Literary Challenge #26 : Senior Officers
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Literary Challenge #26 : Senior Officers.
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Just post up the bios of my characters from in game?
A Romulan Strike Team, Missing Farmers and an ancient base on a Klingon Border world. But what connects them? Find out in my First Foundary mission: 'The Jeroan Farmer Escapade'
I might participate in this one.
As far as i've seen so far it's pretty much up to you. you can do either/or or maybe a little of both. Branflakes usually gives plenty of leeway to let the writer do what works best for the story.
I already know exactly how i'm going to be doing this one and will be jumping on it after i get back.
A Romulan Strike Team, Missing Farmers and an ancient base on a Klingon Border world. But what connects them? Find out in my First Foundary mission: 'The Jeroan Farmer Escapade'
This time it takes the form of my captain trying not to think about what he is about to do,so he slips in and out of reflective reminiscing.
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Very good story. I hope that Zazhid says yes!!
Also, I'd like to send you a friend request in-game, so do you think you could tell me your in-game @handle? :cool:
I had the same thought, which is why I wrapped a story around it the way I did.
In the end, the only limitation is your imagination.
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GAH! that's vaguely similar to how i was doing mine. Not entirely of course but My captain is just left with time to think after an injury so he starts thinking about his crew.
A Romulan Strike Team, Missing Farmers and an ancient base on a Klingon Border world. But what connects them? Find out in my First Foundary mission: 'The Jeroan Farmer Escapade'
All will become clear in my next entry, ideally as an integral part.
If not, I'll be dropping hints a plenty :P
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I look forward to your next entry, then.
Also, since you seem to be as much of a Gundam Fan as I am, I would like to send you a Friend Request in STO, so we can talk with each other in-game and maybe team up sometimes. :cool:
Would that be okay? If so, I would like to know your in-game @handle, so I can send the Friend Request.
I'm hoping not but I've never liked soppy happy endings :P
I'm cruel that way
And yes, that is Ernie Houser, the DOFF man. Cos my BOFFS are friends with the DOFFS. We're all one big happy crew.
A Romulan Strike Team, Missing Farmers and an ancient base on a Klingon Border world. But what connects them? Find out in my First Foundary mission: 'The Jeroan Farmer Escapade'
About the only thing I found that bothered me was the abrupt switch from third-person to first-person writing in anurorx0's entry 'Getting a little R&R (or trying to)'. Hard to tell if the entry was supposed to be a personal account or an impersonal one.
Love the differences in approach to the challenge, though!
The third person section was narration to set the scene. The account itself is indeed intended to be from the perspective of my captain.
Very much akin to any programme where a narrator gives a quick overview, then the actual story of the day starts off.
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Ah, I see. I wasn't trying to knock it, just note that it's a bit disorienting. One thing I might suggest is to put the narration in italics to set it apart from the main text, but that would be up to you to decide if it would improve it or not, or if the disorientation itself helps tell the story.
Great job, by the way!
don't series bibles seem to take forever?
http://sto-forum.perfectworld.com/showpost.php?p=5475981&postcount=7
Writing biographies can be fun, but I decided to take a different approach and show you some everyday experiences in the life of my ship's counselor, Commander sh'Raul. He's a bit blunt and to the point. I made him more like Hugh Cambridge (from the Voyager relaunch) than Deanna Troi (who I find absolutely boring).
I've been working on this one for three months (with a month and a half downtime for STLV prep), and so far it's a forty page document, and i'm only a third of the way through. So, yes, it does take quite a bit of time, but so does a novel and especially a series of novels.
Hmm...not to be critical, but I was under the impression a 'single entry' implied a single forum post. Part of the challenge for myself was distilling what could have filled several pages into an descriptive text that didn't occupy more than that. However, the part about 'write as little or as much as you want' does sound like you could fill twenty pages of the Forums and label it a 'single entry'.
The important part is the sharing of backstories, though, and I think you did that
Actually, my entry was condensed. There is a lot more to many of these characters, and two officers were actually omitted. Hard to consolidate years of work and still get a feel for the characters involved for me.
The topic question is rather broad since my series is in full swing with about 12 different characters just on one ship alone. I try to do one post at a time, but sometimes it takes more than that when there's something I want to convey.