Path of the Fallen - NW-DS7O3HFAC Feedback needed, will trade.

delrachnid · July 2013

Hey all,

Been finetuning this quest to the point where I think it's ready for mass consumption. Would love to get your opinions on it!

**Note** This quest puts you in the role of the main character that you assume while playing. It's not meant to interfere with your character's bio, but instead put you into a fleshed out narrative. Please judge based on the quest

Quest Name (searchable by nickname - delrachnid): Revenge of the Fallen (not Path of the Fallen - can't delete post to reflect title change)
Short Code: NW-DS7O3HFAC
Type: Solo / Horror more than Fantastical
Time: 18-20 Minutes
Dialogue: Only one option. Dialogue drives the narrative

The quest is the first in a campaign called The Fall of Crimson Rain. Thanks!

~Del

delrachnid · July 2013

Quick bump!

nyghoma · July 2013

I'll trade with you. My quest is in my sig.

edit: Just did this quest. Awesome job man. Loved the traps and use of phased event on timer. You know your stuff. Enjoyed this one.

delrachnid · July 2013

Thanks Nyghoma, I've got your short code and will get to it when I get home from work. Appreciate the review!

delrachnid · July 2013

Nyghoma that was unbelievable. Clearly you know what YOU'RE doing!

casekuk · July 2013

I'll add this quest to the list Delrachnid... I am always willing to do review trades. Mine is in the sig

Possibly tomorrow... Maybe day after. But I will get round to it asap.

Art (aka Casek)

delrachnid · July 2013

Np Casekuk!

I have yours in the next two I'm doing. I'm part of the google docs group and have yours on lock

avistar001 · July 2013

Wow, just amazing. The story was excellent and the effects were outstanding and creative. Love the writing on the wall! Just genius! I was so absorbed I didnt notice anything out of place/alignment. I subscribed and look forward to more from you. Bravo!

nyghoma · July 2013

delrachnid wrote: »

Thanks Nyghoma, I've got your short code and will get to it when I get home from work. Appreciate the review!

Thx dude. Honestly this quest reminded me so much of my 1st quest (good thing). I'm a big fan of creative traps and events. Cant wait to see more from you.

delrachnid · July 2013

I played yours yesterday Avistar. Talk about amazing. Loved your quest!

delrachnid · July 2013

Got yours done Casekuk. And I brought my wife and son so you got 3 reviews for the price of one

casekuk · July 2013

I'm kinda with Avistar about your quest Delrachnid, I enjoyed playing it so much that it was difficult to actually 'review' it. I did my best on the review trades google form, but my review there seems a little disjointed, simply because I just wanted to 'play'

I think personaly you have a winner here, a great little story, brilliantly executed with just the right amount of everything that required to make a foundry quest great.

Keep up the good work, I too have subbed for more.

take care mate,

Art (aka Casek)

delrachnid · July 2013

Very kind of you to say Casekuk. I love getting the feedback from fellow authors because of the understanding of what goes into creating content and the time committment involved. So far, reviews have been positive except for one from a player who found it in-game and two starred me because he didn't like that I made him have a family and his house was run down. I understand that maybe he didn't get that I was putting him into a narrative with his character being the main protaganist, but come on man really? Lol. You shake it off and move on I guess

saerrael · July 2013

Oh, this looks awesome! Running after this post. *hops to*

Edit: Very much liked this one. Great work! Without spoilering for others; really had a few 'Ooooh, awesome!' moments, there.

delrachnid · July 2013

Thanks very much Saerrael! I'm going to run yours tonight. It's obviously getting some great reviews so I'm excited to try it

saerrael · July 2013

Most welcome!
Have fun ^^

casekuk · July 2013

Yeah no kiddin Del, I have been rated down for such ridiculous things..

Art (aka Casek)

elcymerian · July 2013

I'll play.

Here are mine:

Chasing Dust - A Restoration Campaign
ID Code: NW-DJVXOUXXA

A Book for Betrayal - A Restoration Campaign
ID Code: NW-DD85CIBC7

delrachnid · July 2013

Thanks Elcy, I'll run yours as soon as I get in

elcymerian · July 2013

Alright, finished it.

Played as a 60 DC. Over all good. Straight forward, and easy to follow.

What stood out:
Good-
Over all a good, solid story.

Some of your effects and timers: the changing hallways, the fire writing on the wall, and the decor/placement of items/quest over all was good. Dante jumping around was nice to be able to see something happen WHILE still in the dialogue.
EDIT: Oh and the camera shaking at the end. That was cool. I haven't seen how to do that yet.

Story dialogues were direct, crisp, and well written.

Felt like a good intro to a storytelling campaign.

Not as good-
I think only saw one grammar error. There was a period of one of the question marks. I'm pretty sure it was before fighting the Bloodletter (spelling?) brothers.

As far as the quest, it was extremely linear. There was little exploration and player choice in what is happening in the story. Felt more like just a storytelling and less like an adventure that the player takes part in.

As a 60 DC the first few encounters were tougher than I would have liked. There was little ramp up to the final fight. It was more of a run, talk, fight some moderate guys, rinse repeat.

Gave it 4/5 stars because of what was good about it. What I found not good was more opinion/personal preference.

