Day of the Dragons - Ch1 Discovery

zlainfurry

Day of the Dragons - Ch1: Discovery by Ayanme Fury@zlainfurry
Short Code: NWS-DBJ6IJPUL
Mission Type: Dungeon Crawl w/ Story
Average Duration:25mins
Amount of Combat: Heavy
Starts at: Coriol Road Door.
Mission Summary: Investigate noises in an abandoned house, and ultimately learn of an ancient and powerful wand.
Author tips/hints: There are no invisible walls in the cave portion. I believe that you're not truly exploring a cave, unless the possibility of falling to your death, is present.
Screenshots/attachments: Low Res Pic

a couple other pics:
Facebook Neverwinter Foundry Photo Album


Map totally updated. Fully customized lighting and alterd rooms/terrain. working on updating the quest now.

visigoth18

-My Video Review-

[IMO] the quest description should come first, then all your notes.

don't put too much text in the "Objective complete" it pops up and disappears during combat to quickly

I got to 'Eliminate The Threat' and could progress no further, the 'dungeon' hallway was blocked by a pipe, so I had to abandon the quest.

ok give mine a try and tell me what you thought

Edit: 1.) The quest description fades out on lower resolutions. my suggestion "put all your notes on an item in/ on your map and not in the description"

zlainfurry

fixed it heh, it's a root ~_^ didn't realize it was too low.

visigoth18

ok, I'll give it another shot when it's Published... My Review of your quest

Hope you play my quest, if your smart/ quick to pick up on whats going on... you can do it in 25mins

meysa

***Review***

Upon entering it says search for clues, so you click an anvil and the quest advances. Can you tell me what about the anvil let me think it was a clue?

I would like to see a little bit more of the story develop throughout the quest, instead of it all being packed in right there at the end. I think it would've made it even more enjoyable.


Overall though, it's a good start.

oortexplorer

meysa wrote: »

***Review***

Upon entering it says search for clues, so you click an anvil and the quest advances. Can you tell me what about the anvil let me think it was a clue?

I would like to see a little bit more of the story develop throughout the quest, instead of it all being packed in right there at the end. I think it would've made it even more enjoyable.


Overall though, it's a good start.

Just played your quest, sorry for the delay. I guess I'll basically have to echo what Meysa said above. It's a very good concept for a quest and campaign, everything is laid out logically and Act 2 is set up nicely. Maps are well-presented (for the most part), and good use of light and colour in the glygh rooms.

The story does feel like a rough draft right now though, probably needs another level of polish. We are basically told nothing throughout most of the quest, except things like Search For Clues. There's a dusty anvil in the corner. Interact with anvil. Search For Clues Complete. If we're searching for clues, we need to know why, and why something like the anvil might be a clue. You did provide some good information at the end filling out the story, some of that is perfectly placed but I'd recommend doling out a little more information early on.

Maps seem to be well-made, though perhaps in need of a little detail in certain places. There's a point in the cavern where you have to make a long walk back to the other end, and since you've already passed this way and there's not a lot to look at there, it feels like it needs either something to spruce up the return trip, or a portal to get back quicker.

So some work is needed, but it's definitely a good start.

zlainfurry

Big update to the visuals throughout the quest. Working on next draft of the quest now. Let me know what you guys think.

redneckronin

Zlainfurry, I have sent you a PM regarding your quest.

All The Best

zlainfurry

replied to your msg, Ronin

zlainfurry

Updated the story and information given to the player. Added a mission warning/note prompt at the start. small visual changes.