Literary Challenge #47 : "There are 47!"
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Literary Challenge #47 : "There are 47!".
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This is going to be a VERY interesting two weeks I think
...Oh, baby, you know, I've really got to leave you / Oh, I can hear it callin 'me / I said don't you hear it callin' me the way it used to do?...
- Anne Bredon
:P
Also: inb4 Agent 47 from the "Hitman" series
still have more of Schrodi to write and mandatory online work training (wheee) but I'll try to come up with something.
"he's as dangerous as a ferret with a chainsaw."
Not sure if I'll be able to participate or not, but I'll definitely keep an eye out for what everyone else comes up with. :cool:
Infinite possibilities have implications that could not be completely understood if you turned this entire universe into a giant supercomputer.
Still working on chapter 8 though...
...Oh, baby, you know, I've really got to leave you / Oh, I can hear it callin 'me / I said don't you hear it callin' me the way it used to do?...
- Anne Bredon
I've posted my attempts for challenges 46 and 47...and on reading them after a few hours, I'm not too pleased with them.
So, question...has it been informally (or formally) decided how many times one could go back to tweak it?
I ask because if you read one version...and it wasn't to your liking...would you go back multiple times if told that "improvements" were made?
Or should one wait until they're satisfied before submitting?
Just curious.
Oh...backstory to why the Vulcan in 47 doesn't sound like a Vulcan...it's intentional...I envision this particular Vulcan as having melded with humans so much that he's "gone native", so to speak. You know, like when your friends are so close you subconsciously adopt each other's mannerisms and speech patterns.
Welcome aboard!
No, there isn't any limit to how often you can go back and make revisions. You can even start an entry, leave it unfinished and come back to add to it later. (It's a good idea to add a "Work In Progress" disclaimer in that case though.)
You just need to limit yourself to one entry per topic (unless Bran says otherwise) and follow the rest of his rules (like staying on-topic for the LC.)
I look forward to reading your entries when I get a chance. Right now I'm trying to finish off a massive fanfic project of my own.
...Oh, baby, you know, I've really got to leave you / Oh, I can hear it callin 'me / I said don't you hear it callin' me the way it used to do?...
- Anne Bredon
Other than that, have at it and I look forward to reading your work
I liked it. Seems like the sort of thing Section 31 might have "convinced" a Maquis strike team to do during the War.
@grylak - lol, the Tribble idea has been used for the topic! So ... just how are they going to do it?
@masopw - Man, don't change a thing! I think this was a great intro to some characters while also giving the readers a taste that there is A LOT more to them than this one scene. Save more for later imo.
@patrickngo - Whew, a lot happened in this short piece! Sovak IS a sick man :P
I think I have a new favorite character of yours.
...Oh, baby, you know, I've really got to leave you / Oh, I can hear it callin 'me / I said don't you hear it callin' me the way it used to do?...
- Anne Bredon
Since Xui Li is the one who keeps the tribbles in game, and was added to her in game bio, it was too perfect a setup not to use.
Hmmm. Perhaps a really big bbq? :eek:
Oooh, this has given me an idea for a future story I can work in.
A Romulan Strike Team, Missing Farmers and an ancient base on a Klingon Border world. But what connects them? Find out in my First Foundary mission: 'The Jeroan Farmer Escapade'
Supercool entry :cool:
Out of curiosity (no beef, just genuinely curious) how did you come up with the name Sovak? I only wonder as that was the name of the Vulcan Master that Marcus studied under as a boy, after his mother's death Of course, there's going to be more than one dude with the same name, it just made me chuckle Equally, I think he made the most logical decision to ensure a smooth resolution to the mission :cool:
Sovak would have been pushing 200 when Marcus studied under him in the 2340s, I think it must just be the Vulcan equivalent of James, or some equally popular name
I'll look forward to it, and you may like the entry I'm going to be posting in the next hour or so, as it's set in the same timeframe
For ease of reference/visualization, here're the actors I would cast if I was filming this tomorrow...
Marcus Kane - Matt Bomer
Paige - Olivia Thirlby
it seems like a lot of vulcan names are similar, but it is the most logical action. The needs of the many outweighed the needs of the few, or the one. Especially when the one is a traitor.
If you want to use anyone I've got for supporting cast feel free. :cool:
"he's as dangerous as a ferret with a chainsaw."
Thanks for the kind words!
I figured that I'd use my first foray with #45, Freestyle, to set up the turning point for the Captain...that Q semi-induced fracturing of the mirror universe and alternate realities...the time where trauma is so much that coping mechanisms that got him though past events are no longer adequate. #46, which was late...sorry...was an intro to the cranky CMO of the Bonaventure, a la Bones, who touches on the after effects of #45.
I'll use whatever future challenges come up as a set up for either flashbacks or moving on to where things try to get back to a "new normal" for our crew.
Quick "Coles Notes" backstory & characters:
--Captain of the Bonaventure, haven't decided yet which toon to name him after! (Trying to use 'traditional' ranks...Admirals don't sit in the center seat...) Our protagonist. Stereotypical hard charger through the Academy, hot shot with something to prove. Invented the 'OG', Omicron Group, as a super-elite...in his mind...subset of Red Squad. Lost the Yorktown under mysterious circumstances...was initially blamed for it, had to fight to prove his innocence.
--Captain Sotek, CO of the Honolulu. Member of the OG, closest friend to the protagonist. Was XO of the Yorktown when it was lost.
--Commander L'naa, XO of the Bonaventure. Member of the OG. One third of a love triangle between our protagonist and another member of the OG while at the Academy. Vulcan with some very strong telepathic & empathic abilities.
--Ensign R'nee, deceased. Member of the OG, the last third of the Academy love triangle. Vulcan in the most brutal, cut to the chase, zero emotion way possible. Died in the STO universe when some accident occurred shortly after graduation. Reappeared alive in the Q/Mirror/Alternate universe incident (#45) which is the breaking point for our Captain and his XO.
--Sara & Arky. Last members of the OG. Married on the day of that accident that claimed R'nee. Fate to be disclosed in some future challenge...
--CMO of the Bonaventure. Commander in Starfleet Reserve, brought back after retirement due to the Klingon war, very much against his will. Always running a scheme, has a love/hate relationship with the crew...but feels like each of them are his grandchildren. Except, for some reason, the Andorians...
--Bonaventure, a Sci-Oddy, and her Aquarius, the Rouge Valley. The ship is always a member of the story!
@ sharpie65 - can you flesh this out some more?
@ grylak - yeah, I can see how humans would discard reason and have tribble pets.
@ masopw - I thought that was interesting. I need to go back and read your other posts. Feel free to bend the LC prompt a little too if you'd like...I do that fairly often and no one has kicked me out yet.
I wound having to split chapters again so there will be a Part IX, hopefully sooner rather than later.
Now to take a breather and catch up on some reading...
...Oh, baby, you know, I've really got to leave you / Oh, I can hear it callin 'me / I said don't you hear it callin' me the way it used to do?...
- Anne Bredon
It *might* be useful to read my submission to 46, as I managed to tie it in with that one.