Trading reviews again, for a remake of Part 1 of my Campaign.

casekuk · July 2013

Hey everyone.

I had a lot of stick for one of my maps on Part 1 of my campaign The Mysterious Portal. The 'forest' where the portal is investigated quite simply sucked! I got poor reviews because of it, and I was never happy with it myself.

It was my first map and I was unsure what to do, so I put it down to noobishness. :P

That has changed! And the Forest map is now completely and totally new! I spent a few days remaking it, and carefully spacing and placing enemies. I think it plays 100 times better than the other!

I hate to ask for reviews 'again' but I would really appreciate your thoughts on the new and improved 'forest map'

So once again, I offer my services for review trades...

You can find my Spotlight post by clicking on the my signature pic, and the details you'll need are there.

So just to clarify... I am asking for re-reviews on a MAJOR update to my quest The Mysterious Portal!

I thank you for your time.

Art (aka Casek)

yipykaye · July 2013

I for one can confirm this update is really well done. The quest is a really great start to the campaign.
Kudos to Casekuk for accepting some criticism and making efforts to improve his work.
A quest to be proud of. Well Done!

theninja0 · July 2013

I'll play your quest. My quests are in the signature.

Edit: Played it, gave it five stars. The environments are amazingly well done. I didn't really know what was going on story wise though; I lack the proper climbing equipment to scale those walls of text.

casekuk · July 2013

Thank you Yip, your good review means a lot to me, and I have you ultimately to thank for it and it should very much be a lesson to others.

Sometimes, a little harshness can get across a meaning that praise and well wishing cant. It took yipykaye's review for me to see that as a beginning quest my forest lacked any sort of conviction, put simply it wasn't good. Now, it is

Ask for honest comments folks, be they harsh or otherwise.

@theninja, thank you too.. and dont worry that you didnt follow the story, the fact that you enjoyed the play through is enough for any author. Appreciated,

Art (aka Casek)

aaldaemon · July 2013

I'll trade you a review.

My quest is in my signature.

Going to test yours now.

karitr · July 2013

Ooh interesting. I liked your forest - if I recall my feedback mostly dealt with contractions

Look forward to replaying and seeing your revamped map.

aaldaemon · July 2013

I played it. Good campaign beginning.

I have no idea why but upon quest completition it did not give me the option to review? I will try to run it again with another character later, maybe it will work then.

Some feedback:
-very good environments overall. I can see the effort put in.
-maybe add something else besides spiders that early combat area. (nitpick don't mind me)
-Millan dialogue should be - characteristics not charateristics. you're instead of your (two apples short), it's instead of its (unknown) --- there might have been more I don't remember.

casekuk · July 2013

I have added your quest to the list Aaldaemon, and will get to it as soon as poss. As I'm sure your aware self promotion of your quests and playing foundries takes up an immense amount of time! You are 4th in the list, but I should do these 4 tonight after work.

Karitr, always a pleasure and always grateful thanks. I hope you enjoy the new map, and slightly updated storyline. Part 2 is more polished now than it has been previously but there is still a way to go and I would greatly appreciate your feedback on it.

Thanks all!

Art

aaldaemon · July 2013

Yes mate, I know no rush.

I'm always improving it anyway so the later people play it the better it is anyway hehehehe.

Going to play your quest again maybe this time it will let me leave a review lol.

EDIT: Ok managed to post a review this time...

Lol "I'm a s u c k e r for planescape stuff"got censored by cryptic filter hehe.

runebane · July 2013

Just played this and enjoyed it. Balanced fights. Nice to look at. Lots of work put into the details of the terrain.

redneckronin · July 2013

Heading out for a hospital appointment this afternoon, I'll give this a replay when I get back.

No need to "trade", glad to help out, and I've nothing that needs reviews at the moment.

All The Best

casekuk · July 2013

Thanks Runebane.. have added you to the ever growing list, will play yours asap.

Hope all goes well for ya Red! Look forward to seeing you later!

Art

redneckronin · July 2013

Really liked the changes you have made to the first map, did not get to finish as I got DC'd when I lost internet connection due to a lightning storm going off around me.

It seems to have moved on a bit now.

If I had one bit of feedback it would be to change the map backdrop to a dusk / night setting - it would feel more in tune with the "woods creepy" sound backing you have going on.

All The Best

karitr · July 2013

Have you taken this down to edit Art? I'm only seeing part 2.

casekuk · July 2013

Unfortunately Karitr, no I havn't

This is one of the things I'm mentioning in my other thread here about the foundry lists being so incredibly messed up!

My quests have not just fallen off the lists, they have disappeared to most people COMPLETELY. Bug reporting does no good, I am powerless to do anything about it.

I am also, shall we say,... Not best pleased!

Art.

karitr · July 2013

But ronin played it less than an hour before I posted...what is going on?

EDIT: I may have been looking in wrong tab like a ****. Going back to check.

