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Uncertain if my new mission is too gruesome for Foundry

csrr12905csrr12905 Member Posts: 47 Arc User
I've just published my first Foundry mission in quite a few years, and… well… I'm uncertain about it.

In particular, there is one section in which the player and their bridge officers talk their way past a Fek'ri "Troll" that intends to eat them, by convincing it that they are sick/covered in hot sauce/cleaned their uniform in vinegar and are therefore inedible.

Is this too gruesome for a Foundry mission?

[Edit]For those who wish to check it out, it's still in reviewing

Mission Name: Duty Officer Disaster
ID: ST-HGCBB7WBM
Author: sm12905
Allegiance: Starfleet
Level: 41+

A routine mission to retrieve several of Admiral Quinn's duty officers quickly turns...interesting, and you may find yourself fighting a Kazon Shakespeare, tricking your way past a Borg-eating troll, and trying not to get your ship smashed into a peanut-butter-and-jelly sandwich.
This is a short-ish action/humor mission, beginning at ESD, and continuing to the Delta Volanis Cluster in the Sirus Sector Block.
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  • markhawkmanmarkhawkman Member Posts: 35,236 Arc User
    edited May 2015
    you brief description is somewhat intriguing, but too brief to really understand the story of the mission. Elaborate please.
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  • csrr12905csrr12905 Member Posts: 47 Arc User
    edited May 2015
    Ok, here goes. The script for that particular section I'm worried about goes as follows (assuming one does not fail the puzzle at some point)
    (Troll)Fe, Fi, Foe, Fum! Which little Federation goat should I eat first?

    (Player)Ideas, anyone?

    (Science bridge officer) Sir, the Borg would have tried to fight their way through. We might have better success by tricking our way through.

    (Player)Does anyone have any ideas?

    (Engineering bridge officer) I do. *Fake Cough* You can't eat me I'm sick! You'll catch what I've got if you eat me! *Fake Cough*

    (Troll) LOOKS LIKE IT'S ONLY FOUR GOATS! DON'T BOTHER COMING OUT HERE, GEORGE, THERE AIN'T ENOUGH OF EM! Now, which of the rest of you do I eat first?

    (player)[Have Science Officer fake being sick]

    (Science bridge officer)*Fake Cough* I'm sick too! I caught it just for standing too near him! *Fake Cough*

    (troll) LOOKS LIKE IT'S ONLY THREE GOATS! YOU CAN JUST STAY IN, KEVIN! Now, which of the rest of you do I eat first?

    (player) [Have Tactical Officer say he is far too spicy to eat]

    (Tactical bridge officer) You can't eat me! This red on my uniform? It's Hot Sauce! Your mouth would burn for WEEKS!

    (troll)LOOKS LIKE IT'S ONLY TWO GOATS! THE THIRD ONE IS TOO SPICY TO EAT, TOM! Now, which of the rest of you do I eat first?

    (player)[Explain that You cleaned your uniform with vinegar, and are too sour to eat]

    (troll)GAH! Why would you do that?!

    (player ) It keeps my uniform clean?

    (troll) I'm not going to bother with just one goat. It'd hardly be a mouthful.
  • markhawkmanmarkhawkman Member Posts: 35,236 Arc User
    edited May 2015
    hehe, that's more comical than gruesome. :P
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  • csrr12905csrr12905 Member Posts: 47 Arc User
    edited May 2015
    hehe, that's more comical than gruesome. :P

    Then it's as I intended! :cool:
  • ilithynilithyn Member Posts: 903 Arc User
    edited May 2015
    I agree with Mark, it's actually rather hilarious. Tbh it sounds like something that could have been in a TOS episode :D.
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  • psycoticvulcanpsycoticvulcan Member Posts: 4,160 Arc User
    edited May 2015
    That's hilarious. Don't change a thing. :D
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  • drogyn1701drogyn1701 Member Posts: 3,606 Media Corps
    edited May 2015
    It's very difficult to be actually gruesome in the Foundry cause you can't show much. But yeah I'm with the other guys. Sounds pretty funny.
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