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When Vulcan couples undergoing Pon Far and a group of Vulcan monks sent to investigate go missing Elder Sardek contacts you directly to help find out what is happening.
Things quickly turn for the worse and not only do you have to find a way out but you uncover an insidious Romulan plot.
An entirely ground based mission with plenty of combat and a compelling and intrigueing story.
Start it today at Vulcan.
The Mysteries of Pon Farr by Bazag
Level: +16
Things quickly turn for the worse and not only do you have to find a way out but you uncover an insidious Romulan plot.
An entirely ground based mission with plenty of combat and a compelling and intrigueing story.
Start it today at Vulcan.
The Mysteries of Pon Farr by Bazag
Level: +16
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Definitely felt well-paced in my opinion with some great use of foundry mechanics to keep things interesting. I like Foundry mission that play into the established story of the game. A quick pass on the dialogues would give it some extra polish, I noticed some errors such as random characters at the end of one dialogue and a button 'Use Turbolife' as well.
Let me address some things that have been raised in reviews.
First about the large dialogue where you have to find the code for the encrypted console.
I wanted to include it as a different type of puzzle, to identify files that may contain the information necessary to unlock the encryption. There are only a very few maybe 3 options that could possibly contain the information you are seeking. If you don't want to read the extraneous stuff which adds in flavour and realism (hehehehehe) to the mission then don't. It should be a fairly quick "Do any of these files have anything to do with a code for system X?" No, go back into a different directoy. If yes, try it and see what you find.
It's additional story/background that I could not really add in any other way.
Also about the ending, yeah, it didn't need that style of ending it's just the one I went with. It's the story tellers perogative.
Author: Bazag
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Upfront Disclaimer: In case it get's lost in the report below I wanted to state upfront how much I liked this mission. Good writing, map design, overall feel and design. Great job!
Report Summary: A great mission! Highly recommended! Really well written and you did a great job developing the story. I liked the map design with a few suggested changes as listed below. The dialog was well written and executed with the exception of whats noted below. I know there are some players who do not like a lot of dialog. I on the other hand do like a good story that will draw me in and make me want to go on.
As for the spelling errors I found in some areas I think some of those are the difference between American English and the Kings English, for example the use of s instead of z in Mobilise. So I dont think those will be that big a deal.
Thanks for authoring, you did a great job and I look forward to playing more of your missions.
Specific Infornation:
Mission Description: Good job. This is clear and concise. If you are talking about the dialog prompts on Vulcan then you are correct. You do not have control over that as it is part of the Cryptic map. If someone actually called you on that then they don't understand mission creation in the Foundry when using Cryptic maps.
Grant Mission Dialog: Good.
Mission Task: Excellent. You placed the location in the mission task even after placing it in the description. Usually I see only the task itself with no location.
On Vulcan:
Dialog Elder Sardek: I liked it. Well written and intriguing. Good job.
Mission Entry Prompt: Good.
Maps:
Unknown Prison: I liked the overall design and feel of the map. The fights were well balanced and with the exceptions noted below it was a good map. As a side note it appears as though Cryptic has fixed the BOFF pathing on this map.
- Suggest in dialog change "still got" to "still have"
- Romulan guard dialog: suggest change "for us Romulans" to "for Romulans".
- Romulan Guard dialog: "honourable" should be "honorable".
- After the force field is down in the dialog the button should read, "about what she'll do" vice "about she'll do".
- The next dialog: "drop" should be "drops", and "forcefields" should be "force fields".
- Button for "Enduced Femal" should be "Induced Female".
- Other prisoners dialog buttons; "Enduced" should be "Induced".
- Dialog spelling; "tare" should be "tear".
- Map note: One of the benches on the first level is slightly off the ground. It may be sitting on something.
- I liked the first level Vulcan Monk dialog.
- Map suggestion; understanding that the crates also served a plot point perhaps use the "wall cave 01, 02 or 03 vice all the crates to create wall barriers. Youll find they work quite well to block off an area and look more like walls. Those specific ones can be found in the Interior items under Wall - Caves 01, 02 and 03.
- The dialog post door console override seems to be a repeat of the dialog in the cell when we first arrived.
- After the overriding the door you should create a new re-spawn point.
- At console Mobilise should be Mobilize Unathorised should read Unauthorized
- The project completion listed on the Romulan computers states by 2340. Star Trek Online Universe starts in 2409.
- Still a great map and well executed.
Secret Romulan Prison: Overall a great map and well balanced battles. Some dialog issues; as before forcefield should be force field.
An Unusual Place: This map seems to be unnecessary. I would suggest having the Elder appear in the transporter room of the previous map after the fight with the base commander to reveal the plot twist.
Holodeck: I like the twist at the end, very well done. Spelling dialog; Calibre should be caliber
Thanks for authoring,
Brian
What I was actually refering to is sometimes map object dialogues would trigger incorrectly such as the invisible objects in the first custom map would trigger later on down the mission. It was intermittent and had happened to people I knew so I put that in there just as a disclaimer.
Glad you enjoyed it. Alot of the s'es instead of the z'es are British/Commonwealth english same with the 'u' in honourable. Colour instead of color and so forth but thanks for noting the grammar when the Foundry is back operational again I'll make sure to update.