Armor Odyssey! It's finally finished all three chapters.

shandizar

Hello Everyone

"Armor Odyssey" by @HellsHot. Is now complete and ready for plays Chapters 1-3 are as follows.

Chapter#1 A1-The Apprentice NW-DPQO8844Y
Chapter#2 A2-On the Road NW-DOYUWIBBX
Chapter#3 A3-Odysseys End NW-DDTWGHBJB

Or you can Search out the Campaign "Armor Odyssey" NWS-DAUPTR46M.

Part Crime Investigation part Odyssey (a long journey looking for something)

All 3 chapters can be completed in 70 to 75 minutes.

The combat is light in the first chapter, after that it's moderately throughout.

It begins at your apartment in PE.

The story begins with a brutal crime in PE, the player is hired by the Magistrate to find out who is behind it, The Investigation leads to a long journey half way across the continent, Will you be able to catch the culprits and thwart their plans for domination of the whole sword coast?



Thanks for your Interest.

shandizar

Updates: Chapter 3 Reduced the difficulty of some encounters, Added some sound and rearranged some encounters,Added lighting and environs to the Island map, fixed the rock climb so it's a bit easier on the Coming ashore map. Added a new respawn point on the Boatman map.

shandizar

Greetings

Still more spell checking and cleared up a few bits in chapter 2 in or near the Grove added a whole new section of dialog to the Hierophant’s speech. More spell checks and fixing grammatical errors on chapter 1. Fixed a couple of typos of/if type things.

tiborrus

Hi, shandizar!

I loved the Part.1., I just played "On the road...", it was enjoyable, like the first part. In the Dessert Oazis map I didn't heard ambient sound or music, only in the golem fight.It was a bug? You often use these things, so I missed.

Only one typo(but it's often seen): You're writing instead of I-> i !(i'am..., etc...)

Of course 5/5!!!

shandizar

Thanks tiborrus

It was a bug....but I think I got it fixed. It had to do with a glitched ambient sound file. I removed it and now all the sound is back....At least in foundry play tests it was.

Thanks for your interest
shandizar

shandizar

Greetings again

Update: Replaced Point block on the oasis so the final fight can't be triggered early by wandering around. Trying to fix patrol point one but reach points are kind of strange on hills. It's a bit stubborn at present but it does work if you go all the way through it. I also fixed the water walking bug.

shandizar

Greetings all

Update: Fixed some Terrain gapping issues on chapter 1 caves , and Replaced all the optional encounters in the caves so if players want a greater challenge you can wipe out all the "Bargemen" in the city.

Thanks for your interest
Shandizar

shandizar

Greetings all

Update: Chapter 3: The Chaos inn is now finished enjoy.:cool:

Thanks for your Interest
Shandizar

shandizar

Greetings everyone.

Did some more touching up on chapters 1-3. I would appreciate it if anyone could help with the corrections that are needed in the dialog instead of simply stating requires spelling and grammar. Let me know where and why, Theres tons of dialog to sift through for these mistakes. I spent the better part of a day just sending all the dialog through a spell checker and I can't find any misspelled words.

Thanks for your interest
Shandizar

dtz

Just finished Chapter 2. Good map design, although I felt the mystery elements and the quest objectives weren't nearly as strong as in part 1. Also, there are a lot of grammatical and spelling errors - far more than in Chapter 1. I know you asked me to be specific last time, and I tried, I really did, but honestly that would require me to list out virtually every line of dialogue in the quest.

Instead, I'm just going to leave you with a few helpful guides for next time:
http://hyperboleandahalf.blogspot.com/2010/04/alot-is-better-than-you-at-everything.html
http://eloquentscience.com/2010/04/bob-the-angry-flower-its-vs-its/
http://theoatmeal.com/comics/misspelling
http://theoatmeal.com/comics/apostrophe

Also, Holly should be looking for her Adamantine brassiere clip. A brazier is something else entirely, though it certainly wouldn't be the first time I've seen them mixed up (usually the other way around, though; I've had many a DM tell me that I've walked into a room filled with burning brassieres).

ladypeanut66

Hi!

I am doing the chapter 2 now, but I have a problem. I was not able to do the quest in 'one session', so now I have to go to the map... And I do not how to get into the map because there is no marked transition Would you help me?

shandizar

Hey

I'm not sure why, but I have been having trouble with that in particular. I was recently play testing one of mine and the power went out for a few seconds (Storm) when I logged back in I couldn't resume either I've been in other foundries and had no problems with this and yet mine don't seem to work that way if you log out in the middle all you can do is start over. I still haven't been able to figure out what it is i'm doing wrong. All my maps have transition points on the overland map. It won't let you publish without them so I don't know.

Oh, I just ran through chapters 1 and 2 with some grammar upgrades.

