Still trading reviews for those that want.

lolsorhand

Part 3 of my campaign can be found in my signature below, and since it's rather long. (Depending on playstyle and if you read hints or not.) I shall play your campaign, or perhaps two or three of your quests to get the review on equal grounds.

Just shoot me an reply and I will do what I can PS. Tips have run out. (Given all I can, sorry!)

422 - Yeenoghu's Bride -NW-DUMTEJ9KZ - Done and reviewed, Pm sent, and posted a message in your thread.

Where Has Justice Gone? - NW-DSN2VHDYL - Done and reviewed, I will pm details on both parts once done.

The Sound of Justice. NW-DBJT9J9JN - Done and reviewed, details have been PMed.

Breaching the Swarm - NW-DUXUHQWNP - Done and reviewed, details have been PMed.

feuygar

Hi,

I'll review your quest this evening.

Please can you review mine too, it's a story quest that I've put many many hours into

NW-DUMTEJ9KZ

Quest: 422 - Yeenoghu's Bride (Run-time less than 30 minutes)

http://nw-forum.perfectworld.com/showthread.php?411131-Proud-to-present-for-reviews-422-Yeenoghu-s-Bride


and if you're up for it, here's the first 15 minute quest I made (which unfortunately got targetted by some 1* haters who disliked the maze aspects):

The Silver Scroll
Just search for for the word silver in the best category

boomba66

I will give them a go. Only two parts of my campaign done. The first has plenty of reviews and good feedback that has helped turn it into a good quest. The second could use some plays. Both in signature or just type Tyr in search under best. I will get to yours in a few hours once im done the dentist......

nimmanu

Which one is part 3? Or do you want us to play the campaign?

I'm ready for mine to be reviewed, I think. I only have the 1 quest. Since you're trading for a long one, I am hoping that you'll be willing to play mine with a more thorough checking-out including (maybe the puzzle and) side quest if you are up to it. And if you'd tell me what side you chose in the end and what you thought of that part, that would be nifty.

NW-DUXUHQWNP



You happen across a street urchin in Protector's Enclave who looks different from the others. He tells you a tale of mist overtaking his town and its bizarre effect upon the adults of the town. You will discover that the mist is more than it seems, and the danger may be greater than ever. You must make a choice in the end...

lolsorhand

The Trials of Five - I'll play all above today!

nimmanu

Do you want feedback, or just reviews? I'm looking more for feedback than review, to be altogether honest.

lolsorhand

Well both would be fine, Always looking to improve. But please remember i'm Swedish, so i'm doing the best I can with the grammar. Riddles got featured, and while it's awesome, I should perhaps have waited to submit it until I had a proofreader with me

lolsorhand

First quest reviewed, moving on.

boomba66

lolsorhand wrote: »

Well both would be fine, Always looking to improve. But please remember i'm Swedish, so i'm doing the best I can with the grammar. Riddles got featured, and while it's awesome, I should perhaps have waited to submit it until I had a proofreader with me

Not sure if its a bug but I cannot find the first spirit crack to mend. Looking everywhere back and forth? Hint?

feuygar

Lolsorhand,

Very much enjoyed the adventure, top marks! Every scene was well thought through, with interesting colours, object placement and design. A few brilliant ideas, like the corridor, and you weren't tempted to make the jumping too difficult.

A few typo's/grammar that I can help with:

Young girl - follow the shores (just use shore)
Milak - gave a beating (add "to")
In the camp (mission) - find someone that (change to "who")
In the Brethren camp - there were two NPCs both named Kelrock Abralesters
Marcus Tharius (next scene) - not set it stone (change it to "in")
Grubb Grabb (brilliant name by the way) - uses the word "tale" two times I think you want "tell"
Servitude says "Rihteousness" typo and "hers" you can just use "her"
Brethren history (bookcase) - changes fighters of balance to fighters for balance (otherwise sounds like they're against balance)

Will definitely play your next instalment

boomba66

Found it through your statue hint!

