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crowthorn
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I've just published my new quest... Phew!
Benedict Lane
NW-DJPKRFTDZ
Really appreciate some feedback from anyone.
Also any reviews would be greatly appreciated and will be reciprocated.
Just add your code below and I'll be sure to review it.
Thanks in advance to any builders who take the time.
Cheers.
Benedict Lane
NW-DJPKRFTDZ
Really appreciate some feedback from anyone.
Also any reviews would be greatly appreciated and will be reciprocated.
Just add your code below and I'll be sure to review it.
Thanks in advance to any builders who take the time.
Cheers.
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I liked the decor on the inn.
I like how some of the characters back backstory. That's cool.
I like how you named all the characters. It goes a long way. Can you add some random NPC conversations, just to add flavor?
"Thankyou" is in the conversation with Phipps. Put in a space.
I like how you give me options to roleplay in conversations. Its always a nice touch.
After talking to the lady on Benedict lane it looks like you stacked encounters there. What that it, or was it just one big encounter with 6 mobs.
You could have made Benedict lane (hehe, I get it, its called that because your betrayed on it) a lot smaller. I felt that there was a lot of running for 2 encounters, a NPC conversation, and a map transition.
I LIKED that foulspawn attacking me by surprise in the crypt. I was like 'WTF!'
Putting the items (vases, statue) near the campfire/respawn site was a nice touch.
At least for me, the ogre felt harder to kill than the last mob.
Overall it was a lot of fun. Thanks for putting it together.
If you want to review my quest, the link is in my sig.
Author : @labmouse43
Short Code : NW-DJHHV5CGY
Name : The Frosty Protologist
Duration : 15 minutes
I can really appreciate the effort you put into you Quest. There was alot!
In fact it took me more like 45 minutes to complete. (I think its difficult to time your own creation as you know where everything is.)
SPOILER ALERT
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A few things I noticed on my adventure.
-I got really quite lost downstairs, I'm sure that was intentional but I really went around in circles for ages. Haha..
-Name the Basement Ladder, I know it's trivial but i was looking for the name.
-The Iron chef was alot of fun
-The name of the proprietor cracked me up completely.. lmao (and the animation)
-Several walls in the basement maze are overlapped and were flickering quite badly. Maybe just check on that.
- Also think you might add: "Talk to crying girl upstairs" to final quest info. (maybe I missed that in the dialog but i had trouble finding her)
-Fantastic dialog, seriously well done, enjoyable and intelligent work.
All in all, I really enjoyed it!
Hope you don't mind me writing down some input.
Really enjoyed your quest Labmouse, thank you for your excellent workmanship, and Thank you again for your help and review.
Greatly appreciated.
Great decor and lighting in...everywhere
Speaking to Kellor - "normally we have no problem dispatching out foes" should be "our"
Felt the end could have used more. Didn't realize it was over so soon, and what of the people that hired me?
I think you did great, especially with the decor, top notch there.
You can check mine out here:
NW-DONEPB9CK
Thank you
-Thankyou dialog fixed
-Second mob stack removed.
-Ogre name changed to "Body Guard".
Thanks again Lab for your help.
Thank you, excellent point..!
I will fix that tomorrow, and I will also review your Quest (1am in the morning here in Australia) ..Work tomorrow... Gah!
You have my word.
Thank you very much!
I reviewed your quest in game. The only things I have to add is that I don't get the "nature" part -- well, whatever the joke of it is. Also when you transport into the outside map, it drops the player like 20 feet on entering. Adjust the Y value of the screen entrance point. Not sure if anyone caught that before me.
I particularly liked your dialogue. I'm also glad to play a shorter piece too.
If you get the chance, please review my quest NW-DBLLB920C It will take 16 minutes or so.
Door is go to next map... change maybe
Goat guy is funny
Great writing so far
Dungeon map was good.
Hopefully you will turn this into a chain of quests.
Chapter 1: Message Delivery: NW-DA3XAVZ9W
Really enjoyed it.
Great writing, strong story, can really appreciate the effort and time gone into it.
Floor in the church needs adjusting, but minor detail.
I also made some changes to mine, thank you for your help and input.
Much appreciated.
Will continue to review others on this thread.
Very funny and clever story.
Well executed with a lot of laughs.
Bit of an Eric Blair fan I see.
Enjoyed it a great deal.
Thank you for your hard work.
SPOILER
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Even with cleric companion and a swag of pots.
The Locked goblin and spider room is too heavily stacked.
Died three times, which is an unusual experience for me.!
Also could not find an abort exit, had to quit out of the game to leave dungeon.
Sorry mate, I tried. Just couldn't solo that.