Sorry for the inconvenience
Shandizar

dtz

Chapter 3
*Jumps right into the action. I like it.
*See previous comments regarding grammar and spelling.
*The distraught Holly keeps jumping onto the barrel outside her tent.
*Lying on one of the beds in the inn is "Ghostly Inn Patron B."
*"Plagueflamed" isn't really a thing. Should be "Plaguetouched."
*Ghost Sarah should be Ghost of Sarah.
*One of the rooms in the inn has a door that can be opened, but simply has a wall behind it.
*The Plaguefire Elemental boss in the cellar looks pretty <font color="orange">HAMSTER</font>.
*Why is the plaguefire outside of the inn purple instead of blue?
*Only drow have darkvision; normal elves do not.
*The map says "Scroll Map 02" when you go to take it, and partially clips into the dock.
*You can probably remove the inactive golem from the "Stop Them From Making More" objective; the 0/2 looks weird otherwise.
*Once again, I must commend you on your very excellent mapwork. Nicely done all around.

shandizar

dtz you are the best!

Working on all that above except the door without an exit. It is supposed to be there... I meant it to be a red herring as you're searching for the exit.

Oh, and by the way the grammar on chapters 1 and 2 should be a lot better now. Last time I played Dungeons and Dragons all Elves had infravision Drow simply had better than the surface Elves. Checking my 4th edition Players Handbook right now though.

Thanks for the Input.
Shandizar

shandizar

Greetings all

Just finished grammar checking all 3 chapters. There were a lot of issues and it took several hours to complete. That said, I also made sure Holly wouldn't go barrel riding in chapter 3. As well as cleaning up the character tags in the Chaos Inn "no more Ghost #3" and such. Did not remove the door, but added to it so my point is driven home resolved the scroll issue on the dock as well as the problems with Elf's eyes falling out from 3rd to 4th edition rules.

shandizar

Greetings all

Update: Tweaked the cliff climb on "Coming Ashore". Also added more effects to the "Chaos Inn" and the Escape maps.

Thanks for your interest
Shandizar

shandizar

Greetings everyone

Update: (Chapter #1) Added some music to the fight sequences, adjusted the size of the servers in the bar (they looked like midgets) and added a ton of detail at the beginning of the cave area.

Thanks for your interest
Shandizar

shandizar

Greetings

Update: Relit all of the first chapter (no more torches in the middle of the shelves) and adjusted the backdrops on chapter 2 (it no longer looks like you're on an island for "The Crossing").

Thanks for your Interest
Shandizar(@HellsHot)

melinden

The Apprentice:

I played with my level 60 DC. I thought this was a well done quest with a nice investigation feel and very good maps. My comments below are mostly just grammatical notes. Otherwise it was very well put together.


Play through notes:

-Very nice set in the first map and all the maps are great and well detailed.
-in the conversation with Gellor, his text has "you" and I expect you mean this as emphasis. Generally speaking things in quotes that are not actually quotes are taken as sarcasm, not emphasis. So for example when he says "Lord Proctor" I assumed he was being sarcastic, but since I thought it would be odd about him being sarcastic that I had to solve the mystery it made me wonder what you meant. I would recommend using -you- or YOU if you mean emphasis and to clarify your meaning.
-later he says "Thayan's" but that would just be "Thayans" for plural since they are not possessing anything in that sentence. In a few other cases you have apostrophes when you can remove them since you just mean plurals. Later with Sgt. Evans "body's" should be "bodies" for example.
-I very much appreciate that you have windows inside rooms!
-I like the hungry and defensive guardsmen! The hungry one should have "you're" instead of 'your" in his chat, however.
-I've seen those oven/forge doors before in foundries but I can't find them! Do you remember what they are called?
-there is a floating bag in the apprentice's house by the fireplace. I know that might be one of those weird leftovers, but maybe you could put a table or something under it.
-the bar scene was very well done!

If you have a chance and could play Rescue in the Silver Marches I would appreciate it.

shandizar

Thank you for playing A1-The Apprentice, and hope you decide to play the other two chapters A2-On the Road, and A3- Odysseys End.

I'm working on reducing the number of quotations as emphasis and going with all caps, and or titles.

Other typos you listed have already been corrected in the latest version 2.2.

The guards dialogs were placed to lighten the mood slightly because of the seriousness of the story. Wasn't aware of any typos, you're probably the only one who even noticed them.

The oven type forge doors? I typed forge in the detail bank and they came up with about a dozen other forge related items. The detail its self is a long chain of 3 sets of doors, I covered up 2 sets rather sloppily I'm ashamed to admit. Going to go back and fix them.

A floating bag? Hmm... Was not aware of that. I placed every single detail in the apartment, including the walls floor and ceiling. You may have played an earlier version before I completely rebuilt the apartment (I was having trouble with some sound files in the stock rooms). But I will take a look just in case.

And lastly, I have played your Rescue in the Silver Marches: NW-DTSKK8OJ9 It was fantastic, the story was a little ordinary but extremely well done. Maybe adding a sub plot with one of the students and the Orcs. Just a thought.

melinden

I thought you might have played it, I couldn't remember. I kept that one simple since after the long, complicated story in Hunger in Icewind Dale I thought something lighter was in order.

shandizar

You're welcome Melinden

Update: Adjusted many reused maps to be identical in the details, Couldn't use the duplicate map button because it would crash my game so my maps were a little inconsistent. Should be corrected now.

Thanks for your interest.

shandizar

Greetings

Update: Chapter 3 Completely redid the root cellar portion of the Inn, it's now capable of being entered before (from outside the Inn) and after the Inn sequence (like before). Reduced the difficulty of the Boatman, Slightly increased the difficulty of the last encounter of the coming ashore map.