Raychl - One-off comic

bobsy26

View the whole thing on Tumblr.

Hi-res:
Page 1
Page 2
Page 3
Page 4
Page 5
Page 6
Page 7

Enjoy!

diplomacyman

Thanks, I quite liked that

lilsteffie

Heh this made me chuckle quite a bit, loved the humor in it, and the ending was really good as well. Are you by any chance making more of these comics?

bobsy26

lilsteffie wrote: »

Heh this made me chuckle quite a bit, loved the humor in it, and the ending was really good as well. Are you by any chance making more of these comics?

Yes, but not straight away. I'll definitely do something similar down the line, as just these 7 simple pages have taught me a huge amount about how comic pages are put together.

Oh, and I should have already mentioned this: HUGE apologies to the other four characters if they've been grossly misrepresented. As you can probably tell the whole thing was recorded in a random-group alert, and I have no idea what their characters would be like. The lightning guy is probably not a jerk, the yellow horn-lady and the bird lady almost certainly don't know each other, and chances are the bird lady knows more words than "ca-caw". I just found it way too funny not to do it.

But certain little behaviours just lent themselves to the made-up story. The yellow lady standing at the front of the pack, looking tough and confident and so damn cool made it an absolute certainty she'd play the de-facto leader of the group. And the costume synergy with the bird lady gave a good excuse for the little bits of banter.

biffsmackwell

I'd be flattered if I was Ca-Caw. That one stole the show! :biggrin:

I really enjoyed this. The layouts are well-done. I think you should have thrown in some sound effects though. They're fun to put together and add a good layer of eye candy. A couple little nitpicks on the balloons. Curved tails look better, in my opinion, especially the longer ones, and you need more space between the lettering and the edge of the balloon. I think the rule is about a letter's width between them.

You should check out some of the DC Comics Guides, they have great information on layouts, paneling, lettering, etc.

Definitely continue making more.

kharma23

This was really nicely done and fun to read, great job and I hope we'll get to see some more!

s2e1x3

Really Cools!

~ Groove Noobin'

bobsy26

biffsmackwell wrote: »

I really enjoyed this. The layouts are well-done. I think you should have thrown in some sound effects though. They're fun to put together and add a good layer of eye candy.

Personally I prefer it when comics have the confidence in their artwork to lose the sound effects. But of course that's when the artist is able to make the visual effect have enough impact that sound effects become unnecessary... and of course I was using the visuals I was given (with the exception of the pretty dire motion blur on page 6). So yeah, I'll probably put in some sound effects to help sell the action better next time.

A couple little nitpicks on the balloons. Curved tails look better, in my opinion, especially the longer ones, and you need more space between the lettering and the edge of the balloon. I think the rule is about a letter's width between them.

The balloon tails are indeed pretty damn ugly - the fault of using an ancient and godawful art package that I should have upgraded from years ago. And you're spot on about the space between the edge and the lettering - I only really noticed when the whole thing was done.

I was constantly fighting for space in almost every panel, so I was trying to keep the balloons from dominating. It'd have helped just to have reduced the font size, so everything in the page had more room to breathe.

But that's why I enjoyed doing this so much - I learned a huge amount, and I'm still learning.

Comics, innit.

kallethen

'Twas a very entertaining little comic. Hope we see more.