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I am a French player and I try to translate the biographies of my characters in English. At the moment I made a small attempt but indeed sure I am not sure that it is perfectly correct grammatically and at the vocabulary point. Thank you in advance to those who shall indeed want to correct me, I shall edit the text this below as one goes along ^^
RED RIBBON
Real name: John Henry Callum
Profession: agent of the special brigade of the BCPD
Legal status: citizen of the USA
Identity: secret
Place of birth: Bridges City, United States of America
Marital status: bachelor
Known parents: Charles Callum ( dead father), Mary Callum ( dead mother), Bradley Callum (ancestor died in the XIXth century), Malcolm Callum (ancestor died in the XIXth century), Sir Henry McCallum (ancestor died in the VIth century)
Membership in a group: member of the guard
Base of operations: a building, in the district Waynetown of Bridges City, inherited from his father.
Size : 6,16 feet
Weight : 216 lb
Eyes : Blues
Airs : Black
Particular characteristics: John Callum was hurt by a fragment in highly-rated left of the head during the explosion of a bomb which killed some of his colleagues. He has a scar on the forehead and a white mark in the scalp. It is important to note that the fragment did not touch the brain but the wound still provokes crises of uncontrolled migraines.
Origins :
I. The origins of the Ribbon
VIth century. The Scottish Lord Henry McCallum was a hero considered as being a hunter of dragons. Called the Red Knight because of the tint of its armor, the legend want that Sir McCallum brought down a red dragon, a species which we told invulnerable, by diving into its intestines to disembowel him from the inside. Its armor and its sword soaked with some blood of the dragon would thus have become indestructible, but we also tell that the knight used a piece of material dipped into the blood of the animal to bandage his wounds. Henry McCallum thus made of this relic the symbol of his fight for the justice and accepted the offer made by the young god Galir to join The Guard, an alliance of heroes.
Of generation in generation the Callum family was passed on the inheritance left by their ancestor: not only the red ribbon but also the talents and the necessary knowledge to fight against the oppression and protect the innocents. Callums became little by little a family of upholder of the law creating the legend of Red Ribbon, a warrior masked, mysterious and extremely endowed in fight and manipulation of any existing weapons.
II. The foundation of Bridges City
The beginning of the XIXth century. In this period Malcolm Callum, young engineer specialist in railroad transport, decides to leave settling down in the United States, thinking that his talents would be useful for the colonization of the big American West. He helped to connect the East coast to the West coast by railway and contributed to the setting-up of the city of Waynetown on the coast of California, pushing away the bandits and except the law under the mask of Red Ribbon. His son Bradley taken over in his death. Also engineer he decided to begin the project to connect Waynetown with the numerous islands scattered in the wide by metallic bridges, in the objective to llaunch the expansion of the harbour town. So was born Bridges City, future big metropolis and business center of California. Bradley established Callum and Sounds (Company of civil engineering) and was the first one Red Ribbon of Bridges City.
III. The inheritance
Nowadays. John is the son of Charles Callum, the last one Red Ribbon who stopped any activity of upholder of the law in the death of his wife Mary. Charles dedicated himself then to the family company, the Callum Transcorp, and in the preparation of his son. Since his youngest age John is without knowing it formed to to take back the role of vigilante left by his father. Athletic training, martial arts, then at a more advanced age a military formation. Having directed his studies to the science, John confided a passion for the criminology which is finally going to decide on him to integrate the BCPD (police of Bridges City). After some years as agent of ground where he will shine with his efficiency, he will integrate the criminal section and will obtain the rank of detective.
The more years within the BCPD pass, the more John was confronted with the faults of the judicial system of Bridges City. He lives more and more his efforts to arrest the big sizes of crimes reduced to nothingness by corrupted judges and under pressures members of jury, by false proofs made by bent coppers. All these murderers, these dealers faster freed than arrested In spite of his talents nothing made there, John enchaina the failures and the frustrations. He was far from imagining that one of these failures would cause the death of his father.
The gangster Leon Vega that it had itself order was freed in spite of the oppressive proofs found against him. He did not for a long time put taking up a group of men to attack the premises of Callum Transcorp, hurting to death his leader Charles Callum. Before succumbing the man asked to his son to go to Waynetown. John inherited on one part shares of the company of his father as well as a part of his properties of which one to Waynetown. The solicitor handed also to the young man a key locked into an envelope. Decided in to know more about it on the last wills of his father, he went to the old building where he had spent his childhood and discovered that the key opens a passage towards an underground.
