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  • Aesthor - Heavens Tear
    Aesthor - Heavens Tear Posts: 3,845 Arc User
    edited February 2009
    Keep writing xtrm. Despite your poor grammar and syntax that really hurts my eyes (because I'm an English minor lol!), I really enjoy them. Maybe it's a masochistic pleasure but I rather read a funny piece of poor English poetry than an elegantly crafted prose of flame. (This isn't aimed at Hisui, whose poetry I also enjoyed and I shall not deny the talent :) )
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  • Envy - Lost City
    Envy - Lost City Posts: 540 Arc User
    edited February 2009
    G4YEST

    THREAD

    EVER.


    no joke la
  • Teseanna - Heavens Tear
    Teseanna - Heavens Tear Posts: 1,021 Arc User
    edited February 2009
    fuzzles wrote: »
    That's mind blowingly terrible.

    Save the half-assed craptacular poetry for your myspace.

    I'm surprised you managed to find the time to vomit out this congealed pile of garbage between cutting yourself and getting bad haircuts.

    You've switched words around just to make them rhyme.. unfortunately, in the process you've also made them not make sense anymore. And you appear to have no sense of timing whatsoever. I suggest you look up "syllable".

    Good effort though. Don't let my criticism stop you from trying again... unless your future efforts are gonna be equally abominable. If they are, then by all means, I encourage you to let me criticism stop you. For the sake of humanity.

    If I had to nominate a single worst line from this monstrosity, it would have to be "the tale of her godly beauty is this poem all about".

    For future reference, instead of changing the words around, resulting in nonsense-disguised-as-****, try not sucking, and simply using different words. Preferably in the correct order.

    Good effort though. You can't help it that you're barely literate. b:victory

    WOOOOO! b:victory √ For the sake of humanity
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  • xtrm9
    xtrm9 Posts: 221 Arc User
    edited February 2009
    Teseanna - Heavens Tear wrote: »
    WOOOOO! b:victory

    b:chuckleb:pleasedb:chuckle
  • Rundora - Lost City_1243871147
    Rundora - Lost City_1243871147 Posts: 378 Arc User
    edited February 2009
    envy - Lost City wrote: »
    g4yest

    Thread

    Ever.


    No Joke La

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  • xtrm9
    xtrm9 Posts: 221 Arc User
    edited February 2009
    People forget that i write a poem (or whatever you wanna call it) in 3 mins of non stop typing. If you can write something better in that much short time then awesome because i am sure William Shakespeare would'nt have been able to.
    I just love all my haters you guys inspire me to write more b:pleased
  • Hisui - Heavens Tear
    Hisui - Heavens Tear Posts: 1,369 Arc User
    edited February 2009
    in my opinion theres a difference between a poem and a rhyme. The "poems" you wrote are closer to rhymes, which are what freestyle rappers rap. In that case, more freestylers can spew out rhymes like yours out of their mouth, not even typing needed, in about 1 minute. Plenty of talents out there so don't underestimate : )
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  • Cat - Heavens Tear
    Cat - Heavens Tear Posts: 1,187 Arc User
    edited February 2009
    I encourage all of his poems whether they are for me or someone else. Its nice to see someone having fun and just doing something silly and nice for someone else.

    His poems dont make me feel more important, or w.e all that was you went through, but I do appreciate them. Just as I would appreciate anyone who personally takes time out to make someone elses day a little better.

    What I still find funny is how many people are determined to bring this guy down and insult him on what hes doing for no reason lol. Thats still the sadest thing I ever seen..

    Hey look some guy is being nice on the forum and writing poetry to other people hats silly and fun.. OH noez we cant be having that.... Quick lets throw every insult at him and put him down. How dare he come put something fun on these forums!!

    Can you not see for your own sake how you look for your actions?

    I mean if my husband in real life wrote me a poem and it wasnt up to Frost standards, I wouldnt be like omg you noob, you suck so hard, you fail at life, why do you even try, save humanity never wrote another poem.. blah blah blah... And I doubt you would either if it was your gf, bf, wife, hubby, or even close friend. And if you seriously would then yes I go back to orginal statement that you really have issues..

    And of course the logical thing to do would be if you dont like his poems then not to read his threads. I wasnt aware that anyone was at your house holding you at gunpoint to make you read all threads by xtrm9. I mean if I dont like an author I dont continue to read his books, or go to his blogs, etc. Yet you sit here and gripe about how horrible he is but then continue to read every thread he makes.. That really doesnt make sense either..

    Ah well enough talking to brick walls.

    xtrm9 you know I enjoy ALL of your work, its funny and nice, and usually makes me giggle.

