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Literary Challenge #61 Discussion Thread

pwecaptainsmirkpwecaptainsmirk Member Posts: 1,167 Arc User
edited April 2014 in Ten Forward
Literary Challenge #61
This is the comments thread for Literary Challenge #61.
We also have an Index of previous challenges HERE.

Feel free to link directly to the entry you are commenting on. And please remember: we're not here to tear each other up. Do not troll your fellow Captains, give feedback! Let the others know what you liked and disliked. Maybe they can even go back then and tweak their entries!

Let's get those creative juices flowing! :cool:
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  • takeshi6takeshi6 Member Posts: 752 Arc User
    edited March 2014
    Hmm... will really need to think about this one.

    Decent challenge, though. :D
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  • psycoticvulcanpsycoticvulcan Member Posts: 4,160 Arc User
    edited March 2014
    The Iconians, Undine, Solonae will be coming through soon enough.

    Don't forget the Elachi! :P

    EDIT: And what are the Undine doing on the list? Last I checked they were being manipulated like everybody else.
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  • worffan101worffan101 Member Posts: 9,518 Arc User
    edited March 2014
    Oh, this should be good.

    OK, one more Three story, then I go to "Do'eth"/D'trel for a while.
  • worffan101worffan101 Member Posts: 9,518 Arc User
    edited March 2014
    Mine is up. Totally not serious, just pure humor. Thoughts?
  • takeshi6takeshi6 Member Posts: 752 Arc User
    edited March 2014
    worffan101 wrote: »
    Mine is up. Totally not serious, just pure humor. Thoughts?

    ROFLMFAO!!!!!!!

    *Pauses Laughter*

    *Looks at worffan's entry again*

    *Resumes Laughter*
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  • worffan101worffan101 Member Posts: 9,518 Arc User
    edited March 2014
    takeshi6 wrote: »
    ROFLMFAO!!!!!!!

    *Pauses Laughter*

    *Looks at worffan's entry again*

    *Resumes Laughter*

    :D:D:D

    Any more thoughts?
  • zidanetribalzidanetribal Member Posts: 220 Arc User
    edited March 2014
    worffan101 wrote: »
    :D:D:D

    Any more thoughts?

    I'm not exactly sure what happened. I do think that mustachios would make Iconians more interesting though. Now to try to get the devs to add mustachio-like objects to Iconians.
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  • aten66aten66 Member Posts: 654 Arc User
    edited March 2014
    worffan101 wrote: »
    :D:D:D

    Any more thoughts?

    You should continue the Nemesis/Original line of this, but props to the classical villian mustachio effect!!

    Was their a planet killer tossed in their for fun?
  • jonsillsjonsills Member Posts: 10,460 Arc User
    edited March 2014
    Hmmm. Methinks this calls for a flash-forward to Admiral Grunt, and the USS Ferenginar...
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  • wraithshadow13wraithshadow13 Member Posts: 1,728 Arc User
    edited March 2014
    Is this challenge a possible spoiler for season 9?
  • sirboulevardsirboulevard Member Posts: 722 Arc User
    edited March 2014
    My entry is in.

    Smirk, you picked the one topic I had a story already written for: how STO should end. Since season 7, I've known how STO should end. On two points: a quote from Daniels in Enterprise: "Earth is still there... in a manner of speaking." and the main motto of Star Trek "To seek out new life and new civilizations - To boldly go where no one has gone before."

    In many ways, I see it being a phoenix of sorts. Much like the titular bird and the identically named and themed warp ship Cochrane created, the Federation and the other powers of the quadrant have started to wane and this is a rebirth through fire.

    Earth is lost, but repairable via terraforming, but much history has been burned away. The UFP, Romulan Star Empire, and the klingon Empire all are ended (the RSE collapsing with Sela's disappearance, the other two collapsing here). But the new federation born from it is based on much the same principle as what Picard learned from Captain Dathon of the Children of Tama. "A Trial Shared Creates Understanding." And they have all lost a home. The Romulans, once closed minded, open their homes to these two races after theirs are taken from them. And for once there is a common goal amongst them: to create a future together.

    The last image of this game should be a pan across New Romulus... the classic trek motto playing over as this strange new world (New Romulus) is explored and built on by Romulans, humans and Klingons, as a new civilization and way of life is born. Boldly going into the future, together.
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  • hosanin#8084 hosanin
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    edited March 2014
    sirboulevard wrote: »
    My entry is in.

    Smirk, you picked the one topic I had a story already written for: how STO should end. Since season 7, I've known how STO should end. On two points: a quote from Daniels in Enterprise: "Earth is still there... in a manner of speaking." and the main motto of Star Trek "To seek out new life and new civilizations - To boldly go where no one has gone before."

    In many ways, I see it being a phoenix of sorts. Much like the titular bird and the identically named and themed warp ship Cochrane created, the Federation and the other powers of the quadrant have started to wane and this is a rebirth through fire.