With bewilderment, John face an underground complex having an impressive equipment. It is the HQ of former Red Ribbon. In spite of more than 20 years of inactivities, Charles Callum continued to perfect the equipment of the upholder of the law by using the technologies of his company, in particular a prototype system of teleportation which will allow the next Red Ribbon to reach an enormous high-tech and general-purpose arsenal without having to carry directly its weapons.
IV. New Red Ribbon
John stayed several weeks under the shock further to these revelations. What is he going to make of this arsenal? Does he have to take over and play super hero? That did not appear to him to be a good idea. But since promoted to the rank of sergeant, he noticed that the situation had not evolved and that the efforts made by the BCPD as well as the creation of a general-purpose Special Brigade to fight against the crime turned out useless. Outside him, John decided after more than a month to put on the suit of Red Ribbon for the first time, with the aim of correcting the errors which the corrupt justice allows to pass. «Those who escape the law will not escape the Red Ribbon ", it is its message. His will is to make reign the terror in the world of the crime by all the means, even if it means spilling blood if needed.
Powers: Red Ribbon is a normal human being who possesses no powers.
Capacities: Red Ribbon is a warrior achieves and an excellent strategist, extremely competent in the various forms of fight with bare hands as well as in the manipulation of the weapons of everything typify. John Callum also had a scientific formation and he has good legal knowledge, also he knows very well the functioning of police forces due to his civilian job.
Weapons: Red Ribbon has a gigantic arsenal of diverse weapons: firearms, grapnel, paralysing pistols, energetics beams, grenades, mines, traps, explosives and diverse gadgets
Equipment: his right hand is covered by a metallic armor which is really a high tech device allowing to téléporter weapons stored in the arsenal of its HQ. Red Ribbon also wears a bulletproof strengthened combination having a belt containing gadgets in case of failures of its system of teleportation. Finally, he also possesses a car, a model of TX-500 (cut sport of Callum Cars), armed and armoured.
I am a French player and I try to translate the biographies of my characters in English. At the moment I made a small attempt but indeed sure I am not sure that it is perfectly correct grammatically and at the vocabulary point. Thank you in advance to those who shall indeed want to correct me, I shall edit the text this below as one goes along ^^
RED RIBBON
Real name: John Henry Callum
Profession: agent of the special brigade of the BCPD
Legal status: citizen of the USA
Identity: secret
Place of birth: Bridges City, United States of America
Marital status: bachelor
Known parents: Charles Callum ( dead father), Mary Callum ( dead mother), Bradley Callum (ancestor died in the XIXth century), Malcolm Callum (ancestor died in the XIXth century), Sir Henry McCallum (ancestor died in the VIth century)
Membership in a group: member of the guard
Base of operations: a building, in the district Waynetown of Bridges City, inherited from his father.
Size : 6,16 feet
Weight : 216 lb
Eyes : Blues
Airs : Black
Particular characteristics: John Callum was hurt by a fragment in highly-rated left of the head during the explosion of a bomb which killed some of his colleagues. He has a scar on the forehead and a white mark in the scalp. It is important to note that the fragment did not touch the brain but the wound still provokes crises of uncontrolled migraines.
Origins :
I. The origins of the Ribbon
VIth century. The Scottish Lord Henry McCallum was a hero considered as being a hunter of dragons. Called the Red Knight because of the tint of its armor, the legend want that Sir McCallum brought down a red dragon, a species which we told invulnerable, by diving into its intestines to disembowel him from the inside. Its armor and its sword soaked with some blood of the dragon would thus have become indestructible, but we also tell that the knight used a piece of material dipped into the blood of the animal to bandage his wounds. Henry McCallum thus made of this relic the symbol of his fight for the justice and accepted the offer made by the young god Galir to join The Guard, an alliance of heroes.
Of generation in generation the Callum family was passed on the inheritance left by their ancestor: not only the red ribbon but also the talents and the necessary knowledge to fight against the oppression and protect the innocents. Callums became little by little a family of upholder of the law creating the legend of Red Ribbon, a warrior masked, mysterious and extremely endowed in fight and manipulation of any existing weapons.
