Trill Death Do Us Part by Capt.PFDennis

captpfdennis

Trill Death Do Us Part - Part II has just been released. The story is complete. Please consider spending your valuable time giving both parts a play. They are both story focused, solo, Federation missions.

A Cardassian prison camp has been located, forgotten since the Dominion War. You are ordered to pick up the sole Starfleet officer imprisoned there for the last 40 years. You are to return him home to a hero's welcome, but is he truly a hero?

Trill Death Do Us Part - Part I
ST-HAKULAC6Y

Trill Death Do Us Part - Part II
ST-HHRKWSIO5

Trailer: http://youtu.be/CmjgRKgNQTE




For your consideration.

captpfdennis

Both missions are now out of the initial review phase and can now be easily found. I hope you give these mission a try. Each is approximately 20-25 minutes in length. Thanks.

starfarertheta

A Review of Trill Death do us Part, a Foundry Mission by Capt.PFDennis.

General Opinion:
This was a very well put together mission that is driven by an engaging tale of mystery and suspense. Definitely worth a play through!

Highlights:
- Engaging story.
- Excellent characters.
- Great map work.
- Excellent trigger work.

For the Author (!Spoilers!):

">>>" = Suggested dialogue changes.

Dialogue with Gul Harrod:
"...but I would excersize caution while..." >>> "but I would exercise caution while..."

Map 2 Initial Dialogue:
Player Response: "...ships in the are, it was his way..." >>> "ships in the area, it was his way..."

Gul Drecek Dialogue:
"As I recall our forces back then..." >>> "As I recall, our forces back then..."

Executive Adjuctant Dialogue:
"This is not Federation jurasdiction." >>> "This is not Federation Jurisdiction."

Map 3 Initial Dialogue:
Player Response: "call down to me once your research..." >>> "Call down to me once your research..."

Map 6 Themor Dialogue:
"...last of my fleeting breath reviewing my existense." >>> "...last of my fleeting breath reviewing my existence."


All in all, I say you did a fantastic job with this one, especially that last map!

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captpfdennis

Thank you for the review. I appreciate the feedback. Typos are the worst. After so many hours, you are blind to them. I don't use copy/paste from a word program. I just write it as I go, box by box.