Grats on a good quest.

delrachnid · July 2013

Thanks Elcy. You're absolutely right about a storytelling. In my quest description I called it a Narrative Adventure. I like putting people in a role and letting them be the protaganist. It's not for everyone. I've been two-starred twice so far because of that fact by "roleplayers."

I accept that not everyone is going to like that style, but I felt that it suited the story of revenge to be personally tied to the story. I was getting kind of tired of playing the guy who is trying to solve the murder or the adventurer that is hired on as a mercenary, etc.

Like you said it was your personal preference and I totally respect that. Thanks so much for reviewing!

lolsorhand · July 2013

I'll try this out

, If you want you can run Part 3 of my campaign, though it's one hour long. If you are on Mindflayer I could follow you

Edit : Link is in the sig.

delrachnid · July 2013

I'd would love to Lolsorhand. Heading to bed for the night but I'll make it the first thing I play tomorrow

lolsorhand · July 2013

delrachnid wrote: »

I'd would love to Lolsorhand. Heading to bed for the night but I'll make it the first thing I play tomorrow

Fun fun

karitr · July 2013

Well I was quite excited to run this quest after reading the glowing reviews here, but after coming across what I consider to be cardinal sins when it comes to UGC, I could only rate it 2* in its current form. As I won't rate any genuine quest less than a three, I have declined to review in game.

Please note my feedback is from a player-only perspective and I was playing on my L60 Control Wizard.

1) First noted on Grim and Dolf. Having the encounters immune to all forms of control does not make the encounter challenging, it just makes it laborious.
2) The Hellbeast(s) encounter was ridiculously impossible. I had to backtrack to the bridge room where luckily two of the three got stuck in the environment and became untargetable (and although still targetable, the fire elementals I fought on the way in ended up with their heads and upper body through the ceiling when I applied my choke). The third and more canny of the trio used the edge of the room to follow me into a corridor, whereby he got stuck behind two adjacent traps that allowed me to slowly wear him down with my at-will (he being immune to everything else) at no risk to my character. Once he was taken care of, I was able to run through the other two with impunity as they were busy being eaten by bricks and mortar

The glitchy environment and overuse of control immune enemies loses 2 points from the 4 I would have otherwise scored your quest.

Subjectively, to get 5* from me I would have liked some more clue-providing interactables in the house and dungeon proper and an encounter or two before Raith(?) the elementalist to build up to the finale.

As a role-player, I have no issue with being handed a character and background of the DM's choosing...in fact I'd go so far as to say you aren't actually much of a role-player if this is an issue for you.

There was lots I loved - the tragic and gory setting, the characters, the fog effects, the little extra along with the chest (trying to avoid spoilers) - so please don't be disheartened by my honest observations as a player.

casekuk · July 2013

A little off topic Del... But I had to share, as we were talking about reviews before.

I got a review this morning, that has to be my favourite so far, it said:

Endlessly trudging through Foulspawn not my cup of tea. I was not expecting a hack and slash!

I won't name the person, but they gave me a 3 star review for this!!

Endlessly trudging??? My quest takes 15 minutes if you read ALL the text! had to laugh

But the best bit... 'Wasn't expecting a hack and slash'... Err, huh? Your playing Neverwinter! A hack and slash mmo! lmao.

Art (aka Casek)

lightbringer1102 · July 2013

I'll play all of yours quests, mine is a simple short part 1 quest. It was my first ever foundry quest, please if there are any tips it would be appreciated.

delrachnid · July 2013

I'm sorry you didn't enjoy it Karitr. If I may ask a few questions. Which Hellbeast encounter are you talking about? If you're talking about the one in the maze room those should not be able to be fought. There is a reach point that turns that into something else. Is this the encounter you're talking about? If it is I think I may know what happened. Due to your range you were probably able to engage the mobs. They run towards you and you run back. If you ran forward the encounter would have disappeared due to the reachpoint. Sounds like I need to move the reach point back to account for a CW's range. That is very useful feedback, thank you!

I'll also take a look at the lava room. I boxed the area in with invisible walls so the player would not be able to fall into the lava as they would not be able to get back up. That, and when the elementals spawn and fall in then they can't reach the player and get killed with impunity. I'll play with actually adding a layer of invisible walls just below the surface of the lava so I don't need to box in the path and cause geometry glitches. That way the mobs can fall off the path and still reach you and the player can fall and get back up. Again, great feedback, thank you.

As for Dolf and Grim. I realize it's a difficult fight, but due to the lack of being able to create bosses and the fact that they are the Bloodletter Brothers I felt the difficulty was warranted. To be completely honest, I'm not entirely satisfied with the fight. If you have any suggestions for replacement mobs that are just as difficult but are not immune I would be open to the suggestion.

Either way thank you for not reviewing in-game due to dissatisfaction. I'd much rather have the opportunity to change your mind than for you to two star it and give up

delrachnid · July 2013

Thanks Light!

I'll take a look when I get home

runebane · July 2013

Just finished your quest. It was great. Very immersive.

delrachnid · July 2013

Thanks Rune!

Path of the Fallen - NW-DS7O3HFAC Feedback needed, will trade.

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