II. The foundation of Bridges City
The beginning of the XIXth century. In this period Malcolm Callum, young engineer specialist in railroad transport, decides to leave settling down in the United States, thinking that his talents would be useful for the colonization of the big American West. He helped to connect the East coast to the West coast by railway and contributed to the setting-up of the city of Waynetown on the coast of California, pushing away the bandits and except the law under the mask of Red Ribbon. His son Bradley taken over in his death. Also engineer he decided to begin the project to connect Waynetown with the numerous islands scattered in the wide by metallic bridges, in the objective to llaunch the expansion of the harbour town. So was born Bridges City, future big metropolis and business center of California. Bradley established Callum and Sounds (Company of civil engineering) and was the first one Red Ribbon of Bridges City.
III. The inheritance
Nowadays. John is the son of Charles Callum, the last one Red Ribbon who stopped any activity of upholder of the law in the death of his wife Mary. Charles dedicated himself then to the family company, the Callum Transcorp, and in the preparation of his son. Since his youngest age John is without knowing it formed to to take back the role of vigilante left by his father. Athletic training, martial arts, then at a more advanced age a military formation. Having directed his studies to the science, John confided a passion for the criminology which is finally going to decide on him to integrate the BCPD (police of Bridges City). After some years as agent of ground where he will shine with his efficiency, he will integrate the criminal section and will obtain the rank of detective.
The more years within the BCPD pass, the more John was confronted with the faults of the judicial system of Bridges City. He lives more and more his efforts to arrest the big sizes of crimes reduced to nothingness by corrupted judges and under pressures members of jury, by false proofs made by bent coppers. All these murderers, these dealers faster freed than arrested In spite of his talents nothing made there, John enchaina the failures and the frustrations. He was far from imagining that one of these failures would cause the death of his father.
The gangster Leon Vega that it had itself order was freed in spite of the oppressive proofs found against him. He did not for a long time put taking up a group of men to attack the premises of Callum Transcorp, hurting to death his leader Charles Callum. Before succumbing the man asked to his son to go to Waynetown. John inherited on one part shares of the company of his father as well as a part of his properties of which one to Waynetown. The solicitor handed also to the young man a key locked into an envelope. Decided in to know more about it on the last wills of his father, he went to the old building where he had spent his childhood and discovered that the key opens a passage towards an underground.
With bewilderment, John face an underground complex having an impressive equipment. It is the HQ of former Red Ribbon. In spite of more than 20 years of inactivities, Charles Callum continued to perfect the equipment of the upholder of the law by using the technologies of his company, in particular a prototype system of teleportation which will allow the next Red Ribbon to reach an enormous high-tech and general-purpose arsenal without having to carry directly its weapons.
IV. New Red Ribbon
John stayed several weeks under the shock further to these revelations. What is he going to make of this arsenal? Does he have to take over and play super hero? That did not appear to him to be a good idea. But since promoted to the rank of sergeant, he noticed that the situation had not evolved and that the efforts made by the BCPD as well as the creation of a general-purpose Special Brigade to fight against the crime turned out useless. Outside him, John decided after more than a month to put on the suit of Red Ribbon for the first time, with the aim of correcting the errors which the corrupt justice allows to pass. «Those who escape the law will not escape the Red Ribbon ", it is its message. His will is to make reign the terror in the world of the crime by all the means, even if it means spilling blood if needed.
Powers: Red Ribbon is a normal human being who possesses no powers.
Capacities: Red Ribbon is a warrior achieves and an excellent strategist, extremely competent in the various forms of fight with bare hands as well as in the manipulation of the weapons of everything typify. John Callum also had a scientific formation and he has good legal knowledge, also he knows very well the functioning of police forces due to his civilian job.
Weapons: Red Ribbon has a gigantic arsenal of diverse weapons: firearms, grapnel, paralysing pistols, energetics beams, grenades, mines, traps, explosives and diverse gadgets
Equipment: his right hand is covered by a metallic armor which is really a high tech device allowing to téléporter weapons stored in the arsenal of its HQ. Red Ribbon also wears a bulletproof strengthened combination having a belt containing gadgets in case of failures of its system of teleportation. Finally, he also possesses a car, a model of TX-500 (cut sport of Callum Cars), armed and armoured.
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