1. Maps are great. Can't imagine how much time you spent on your twisting hallway.
2. I hate jump quests! Only cause at 40 I am not as twitchy as I once was. For fans of jump quests this is there epic story line.
3. Story-Line. Would love a little realms lore to go in with who Brethern are how it all ties together. But otherwise its a very tight story.
4. Starts a little slow and frustrating with trial of strength and valor with a lot of going back and forth but after that really picks up steam. Took me around 2 hours to complete.

Great Work!

lolsorhand

feuygar wrote: »

Lolsorhand,

Very much enjoyed the adventure, top marks! Every scene was well thought through, with interesting colours, object placement and design. A few brilliant ideas, like the corridor, and you weren't tempted to make the jumping too difficult.

A few typo's/grammar that I can help with:

Young girl - follow the shores (just use shore)
Milak - gave a beating (add "to")
In the camp (mission) - find someone that (change to "who")
In the Brethren camp - there were two NPCs both named Kelrock Abralesters
Marcus Tharius (next scene) - not set it stone (change it to "in")
Grubb Grabb (brilliant name by the way) - uses the word "tale" two times I think you want "tell"
Servitude says "Rihteousness" typo and "hers" you can just use "her"
Brethren history (bookcase) - changes fighters of balance to fighters for balance (otherwise sounds like they're against balance)

Will definitely play your next instalment

Grubb Grabb's "tale" is intended, it's the way he speaks

I will look into all of this once i'm done with the reviews, added to my notes. Many thanks!

lolsorhand

boomba66 wrote: »

Found it through your statue hint!

1. Maps are great. Can't imagine how much time you spent on your twisting hallway.
2. I hate jump quests! Only cause at 40 I am not as twitchy as I once was. For fans of jump quests this is there epic story line.
3. Story-Line. Would love a little realms lore to go in with who Brethern are how it all ties together. But otherwise its a very tight story.
4. Starts a little slow and frustrating with trial of strength and valor with a lot of going back and forth but after that really picks up steam. Took me around 2 hours to complete.

Great Work!

Well I wanted to make the fighting optional, that's the reason for the jump puzzle there. - And I really tried to make the jumping as easy as possible, while still making it abit of a challenge. Mounts can be used, movement speed might make it alot easier. I've online tried without any stats.

A little realms lore? Well, the interactables tell the alot of story. (And add to that Part 1 and Part 2)

Thanks for the playthrough!

lolsorhand

Taking a break for now. Thanks guys, also if anyone else is interested post below and i'll get to it.

nimmanu

Okay, so I'm a snoopy snooper... I'm going to write the cool things as I find them. I'll post anything else that I note into your PM box.

Zone 1... As I said, I'm a snoopy snooper. I'm finding your first area very complete and immsersive. I really love that about it. Everywhere I go, it felt 'real' and 'present'.

Yay, I got stuff already! I enjoy these side-quest tidbits, and I'm looking forward to seeing where this leads me.

Definitely made me search, lol. Which was fun, especially since, as I said, it's a thorough area.

Zone 2:

Love Grubb Grabb, lol. And I like the ship as a zone by itself. You did a good job with it.

Zone 3:

Another pretty zone so far!

I'm sensing a theme with these here statues.

And now I'm stuck (as in can't find something). Gonna PM you cause I already cheated with hints.

nimmanu

I finally figured that out and moved on to the next area with the 3 sections. I really, really loved that. The hallway was just freaking brilliant. Don't misunderstand, the whole thing is beautiful, but that was brilliant, loved it!

Well, I got to the second caius and I cannot progress. I am incapable of beating him and his crony. I am terribly sorry that I can't be actually useful and leave you a review.

I've been at this quest for hours and it's disappointing to have to give up on it, but I really just can't progress.

I love that it's challenging, but it's over-my-head challenging, lol. Your environments are just amazing. Stunning, really. And I love what I've seen of the quest line, as well!