    Earth is lost, but repairable via terraforming, but much history has been burned away. The UFP, Romulan Star Empire, and the klingon Empire all are ended (the RSE collapsing with Sela's disappearance, the other two collapsing here). But the new federation born from it is based on much the same principle as what Picard learned from Captain Dathon of the Children of Tama. "A Trial Shared Creates Understanding." And they have all lost a home. The Romulans, once closed minded, open their homes to these two races after theirs are taken from them. And for once there is a common goal amongst them: to create a future together.

    The last image of this game should be a pan across New Romulus... the classic trek motto playing over as this strange new world (New Romulus) is explored and built on by Romulans, humans and Klingons, as a new civilization and way of life is born. Boldly going into the future, together.

    All I can say, is that gave me chills man....purely amazing!
  • grylakgrylak Member Posts: 1,594 Arc User
    edited March 2014
    Now, it should be pointed out I'm listening to the Avengers soundtrack as I read these. It really does add to the atmosphere.


    @worffan: Loved it! I know I say I really don't like Three's uberness, but here, she comes across as completely unbalanced. And that makes her uberness something I enjoy. Because she's not palying the badass, she's playing the absolute crazy person. I liked the after report as well, though I'm sure I've read that exchange between Quinn and the other guy somewhere before.



    @lorelei5: A beautiful log. You really put across the emotions of your captain well, and I could sense his dispair. And welcome to the LC's.


    @sirboulevard: Wow. Now that is a magnificent ending to the STO storyline. I love the twist at the end with that character's reappearance. I always felt they were done a bit too one dimensional in STO (being vague for spoiler reasons).




    As for me..... well...... I have so many ideas that need to be crammed into this story, I just hope I can find the time to fit them all in. But hot diggidy dang, this is going to be an end battle worthy of an end battle. Oh yeeeesssss......
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  • worffan101worffan101 Member Posts: 9,518 Arc User
    edited March 2014
    grylak wrote: »
    Now, it should be pointed out I'm listening to the Avengers soundtrack as I read these. It really does add to the atmosphere.
    *strokes beard sagely while nodding slowly*

    Yes, my apprentice, that is good.
    grylak wrote: »
    @worffan: Loved it! I know I say I really don't like Three's uberness, but here, she comes across as completely unbalanced. And that makes her uberness something I enjoy. Because she's not palying the badass, she's playing the absolute crazy person. I liked the after report as well, though I'm sure I've read that exchange between Quinn and the other guy somewhere before.

    Heh, thanks!

    The after report is adapted from an idea that moonshadowdark had on the choose-the-next-LC thread.
  • lorelei5lorelei5 Member Posts: 6 Arc User
    edited March 2014
    grylak wrote: »
    @lorelei5: A beautiful log. You really put across the emotions of your captain well, and I could sense his dispair. And welcome to the LC's.

    Thanks so much for the feedback and the welcome, I really appreciate it! :)

    I actually saw the captain as a female and it's interesting you picked them as a male. Fascinating.
  • grylakgrylak Member Posts: 1,594 Arc User
    edited March 2014
    To me, it read as someone older, who has seen too much combat and fights for the duty and protection of those who can't, but who's soul has tired of it all. For some reason in my head, it was read in an older male voice (probably because I'm male, so I always default that way). But there was nothing in it to suggest either way, it works for male or female. And in fact, reading it in a female voice, and knowing the person is female, gives no alteration to my perception of the character at all.
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  • marcusdkanemarcusdkane Member Posts: 7,439 Arc User
    edited March 2014
    worffan101 wrote: »
    Mine is up. Totally not serious, just pure humor. Thoughts?

    Oooooh, the appearance of Nemesis herself... Nice :cool:
  • marcusdkanemarcusdkane Member Posts: 7,439 Arc User
    edited March 2014
    jonsills wrote: »
    Hmmm. Methinks this calls for a flash-forward to Admiral Grunt, and the USS Ferenginar...

    Possibly a similar approach for myself, although I have another idea in mind...
  • marcusdkanemarcusdkane Member Posts: 7,439 Arc User
    edited March 2014
    @lorelei5: Welcome to the LC's, the weight of Impending doom was palpable, like when Picard wandered the Enterprise-D before Wolf 359... :cool:
  • marcusdkanemarcusdkane Member Posts: 7,439 Arc User
    edited March 2014
    sirboulevard wrote: »
    My entry is in.

    Smirk, you picked the one topic I had a story already written for: how STO should end. Since season 7, I've known how STO should end. On two points: a quote from Daniels in Enterprise: "Earth is still there... in a manner of speaking." and the main motto of Star Trek "To seek out new life and new civilizations - To boldly go where no one has gone before."

    In many ways, I see it being a phoenix of sorts. Much like the titular bird and the identically named and themed warp ship Cochrane created, the Federation and the other powers of the quadrant have started to wane and this is a rebirth through fire.

