Family Secrets

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• alymed Member, Neverwinter Knight of the Feywild Users Posts: 14 Arc User

  August 2013 edited August 2013

  This looks like fun...will def give it a go as soon as possible (hopefully tonight)! Feel free to also check out my first foundry (short code in signature) if you get a chance.

  Hero Recall series (non-Campaign)...
  
  ~(Prologue) Intro To An End (NW-DULEQZ9KY)
  ~(Deconstruction) Brainframe (work in progress)

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• gamer91112 Member Posts: 0 Arc User

  September 2013 edited September 2013

  I tried out your Foundry quest some time ago, and I loved it! The story was dramatic and the cutscenes were impressive. You did a really good job.

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• marakthemauler Member Posts: 41

  September 2013 edited September 2013

  I enjoyed your quest, it was a well-designed mission, with a good use of detail to great an immersive environment.
  
  There are a few dialog sequences that I noticed that could be cleaned up. I do not know if English is your primary language or not, but some of the sentence structures appeared to be the result of a language translator.
  
  Noblewoman
  - put parenthesis around the phase "those places"
  - suggestion: change the phrase "would be crushing for Lord Fandro's reputation" to "would destroy Lord Fandro's reputation".
  - suggestion: change "it is notorious with its cheap services" to "it is notorious for its cheap services"
  - suggestion: change "and you certainly know it" to "and I am sure you know all about it."
  
  Inn
  The "use the key" step
  - change "you hear behind you how the door to the pub gets locked" to "you hear the door to pub close and lock behind you."
  - suggestion: change "Or Samantha betrayed you" to "Or did Samantha betray you?"
  
  Patron with two half-orc women
  - Change "Now that's what I call "real woman"" to "Now that's what I call "real women""
  
  Male Patrol with male courtsean (since you added this into your foundry)
  - Suggestion: Add a second response, such as "Yes, but I have to rescue a damsel in distress first."
  
  Lord Fandro's house
  Servant (1st dialog sequence)
  - change "Lord Fandro is in his working place" to "Lord Fandro is working in his office".
  
  Investigating Lady Fandro's room
  - change book dialog to "Books in a language unknown to you."
  
  Lady Fandro (after portal to cottage)
  - change "why you can't make a" to "why you can't get a"
  - change "insider for our family" to "insider to our family"
  
  Wizard (1st dialog sequence)
  - Change "decided to help for rescueing" to "decided to help rescue"

  Nature of the Beast (NW-DJLIFAZNG) - What is your nature?

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• adylhere Member Posts: 46

  September 2013 edited September 2013

  Thank you, @marakthemauler. Really needed this kind of useful feedback. English is not my native language :P

  [SIGPIC][/SIGPIC]
  Family Secrets NW-DM71LY21M

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• phonix101 Member, Neverwinter Beta Users Posts: 0 Arc User

  December 2013 edited December 2013

  There is a problem when choosing a Hunter Ranger class at the Inn when you go to rescue the girl. When I tried to go out none of the usual guys could help and also I couldn't find nothing so that I can escape the inn. I tried to use the teleport scroll but it restarted the inn quest. Please find a way to resolve the problem because this was a very nice quest.

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• darkcatz1 Member, Neverwinter Beta Users, Neverwinter Hero Users, Neverwinter Guardian Users Posts: 26 Arc User

  December 2013 edited December 2013

  Please Fix as of 12/23/13 it still isn't Fix for the New Class (Hunter Ranger). it either needs to not be offered to them or fix.

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• imoonshadow77 Member Posts: 1 Arc User

  December 2013 edited December 2013

  Agree with above - I was really enjoying this quest until I realized I couldn't finish it because I didn't have any of the necessary to interact with the NPCs to move the quest forward. At least add in the notes section that Hunter Rangers should not apply. Thanks!

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