Second edit: Yes, it was my fault. It hasn't disappeared at all.

casekuk · July 2013

Phew.. good news!

I'm glad someone can find it, because the ONLY way I can find it is by typing the actual name of the quest in.

Short code, and my name dont work.. Just says 'loading' and does nothing else.

Glad you got it now anyway!

Art

lolsorhand · July 2013

I'll run this when I get the time, I live in the foundry atm

karitr · July 2013

Art, you need to use Best tab when using the short code, which was where I went wrong initially.

And holy moly that forest revamp must have taken some work...the effect was worth it though

oortexplorer · July 2013

I'll add this one to my list, will try to get to it tonight. Would be great if you could play mine in return, info in sig. It's a dialogue-driven comedy and the average play time has dropped to 14 minutes, hoping to get some people to take a little longer to try to get it back up to 15 if possible. So just take it slow (lol) which can basically be done simply by reading the text. It is ultimately a pretty short quest.

casekuk · July 2013

I will add you to the list Oortexplorer. I have quite a few to do, so please bear with me

@Karitr, haha you have no idea! The spider webs took several hours alone. But while doing it, I just sort of got into a zone with it, and ended up enjoying it

Certainly don't mean to be pushy Kar, but did you play my second? I cant remember seeing anything from you regarding it. I am very eager for your opinion

Art

karitr · July 2013

casekuk wrote: »

@Karitr, haha you have no idea! The
took several hours alone. But while doing it, I just sort of got into a zone with it, and ended up enjoying it

Edited for you

Certainly don't mean to be pushy Kar, but did you play my second? I cant remember seeing anything from you regarding it. I am very eager for your opinion

Art

Just logged out for the night Art, but will play through in the morning

oortexplorer · July 2013

Just played it, the maps are really nicely done. Only complaint might be the area right around the portal, seems to have been placed in a random and fairly empty part of the forest. Not a big deal, though.

Speaking of the portal, there is a "Press F to Teleport" prompt even though you are unable to actually go anywhere. May want to turn that off, if possible.

Wrote down a few typos:

Guard Frinko's opening dialogue:
- we sent a small contigent of men (contingent)
- merchant came knocking at the baracks door [barracks - unless they happened to knock on the President's door

]

- I'm just passing the time actualy (actually) - didn't write down where that one was

Cleric:
- "Where did you find this?" should come after the 'smile fades quickly' section of descriptive text.
- studied by some scholars thier entire lives (their)
- doorway to anywhere ..." (no first quotation mark!)
- won't be using this to get back!" (same thing, but you don't need the quotation mark here)

Overall, a solid opening to the campaign.

casekuk · July 2013

Thanks Oor.. My kingdom for a bloody spellchecker in that part of the foundry! I would think that I have now been corrected on just about every word in those texts lol! You have found some that others have missed, I have missed and on repeated playthrough's too!

I will get to some more review tonight, ended up watching The Hobbit last night instead!

@karitr, whenever you are free, it's not going anywhere. thanks.

Back on it tonight after work!

Art.

aaldaemon · August 2013

Hey mate, still doing the review trades?

Been a week now, just wondering. No rush, I understand that sometimes there just isn't time to play other people's quests. Just checking you're still into it/haven't forgotten.

casekuk · August 2013

Ald! I am so sorry!

Your's was one that slipped through the cracks

It is all so easy for that to happen and being an advocate of helping people and the community out I am embarrassed that I forgot you.

I will play your quest as a priority as soon as I get home from work. If only I could play here too... hmmmm lol.

I apologize again Ald..

Art.

aaldaemon · August 2013

casekuk wrote: »

Ald! I am so sorry!

Your's was one that slipped through the cracks It is all so easy for that to happen and being an advocate of helping people and the community out I am embarrassed that I forgot you.

I will play your quest as a priority as soon as I get home from work. If only I could play here too... hmmmm lol.

I apologize again Ald..

Art.

Lol, don't sweat it mate!

I know how that goes. I forget stuff all the time.

I'm in no rush ever hehehe, just play it when you can. Besides my quest is getting better everyday.

I'll probably end up republishing it one day, to get rid of some troll rating when it's perfect most likely hehehe.

casekuk · August 2013

Well, I went one better than all that and I played it in my lunch break! hehe

I loved the mystery of it, it makes me want to know more and want to continue playing out the story. Your locations were really nicely done, and it was nice to have some followers; they turned out to have some great character about them also.

I detected a little of Planescape:Torment sneaking in there, nicely done. It was also nice to see someone else using Planescape chant. I always get a little worried about using too much of it, but hey my next part is in Sigil... So oh well lol.

Honestly, I can't fault it. I thoroughly enjoyed myself, noticed nothing out of place, nothing stuck out. All in all I would say you have a great foundry there my friend, well done.

Art

Trading reviews again, for a remake of Part 1 of my Campaign.

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