    I still think we should have made you the official RoC bard lol.
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  • xtrm9
    xtrm9 Posts: 221 Arc User
    edited February 2009
    Hisui - Heavens Tear wrote: »
    in my opinion theres a difference between a poem and a rhyme. The "poems" you wrote are closer to rhymes, which are what freestyle rappers rap. In that case, more freestylers can spew out rhymes like yours out of their mouth, not even typing needed, in about 1 minute. Plenty of talents out there so don't underestimate : )

    Yes in real world there is a difference between a poem and rhyme/rap.
    But here in virtual world guys can play a female character and have girly names so why bother to pin-point everything. I was not underestimating i was simply trying to say that why ppl are so severely judging something that's written in like 2 mins. If someone makes a rhyme in real life and ppl react the way they did here lol you can guess what will happen b:chuckle. I am there must be fun loving ppl in fujitsu husui and i am pretty sure if someone makes a rhyme/rap like mine there ppl will enjoy it.
  • Rundora - Lost City_1243871147
    Rundora - Lost City_1243871147 Posts: 378 Arc User
    edited February 2009
    xtrm9 wrote: »
    i am pretty sure if someone makes a rhyme/rap like mine there ppl will enjoy it.

    Wanna put some money on that? I need to get some of those cheap dragon balls.
  • xtrm9
    xtrm9 Posts: 221 Arc User
    edited February 2009
    Cat - Heavens Tear wrote: »
    I encourage all of his poems whether they are for me or someone else. Its nice to see someone having fun and just doing something silly and nice for someone else.

    His poems dont make me feel more important, or w.e all that was you went through, but I do appreciate them. Just as I would appreciate anyone who personally takes time out to make someone elses day a little better.

    What I still find funny is how many people are determined to bring this guy down and insult him on what hes doing for no reason lol. Thats still the sadest thing I ever seen..

    Hey look some guy is being nice on the forum and writing poetry to other people hats silly and fun.. OH noez we cant be having that.... Quick lets throw every insult at him and put him down. How dare he come put something fun on these forums!!

    Can you not see for your own sake how you look for your actions?

    I mean if my husband in real life wrote me a poem and it wasnt up to Frost standards, I wouldnt be like omg you noob, you suck so hard, you fail at life, why do you even try, save humanity never wrote another poem.. blah blah blah... And I doubt you would either if it was your gf, bf, wife, hubby, or even close friend. And if you seriously would then yes I go back to orginal statement that you really have issues..

    And of course the logical thing to do would be if you dont like his poems then not to read his threads. I wasnt aware that anyone was at your house holding you at gunpoint to make you read all threads by xtrm9. I mean if I dont like an author I dont continue to read his books, or go to his blogs, etc. Yet you sit here and gripe about how horrible he is but then continue to read every thread he makes.. That really doesnt make sense either..

    Ah well enough talking to brick walls.

    xtrm9 you know I enjoy ALL of your work, its funny and nice, and usually makes me giggle.

    I still think we should have made you the official RoC bard lol.

    Thanks for your kind words Cat i really appreciate them. I am glad if anything that i write can lighten up someone's day and make them laugh. Lately only thread that was active on HT server forums was "If we are carebears what are lost city players" so i thought i would make some.
    I don't care what my haters say as this thread was not made for them. I just feel sorry for ppl who say they get cancer just by reading what i write (fuzzles). And the people who simply quote the haters and type wooohooo below well i don't know what to say to you b:chuckle.
    I wonder when they go to a bookstore do they start reading all the books in front of them in their quest to save humanity.
    Fuzzles and Kingpiccolo you guys make me laugh a lot b:chuckle thanks for being there b:pleased.
  • xtrm9
    xtrm9 Posts: 221 Arc User
    edited February 2009
    Rundora - Lost City wrote: »
    Wanna put some money on that? I need to get some of those cheap dragon balls.

    b:chuckle Sure b:pleased
  • Rundora - Lost City_1243871147
    Rundora - Lost City_1243871147 Posts: 378 Arc User
    edited February 2009
    The "poetry" in this thread reminds me of the guy who wrote this:

    http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4869457/1/
  • xtrm9
    xtrm9 Posts: 221 Arc User
    edited February 2009
    Rundora - Lost City wrote: »
    The "poetry" in this thread reminds me of the guy who wrote this:

    http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4869457/1/

    That site says "unleash your imagination".
    and i find that story funny.

