Literary Challenge #56 Discussion Thread

pwebranflakes · January 2014

Literary Challenge #56 : Academy Teachings

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Let's get those creative juices flowing! :cool:

jonsills · January 2014

I've already got a few ideas percolating...

zidanetribal · January 2014

New character introduction time! *wrestles prompt to fit narrative*

takeshi6 · January 2014

Interesting.

Might need to write a Nanoha entry for this one, or possibly an entry from another character, not sure - I'll see if I can come up with anything decent. :cool:

marcusdkane · January 2014

This could be interesting... :cool:

marcusdkane · January 2014

takeshi6 wrote: »

Interesting.

Might need to write a Nanoha entry for this one, or possibly an entry from another character, not sure - I'll see if I can come up with anything decent. :cool:

Given the trouble Nahona-San is in with Admiral ch'Harrell, I'm not sure if Command would invite her to give a graduation speech

Looking forward to what you come up with :cool:

ironphoenix113 · January 2014

Ooooh...Bryan is going to have a field day with those cadets :cool:

jonsills · January 2014

Grunt delivers a lecture on a topic most Starfleet personnel are smugly certain they already know perfectly. Spoiler: They're wrong a lot.

grylak · January 2014

I got nothing for this.

I'm liking both entries so far. The Nemesis Unit is an interesting character. I'm not sure how I feel about the genre savvy-ness, but I applaud your taking teh risk with the character in these. I see those as more of a satire on the franchise more than actually being part of it, in the same way the Galaxy Quest film is.

And Grunt makes some truly excellent points.

marcusdkane · January 2014

@ worffan101: A fun piece, but my thoughts about the Nemesis unit are as before... You're clearly a good writer, but using such a character, IMHO, is like Babe Ruth tieing a hand behind his back, putting a patch over one eye, and only hitting a bunt...

@ jonsills: That was pretty much the speech I was thinking of, I should've expected nothing less of Grunt

worffan101 · January 2014

Jonsils: I LOVE your entry. Captain Grunt is awesome, and I absolutely adore the challenge he bit off by referring to discrimination in Starfleet. Well done, sir!

grylak: It's what might be called an in-universe semi-parody. Basically, Three is from a universe where Star Trek is an entertainment franchise. Said universe is, in the Star Trek universe, part of an old holonovel franchise. It's sort of a running gag.

grylak · January 2014

Indeed. I remember you saying as much from the last one. An enjoyable read, and very different to the norm.

Hmmm. Ideas are starting to percolate in my mind for this one. May have to set it between the crash of Sentinel and the launch of Viper, so before the last LC. Now, I need a lesson for them...

marcusdkane · January 2014

@ jauhn82: A fantastic and brutally honest introspective :cool: I'd be curious to know what event turned 'The Borg' from an interactive commander, into one who keeps their crew so much at arms length

cmdrscarlet · January 2014

:eek:

That's how I was this morning logging in.

marcusdkane · January 2014

@ grylak: A good job indeed :cool:

cmdrscarlet · January 2014

@worffan101 - knowing what your character is like (based on the discussion in LC 55) I can say this: that was a fun read

@jonsills - Very observant of Grunt. A good lesson indeed.

@jauhaus82 - the effects of war is *very* multifaceted. It would be a long lecture from the podium.

@grylak - I actually thought you were erroneously responding to a different LC - you got me. Well done!

grylak · January 2014

cmdrscarlet wrote: »

@grylak - I actually thought you were erroneously responding to a different LC - you got me. Well done!

Hehe. Thanks. None of my characters would give lectures at the academy, but I've always said the DarkFyre was used for training cadets once I retired her from my roster, and using the start of TWOK as inspiration for the setup, figured this was actually a good time to show that.

It's also a very mild commentary on Star Trek's current obsession with seemingly shooting their way out of everything.

worffan101 · January 2014

cmdrscarlet wrote: »

@worffan101 - knowing what your character is like (based on the discussion in LC 55) I can say this: that was a fun read

Thank you! Yeah, it was a hell of a lot of fun to write, too.

I added Do'eth's version. Let's just say that she's a broken person.

marcusdkane · January 2014

I wanted to keep this simple, so just a short entry this time round, but please enjoy

For ease of reference/visualization, here're the actors I would cast if I was filming this tomorrow...