    Earth is lost, but repairable via terraforming, but much history has been burned away. The UFP, Romulan Star Empire, and the klingon Empire all are ended (the RSE collapsing with Sela's disappearance, the other two collapsing here). But the new federation born from it is based on much the same principle as what Picard learned from Captain Dathon of the Children of Tama. "A Trial Shared Creates Understanding." And they have all lost a home. The Romulans, once closed minded, open their homes to these two races after theirs are taken from them. And for once there is a common goal amongst them: to create a future together.

    The last image of this game should be a pan across New Romulus... the classic trek motto playing over as this strange new world (New Romulus) is explored and built on by Romulans, humans and Klingons, as a new civilization and way of life is born. Boldly going into the future, together.
    This was a truly fantastic entry, I don't think I can add anything else as to just how nicely written it was :cool:
  • ryan218ryan218 Member Posts: 36,106 Arc User
    edited March 2014
    @worffan:

    Brilliant!
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  • worffan101worffan101 Member Posts: 9,518 Arc User
    edited March 2014
    marcusdkane wrote: »
    Oooooh, the appearance of Nemesis herself... Nice :cool:

    Humorous/silly enough that you don't mind the blatant genre savvy?
  • worffan101worffan101 Member Posts: 9,518 Arc User
    edited March 2014
    ryan218 wrote: »
    @worffan:

    Brilliant!

    Thanks! I'm working on a more serious one with "Do'eth"/D'trel now. Should be up in a few minutes.
  • lorelei5lorelei5 Member Posts: 6 Arc User
    edited March 2014
    grylak wrote: »
    To me, it read as someone older, who has seen too much combat and fights for the duty and protection of those who can't, but who's soul has tired of it all. For some reason in my head, it was read in an older male voice (probably because I'm male, so I always default that way). But there was nothing in it to suggest either way, it works for male or female. And in fact, reading it in a female voice, and knowing the person is female, gives no alteration to my perception of the character at all.

    I'm glad it can work either way. I'm female so that's the voice in my head of the nameless captain. I guess the captain's age and gender is entirely up to the reader to discover and decide. And I shall let them do so!
  • worffan101worffan101 Member Posts: 9,518 Arc User
    edited March 2014
    My second is up. Not entirely satisfied with the ending, will probably edit it.

    ...and I just remembered that you're only supposed to post 1 for the non-redux LCs. I'll go back and fix that.
  • marcusdkanemarcusdkane Member Posts: 7,439 Arc User
    edited March 2014
    worffan101 wrote: »
    Humorous/silly enough that you don't mind the blatant genre savvy?

    How to quantify my reaction... It was posted as a humorous piece, so I didn't even attemot to take it seriously... I enjoyed it once it got to Quinn's office, the first half was just 'Three being wierd again' ;) But as I've said before, I'm not the Intended audience... If you were to offer a Jew or a Muslim a breakfast platter of sausage, sausage squares, sliced ham and bacon, well, getting them to even eat it would be a debatable proposition :D
  • worffan101worffan101 Member Posts: 9,518 Arc User
    edited March 2014
    marcusdkane wrote: »
    How to quantify my reaction... It was posted as a humorous piece, so I didn't even attemot to take it seriously... I enjoyed it once it got to Quinn's office, the first half was just 'Three being wierd again' ;) But as I've said before, I'm not the Intended audience... If you were to offer a Jew or a Muslim a breakfast platter of sausage, sausage squares, sliced ham and bacon, well, getting them to even eat it would be a debatable proposition :D

    Ok...

    So you enjoyed it and laughed at it? Because that was my goal.

    Edit to add: I've cleaned up, refined, and moved the version I did featuring "Do'eth"/D'trel and company. Thoughts?
  • zidanetribalzidanetribal Member Posts: 220 Arc User
    edited March 2014
    jonsills wrote: »
    Hmmm. Methinks this calls for a flash-forward to Admiral Grunt, and the USS Ferenginar...

    Flash-forward is the same idea I had. I'll have to tread carefully.
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  • jonsillsjonsills Member Posts: 10,460 Arc User
    edited March 2014
    zidanetribal wrote: »
    Flash-forward is the same idea I had. I'll have to tread carefully.
    Why "tread carefully"? I figure standard rule applies - we're each writing our own separate timeline, unless previously arranged otherwise. (Sometimes we even get to borrow elements, like when I got to invoke the "Good Masters" in one LC even though Grunt patently lives in a completely different timeline from those most excellent stories.)

    All I ask is that if you use one of my ships/captains in your story, and he/she doesn't survive - make it a good death. :)
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  • marcusdkanemarcusdkane Member Posts: 7,439 Arc User
    edited March 2014
    worffan101 wrote: »
    Ok...

    So you enjoyed it and laughed at it? Because that was my goal.
    I enjoyed The Quinn/Nemesis section, let's leave it at that ;)

    worffan101 wrote: »
    Edit to add: I've cleaned up, refined, and moved the version I did featuring "Do'eth"/D'trel and company. Thoughts?
    Really enjoyed this, and looking forward to how things work out for D'trel. Omek was as awesome as always :cool:
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