    *picks up gravity gun*

    Explosions like 10 times of the sun went around Henry Freeman but Henry Freeman didn't care.b:chuckle
  • Rundora - Lost City_1243871147
    Rundora - Lost City_1243871147 Posts: 378 Arc User
    edited February 2009
    xtrm9 wrote: »
    That site says "unleash your imagination".
    and i find that story funny.

    *picks up gravity gun*

    Explosions like 10 times of the sun went around Henry Freeman but Henry Freeman didn't care.b:chuckle

    Yes indeed. “To send you back to science and outter space!” Henry Freeman yelled with mad.

    Just like "the tale of her godly beauty is this poem all about." b:cute
  • Hisui - Heavens Tear
    Hisui - Heavens Tear Posts: 1,369 Arc User
    edited February 2009
    Rundora - Lost City wrote: »
    The "poetry" in this thread reminds me of the guy who wrote this:

    http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4869457/1/

    that was pretty epic.
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  • xtrm9
    xtrm9 Posts: 221 Arc User
    edited February 2009
    Rundora - Lost City wrote: »
    Wanna put some money on that? I need to get some of those cheap dragon balls.

    Come on give me my money.

    Either ppl will laugh at the rhyme or at the person b:chuckle
  • Kingpiccolo - Heavens Tear
    Kingpiccolo - Heavens Tear Posts: 419 Arc User
    edited February 2009
    xtrm9 wrote: »
    People forget that i write a poem (or whatever you wanna call it) in 3 mins of non stop typing. If you can write something better in that much short time then awesome because i am sure William Shakespeare would'nt have been able to.
    I just love all my haters you guys inspire me to write more b:pleased
    You are delusional.
    Shakespeare wrote timeless classics in a day while you write drivel which borderline on poorly fragmented sentences.

    Also I don't hate you, I hate the utter **** you try to pass on as poetry. Maybe try to take in some criticism and improve your poetry instead of calling people names and throwing up random insults while dismissing their opinion.
  • xtrm9
    xtrm9 Posts: 221 Arc User
    edited February 2009
    Kingpiccolo - Heavens Tear wrote: »
    You are delusional.
    Shakespeare writes timeless classics in a day while you write drivel which boarderline on poorly fragmented sentences.

    Also I don't hate you, I hate the utter **** you try to pass on as poetry. Maybe try to take in some critisism and improve your poetry instead of calling people names and throwing up random insults while dismissing their opinion.

    You don't hate me ? Come give me a hug b:pleased

    It is Rap/Rhymes/poem/Random/Whatever.

    And dude do you know that explosions like 10 times of the sun went around Henry Freeman but Henry Freeman didn't care.
  • fuzzles
    fuzzles Posts: 628 Arc User
    edited February 2009
    Rundora - Lost City wrote: »
    The "poetry" in this thread reminds me of the guy who wrote this:

    http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4869457/1/

    Oh. Dear. God.

    Credit where it's due though.. On the one hand, that kinda puts xtrm9's **** into perspective. On the other hand, I've completely lost any remaining faith in humanity.
    Everyone here is ridiculously oversensitive.
  • xtrm9
    xtrm9 Posts: 221 Arc User
    edited February 2009
    fuzzles wrote: »
    Oh. Dear. God.

    Credit where it's due though.. On the one hand, that kinda puts xtrm9's **** into perspective. On the other hand, I've completely lost any remaining faith in humanity.

    Hey dude why not write a rhyme about your lost faith b:chuckleb:pleased
  • wyrde
    wyrde Posts: 0 Arc User
    edited February 2009
    fuzzles wrote: »
    Don't let my criticism stop you from trying again... unless your future efforts are gonna be equally abominable. If they are, then by all means, I encourage you to let me criticism stop you. For the sake of humanity.
    fuzzles wrote: »
    Why are the forums such a bunny hugger breeding ground. We need more hatred, more loathing and more drama.
    fuzzles wrote: »
    That's what this is. I open a thread, expecting to find intelligent, and witty discourse (I can't type that with a straight face, sorry), but instead I find some unbelievably mind blowingly bad congealed rat ****, half-assedly disguised as poetry.
    Cat - Heavens Tear wrote: »
    Just as I would appreciate anyone who personally takes time out to make someone elses day a little better.

    fuzzles made my day better.

    b:laugh

    -w
  • Cat - Heavens Tear
    Cat - Heavens Tear Posts: 1,187 Arc User
    edited February 2009
    wyrde wrote: »
    fuzzles made my day better.

    b:laugh

    -w

    mmmm someone who gets pleasure from watching someone else try to cause someone pain.. Yeah theres a word for people like you, usually therapy or jail is invovled too. I wouldnt admit that too many people b:bye
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  • xtrm9
    xtrm9 Posts: 221 Arc User
    edited February 2009
    wyrde wrote: »
    fuzzles made my day better.

    b:laugh

    -w

    Lol dude Fuzzles is such a big fan of mine that he just sits on forums 24/7 hoping to see another rhyme made by me.
    He writes those harsh words just to shoo people off as you know #1 fans can be very possessive sometimes. b:chuckle
  • jemima
    jemima Posts: 5 Arc User
    edited February 2009
    Oh dear god, I just had a horrible mental image of Fuzzles insulting you with your poetic style.