Ael t'Kazanak - Cobie Smulders
I'sH'd - Alexander Skarsgard

marcusdkane · January 2014

@ sirboulevard: That was a fantastic, thought provoking entry :cool: My duplication of theme is entirely coincidental

superhombre777 · January 2014

I have a few threads bouncing around in my head - one that is depressing, one where Counselor ch'Raul is a bad TRIBBLE, and a simple romance. I'm not sure which to combine into this topic...more to come.

marcusdkane · January 2014

superhombre777 wrote: »

I have a few threads bouncing around in my head - one that is depressing, one where Counselor ch'Raul is a bad TRIBBLE, and a simple romance. I'm not sure which to combine into this topic...more to come.

Looking forward to it already :cool:

PS
If you fancy a chuckle, check out Isabella's cameo

wraithshadow13 · January 2014

superhombre777 wrote: »

I have a few threads bouncing around in my head - one that is depressing, one where Counselor ch'Raul is a bad TRIBBLE, and a simple romance. I'm not sure which to combine into this topic...more to come.

In my opinion, it would all depend on the stories themselves and what you're trying to say with it rather than which aspects you think people will like. With that said, i would think that the Simple romance would be a good B story to the ch'Raul being a bad TRIBBLE. The depressing story would probably stand better on its own, being as the other parts might be a bit distracting from the impact you want it to make.

Either which way you choose though, i look forward to reading it.

saihung423 · January 2014

I went with a speech similar to the one Adam 'Pacman' Jones gave at the NFL rookie symposium.

From Kirk's perspective. Because he is a space fluzie:P

jonsills · January 2014

Actually, Kirk gets a bum rap on that - in TOS, he didn't actually get with any of the women he romanced (and he only fell in love with two - Edith Keeler and that one chick who turned out to be a robot). Spock got more action than Kirk did (in "The Enterprise Incident"). And to the best of our knowledge, he only had one child, and that didn't end well...

BTW, it's considered poor form to use any but your own characters (or other players' characters, with their permission) in these Challenges.

moonshadowdark · January 2014

I have an idea for a Klingon Academy entry featuring my Klingon, K'Plai, Daughter of Rogh. But making up lectures is hard.

wraithshadow13 · January 2014

moonshadowdark wrote: »

I have an idea for a Klingon Academy entry featuring my Klingon, K'Plai, Daughter of Rogh. But making up lectures is hard.

You don't actually have to do the lecture part, i myself am going to do the events and reflection leading up to the lecture, but not the lecture itself.

superhombre777 · January 2014

My draft is written and needs to age for a few days. In the meantime...

@ jonsills - that was awesome. I was reminded of the spot in the DS9 Mission Gamma novels where the Defiant crew is passing around a Klingon romance and everyone is secretly enjoying it.

@ jauhn82 - I think this is the first piece I have read from you. Good job! It was very sobering. One suggestion - if you copy/paste from decent text editors like MS Word, quotes and special characters end up as question marks here. (It's so annoying.) You might want to consider a global find/replace to fix that next time since there are a few of those laying around.

jauhn82 · January 2014

if you copy/paste from decent text editors like MS Word, quotes and special characters end up as question marks here.

@superhombre777 - thanks, I didn't notice the replacement of the special characters. This is my first time doing the literary Challenge and I may just do more. I have gone in and fixed what question marks to the characters they are meant to be. If you or anyone else sees one I miss or something else I missed, let me know. Thanks

ironphoenix113 · January 2014

Posted mine. Took me a little while for me to come up with a topic the Bryan would discuss, but I finally got it. Let me know what you all think!

marcusdkane · January 2014

ironphoenix113 wrote: »

Posted mine. Took me a little while for me to come up with a topic the Bryan would discuss, but I finally got it. Let me know what you all think!

I really liked it :cool: One section might need a polish... I felt that this piece was slightly contradictory, although the sentiment was still clear

but you must also trust the Admirals to know when they are pushing your crew beyond their limits. We, the Admirals have to trust you all, but you cannot trust us, simply because we don't know you. That is not to say that we cannot earn your trust. It should not, however, be easy.

Maybe modifying the phrases to 'have faith in' and 'should not blindly trust us' might flow better? I still can't think of anything for my second entry

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