The only things I really noticed were grammar things, and I'm a bit of a grammar gestapo. So if you want anything from that quarter, give me a hollar. But since you're not a native speaker, I think even that is phenomenal. It's far better than I could do in swedish!!

lolsorhand

nimmanu wrote: »

I finally figured that out and moved on to the next area with the 3 sections. I really, really loved that. The hallway was just freaking brilliant. Don't misunderstand, the whole thing is beautiful, but that was brilliant, loved it!

Well, I got to the second caius and I cannot progress. I am incapable of beating him and his crony. I am terribly sorry that I can't be actually useful and leave you a review.

I've been at this quest for hours and it's disappointing to have to give up on it, but I really just can't progress.

I love that it's challenging, but it's over-my-head challenging, lol. Your environments are just amazing. Stunning, really. And I love what I've seen of the quest line, as well!

The only things I really noticed were grammar things, and I'm a bit of a grammar gestapo. So if you want anything from that quarter, give me a hollar. But since you're not a native speaker, I think even that is phenomenal. It's far better than I could do in swedish!!

Grab a friend and finish the boss , the area is on the map. (It's made so that people can take a break and return later etc.) Otherwise, what class are you playing? I've had no problems with them. They aren't stacked, and they don't heal up.

But do send me the grammar things, would be thankful '

Also if you're on mindflayer we could burn through it. Alas, I know the ways so it only takes me 30 min tops to run through.

nimmanu

I know all the ways now, too... so there. I'll never forget some of them because it took me so long to find them... *chuckles*

Anyway, I suited up with all of my buff potions and beat it with just about 5-10% health left...

It's challenging, and I think that's a really good thing. But I won't do any of your quests anymore without my husband along on his char.

Even as hard as it was, I loved it. Reminds me of original EQ where you could spend literally a full day trying to get your gear back from some zones. I really love a challenge. I'll scream and growl and moan and groan... but darn if it doesn't feel GREAT to win after all that!

Additionally, as an almost totally heal-centric DC, I think that played a huge part in it being rough for me.

(I'm on Dragon, I'm afraid).

lolsorhand

nimmanu wrote: »

I know all the ways now, too... so there. I'll never forget some of them because it took me so long to find them... *chuckles*

Anyway, I suited up with all of my buff potions and beat it with just about 5-10% health left...

It's challenging, and I think that's a really good thing. But I won't do any of your quests anymore without my husband along on his char.

Even as hard as it was, I loved it. Reminds me of original EQ where you could spend literally a full day trying to get your gear back from some zones. I really love a challenge. I'll scream and growl and moan and groan... but darn if it doesn't feel GREAT to win after all that!

Additionally, as an almost totally heal-centric DC, I think that played a huge part in it being rough for me.

(I'm on Dragon, I'm afraid).

The we dine in hell when the servers merge! - And yeah bring your hubby, you'll have a blast through the quests, that's a promise. They were originally designed for duo, Part 1 atleast. - But I nerfed it heavily as I added the "Normal" difficulty. In the caverns.

Other than that there isn't much challenge to the final area I believe, unless you decide to fight the optional boss. (That has sliders all the way up for a party.)

saerrael

I still need to run this! *notes down*

jintortle

I will trade a play!!!

The Wonderful Wizard of Og nw-dqeedzbrg and also If you wish you could do my short under 10 minute quest "Protectors Enclave Garbage Dump".

I am going to look at yours now!!!

Ok I finished - Loved it.

The spiral upside down walkway fantastic.

I wanted to get out of the snowstorm so bad.

Only problem I had was that the boss mobs seemed to be resistant to my cold wizard spells and were so hard to take down - could not freeze - levitate - knock back or even Daily Spell - had little effect and with this the stacking at the end was devastating. Luckily I had some full health pots left over from the Caturday event .

Also the hint at the Statue at the beginning of the Storm blizzard section It says "to ways" instead of Two - but overall a great challenge and fantastic environments. Unfortunately not as fun for a Ranged spell class- but oh well that's life

Cheers - I look forward to what you think of mine!!!