    Your poetry is so bad.
    It just really makes me really kinda sad.
    You are a blob of faeces
    I wish that you get torn to pieces
    By wild rabid monkey horses
    Who have taken courses
    In pain
    Which is not to your gain
    I'd rather eat rat ****
    So just keep on dreamin'
    That anyone wishes you to remain alive upon this earth
    You have a wide girth
    Why is there not more insulting
    What reason is there for me to even come in
    other than to keep on insulting
    the people in this forum who keep on doing really bad thing-
    s
    The reason is
    To amuse myself
    At least I'm not a **** FAC like mysticlife-
    x


    My god that is so bad. I can't even bear to read my own post. See what you've done!?
  • xtrm9
    xtrm9 Posts: 221 Arc User
    edited February 2009
    jemima wrote: »
    Oh dear god, I just had a horrible mental image of Fuzzles insulting you with your poetic style.

    Your poetry is so bad.
    It just really makes me really kinda sad.
    You are a blob of faeces
    I wish that you get torn to pieces
    By wild rabid monkey horses
    Who have taken courses
    In pain
    Which is not to your gain
    I'd rather eat rat ****
    So just keep on dreamin'
    That anyone wishes you to remain alive upon this earth
    You have a wide girth
    Why is there not more insulting
    What reason is there for me to even come in
    other than to keep on insulting
    the people in this forum who keep on doing really bad thing-
    s
    The reason is
    To amuse myself
    At least I'm not a **** FAC like mysticlife-
    x


    My god that is so bad. I can't even bear to read my own post. See what you've done!?

    b:chuckle Lol fell free to express yourself. b:pleased. Lets see what fuzzles has to say about it.
  • fuzzles
    fuzzles Posts: 628 Arc User
    edited February 2009
    xtrm9 wrote: »
    b:chuckle Lol fell free to express yourself. b:pleased. Lets see what fuzzles has to say about it.

    He was trying to imitate you. Let me read it and see if he succeeded...


    ...


    ...


    Yep.. mmhmm... yeah. I have vomit all over my screen, and I think I feel a new cancerous growth coming on. It was definitely a good imitation of your "writing" (ie. crapping) style.
    Everyone here is ridiculously oversensitive.
  • xtrm9
    xtrm9 Posts: 221 Arc User
    edited February 2009
    fuzzles wrote: »
    He was trying to imitate you. Let me read it and see if he succeeded...


    ...


    ...


    Yep.. mmhmm... yeah. I have vomit all over my screen, and I think I feel a new cancerous growth coming on. It was definitely a good imitation of your "writing" (ie. crapping) style.

    awwww ... get well soon fuzzles b:pleased
  • Rivulet - Heavens Tear
    Rivulet - Heavens Tear Posts: 19 Arc User
    edited February 2009
    Kingpiccolo - Heavens Tear wrote: »
    You are delusional.
    Shakespeare writes timeless classics in a day while you write drivel which boarderline on poorly fragmented sentences.

    Also I don't hate you, I hate the utter **** you try to pass on as poetry. Maybe try to take in some critisism and improve your poetry instead of calling people names and throwing up random insults while dismissing their opinion.

    Mhm was waiting for KP's post in the thread. Time to roll you now. It's not "Shakespeare writes", It's "Shakespeare wrote". Or is it that you did not know that Shakespeare and Elvis have long gone? And it's spelled 'borderline'. Lastly it's spelled 'criticism'.

    But it's true xtrm, I suggest reading some more of the various forms of poetry and try to write a better poem about Cat that won't recieve a slew of criticism from everyday trolls like my guild subordinate KP over here.
  • xtrm9
    xtrm9 Posts: 221 Arc User
    edited February 2009
    I just type for 2 mins and post . I am really busy in real life and cannot spend much time typing on an online mmorpg's forum.
    I was wondering all the ppl who call my post **** are the first ones who come running to whatever i type lol.
    I think like things attract each other. b:laugh

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