flame (ok last night i was), but i'm curious as to why you think any of those additions are necessary

They pad out your essay to meet length requirements? That's what I do when I don't give a damn about the essays I write for college.

It works, too. Just use big words and people eat that up.

Zinova - Harshlands

Yo wtf that's my cube mule...

Dustinmurphy - Harshlands

You got a life write about that, oh wait....b:chuckle

Bond - Harshlands

Aznchristmas - Harshlands wrote: »

"this essay" is fine, the rest of the sentence is loaded with baggage.

what nuance have you gained by saying anything you've said?

this game known as perfect world? - adds nothing, no substance

there are those who claim that blah blah
your subject is there, your verb is are, the object is "those who ..." b:cry clearly that's bad sentence structure

all your words do is make your paragraph longer.
anyone can see that you know big words.
some of us can see that those big words are meaningless

i'm not trying to flame (ok last night i was), but i'm curious as to why you think any of those additions are necessary

I cannot believe this.

"this game known as perfect world" - perfect world

Hi, I'm the reader. What in the **** is Perfect World? Using "called" works as well but that's one less word and if you're gonna complain about that you might have childhood issues.

"I admit this freely" - i admit this

I admit this =/= I admit this freely =/= I admit this ashamedly =/= I admit this (fill in your own adverb here)

"even go so far as to condemn" - condemn

"still very much chained" - chained

I don't see how you don't understand this. "Even go so far" indicates a level of impudence and contradiction that essentially FORMS THE THESIS OF MY ******N ESSAY. "Still" means they were chained before; "very much" gives a magnitude as opposed to "moderately chained" or "slightly chained."

Jesus Christ kid, you remind me of the review board for academic journals, except much less intimidating and much more---what's the word--- ****. If you're gonna nitpick about my essay (or the very small, very unedited slab-of-bull**** portion of it), at least find legitimate mistakes. Anything else you would like me to educate you on?

BeingHope - Harshlands

Bond - Harshlands wrote: »

I cannot believe this.

"this game known as perfect world" - perfect world

Hi, I'm the reader. What in the **** is Perfect World? Using "called" works as well but that's one less word and if you're gonna complain about that you might have childhood issues.

"I admit this freely" - i admit this

I admit this =/= I admit this freely =/= I admit this ashamedly =/= I admit this (fill in your own adverb here)

"even go so far as to condemn" - condemn

"still very much chained" - chained

I don't see how you don't understand this. "Even go so far" indicates a level of impudence and contradiction that essentially FORMS THE THESIS OF MY ******N ESSAY. "Still" means they were chained before; "very much" gives a magnitude as opposed to "moderately chained" or "slightly chained."

Jesus Christ kid, you remind me of the review board for academic journals, except much less intimidating and much more---what's the word--- ****. If you're gonna nitpick about my essay (or the very small, very unedited slab-of-bull**** portion of it), at least find legitimate mistakes. Anything else you would like me to educate you on?

b:surrender He wrote really nicely though............. >.< Can't you appreciate what that guy wrote? Anyways.... I think it was your question to begin with.... b:chuckle

Aznchristmas - Harshlands

Bond - Harshlands wrote: »

I cannot believe this.

"this game known as perfect world" - perfect world

Hi, I'm the reader. What in the **** is Perfect World? Using "called" works as well but that's one less word and if you're gonna complain about that you might have childhood issues.

"I admit this freely" - i admit this

I admit this =/= I admit this freely =/= I admit this ashamedly =/= I admit this (fill in your own adverb here)

"even go so far as to condemn" - condemn

"still very much chained" - chained

I don't see how you don't understand this. "Even go so far" indicates a level of impudence and contradiction that essentially FORMS THE THESIS OF MY ******N ESSAY. "Still" means they were chained before; "very much" gives a magnitude as opposed to "moderately chained" or "slightly chained."

Jesus Christ kid, you remind me of the review board for academic journals, except much less intimidating and much more---what's the word--- ****. If you're gonna nitpick about my essay (or the very small, very unedited slab-of-bull**** portion of it), at least find legitimate mistakes. Anything else you would like me to educate you on?

LOL

you sound intelligent to unintelligent people. don't "chained" and "condemned" already give a sense of magnitude? as opposed to tied and criticize

essay still sucks

Nike - Harshlands

Bond - Harshlands wrote: »

I cannot believe this.

"this game known as perfect world" - perfect world

Hi, I'm the reader. What in the **** is Perfect World? Using "called" works as well but that's one less word and if you're gonna complain about that you might have childhood issues.

"I admit this freely" - i admit this

I admit this =/= I admit this freely =/= I admit this ashamedly =/= I admit this (fill in your own adverb here)

"even go so far as to condemn" - condemn

"still very much chained" - chained

I don't see how you don't understand this. "Even go so far" indicates a level of impudence and contradiction that essentially FORMS THE THESIS OF MY ******N ESSAY. "Still" means they were chained before; "very much" gives a magnitude as opposed to "moderately chained" or "slightly chained."

Jesus Christ kid, you remind me of the review board for academic journals, except much less intimidating and much more---what's the word--- ****. If you're gonna nitpick about my essay (or the very small, very unedited slab-of-bull**** portion of it), at least find legitimate mistakes. Anything else you would like me to educate you on?

are you serious, guy? dependent on your long sentences b:chuckle

BeingHope - Harshlands

Aznchristmas - Harshlands wrote: »

LOL

you sound intelligent to unintelligent people. don't "chained" and "condemned" already give a sense of magnitude? as opposed to tied and criticize

essay still sucks

LOL is that for me? Rofl *Hope eats all the information in only to find out it wasn't intelligent* Lmao, big words can appear huge to people like me b:surrenderb:cry

Nike - Harshlands wrote: »

are you serious, guy? dependent on your long sentences b:chuckle

Oooh yeah those are long! b:shocked Give him a C- at the most!

TrueWitch - Harshlands

Aznchristmas - Harshlands wrote: »

"this essay" is fine, the rest of the sentence is loaded with baggage.

what nuance have you gained by saying anything you've said?

this game known as perfect world? - adds nothing, no substance

there are those who claim that blah blah
your subject is there, your verb is are, the object is "those who ..." b:cry clearly that's bad sentence structure

all your words do is make your paragraph longer.
anyone can see that you know big words.
some of us can see that those big words are meaningless

i'm not trying to flame (ok last night i was), but i'm curious as to why you think any of those additions are necessary

Alan, teach me how to write my english essay b:surrender

Asparagus - Harshlands

I like bacon.

Last - Harshlands

Do not rush to smell the rose before contemplating its final hour.

BeingHope - Harshlands

TrueWitch - Harshlands wrote: »

Alan, teach me how to write my english essay b:surrender

b:surrender Yeah! Someone teach sis how to write her english essay too......... b:laugh Need help in french here lmao

AzaraxGore - Harshlands

b:faint I'm not EXACTLY doing the same as you (as in an essay on pwi) but I am doing the "The Effects Of A Video Game On A Persons Personal Life; My opinion in the matter"

I hope your school has "eLibrary" or you won't get much info elsewhere unless you are awesoem with google er something b:surrender

ColdSteele - Lost City

Devoted - Lost City wrote: »

essay on pw?


here's a thought..


"Hi, I'm Last. I have an addiction...

+1. I can understand liking the game and maybe playing a few hours per day... but imo writing one of your college essays about a game, tells me as an admissions employee, that you spend a little too much time on the computer.