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Literary Challenge #35 Discussion Thread

pwebranflakespwebranflakes Member Posts: 7,741
edited January 2013 in Ten Forward
Literary Challenge #35 : New Year's Resolutions
This is the comments thread for Literary Challenge #35 : New Year's Resolutions.
We also have an Index of previous challenges HERE.

Feel free to link directly to the entry you are commenting on. And please remember: we're not here to tear each other up. Do not troll your fellow Captains, give feedback! Let the others know what you liked and disliked. Maybe they can even go back then and tweak their entries!

Let's get those creative juices flowing! :cool:
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  • marcusdkanemarcusdkane Member Posts: 7,439 Arc User
    edited December 2012
    Done. For ease of reference/visualization, here're the actors I would cast if I was filming this tomorrow...

    Meliden Bowen - Eve Myles
    S'rR's Kane - Amy Smart
    Caral Bowen - Alison Steadman
  • marcusdkanemarcusdkane Member Posts: 7,439 Arc User
    edited December 2012
    @ ironphoenix113: Short and sweet, a really nice entry :)
  • theroyalfamilytheroyalfamily Member Posts: 300 Arc User
    edited December 2012
    Made my very first entry.

    Some background: It's the Terran Empire, in a MU. A different one than depicted in Enterprise or DS9, as the Terrans weren't Evil Stupid, and so Spock's reforms - the main one being the ending of promotion-by-backstabbery - didn't cause the Emprie's complete decline and enslavement. There's more to it, but that will be enough to understand this story.
  • marcusdkanemarcusdkane Member Posts: 7,439 Arc User
    edited December 2012
    theroyalfamily wrote: »
    Made my very first entry.

    Some background: It's the Terran Empire, in a MU. A different one than depicted in Enterprise or DS9, as the Terrans weren't Evil Stupid, and so Spock's reforms - the main one being the ending of promotion-by-backstabbery - didn't cause the Emprie's complete decline and enslavement. There's more to it, but that will be enough to understand this story.
    I got MU from the use of Terra, but it wasn't overdone at all, nice and subtle :) And I could definitely picture the scene and the Ferengi trying to keep things under control, an awesome entry :)
  • ironphoenix113ironphoenix113 Member Posts: 0 Arc User
    edited December 2012
    @marcus

    Thanks for the compliment! :) I read yours too, and I've got to say, you've got a real talent yourself.

    @theroyalfamily

    Really clever! I was rather confused by your story until I read your explanation. I can't wait to read more!

    A couple things I feel I should explain about mine:
    First, yes Bryan is actually the XO (well, one of two XOs actually) in the fleet that I'm in.
    Second, the AI (Athena, which shares the name of the ship) is actually a full AI, completely self-aware and capable of independent thought and emotion. She controls the ships point defense turrets, makes adjustments to the ship's power systems as needed among other things that no crewman could handle quickly enough.
    Th rest of the story should be fairly self-explanatory (especially the part at the end with the ring ;))
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  • marcusdkanemarcusdkane Member Posts: 7,439 Arc User
    edited December 2012
    ironphoenix113 wrote: »
    @marcus

    Thanks for the compliment! :) I read yours too, and I've got to say, you've got a real talent yourself.
    You're very welcome, and likewise, thankyou, it was fun to write, any particular favorite parts?
    ironphoenix113 wrote: »

    A couple things I feel I should explain about mine:
    First, yes Bryan is actually the XO (well, one of two XOs actually) in the fleet that I'm in.
    Second, the AI (Athena, which shares the name of the ship) is actually a full AI, completely self-aware and capable of independent thought and emotion. She controls the ships point defense turrets, makes adjustments to the ship's power systems as needed among other things that no crewman could handle quickly enough.
    Th rest of the story should be fairly self-explanatory (especially the part at the end with the ring ;))
    Like the AI of Highguard ships, like Andromeda? I really like the idea :) Indeed, it got the message across nicely, and was just the right length to have the right impact :)
  • ironphoenix113ironphoenix113 Member Posts: 0 Arc User
    edited December 2012
    marcusdkane wrote: »
    You're very welcome, and likewise, thankyou, it was fun to write, any particular favorite parts?

    It's kind of hard to pick just one or two moments, but I must say, the beginning of Meliden's conversation with her mother was hilarious:D.
    marcusdkane wrote: »
    Like the AI of Highguard ships, like Andromeda? I really like the idea :) Indeed, it got the message across nicely, and was just the right length to have the right impact :)

    That's actually exactly where I got the idea from. Gives me a reason to use an "NX" designation for the Athena.

    EDIT: Oh, and I think Eve Myles would be perfect to portray her :D
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  • marcusdkanemarcusdkane Member Posts: 7,439 Arc User
    edited December 2012
    ironphoenix113 wrote: »
    It's kind of hard to pick just one or two moments, but I must say, the beginning of Meliden's conversation with her mother was hilarious:D.
    Thanks, I wanted to put her across as really Old School, yet out of touch enough to just 'not get' that Meliden actually has a life beyond a Welsh village :)
    ironphoenix113 wrote: »
    That's actually exactly where I got the idea from. Gives me a reason to use an "NX" designation for the Athena.
    Ahh, it works well, I like to think that the events of Andromeda, are simply the distant future of the Trekverse...
    ironphoenix113 wrote: »
    EDIT: Oh, and I think Eve Myles would be perfect to portray her :D
    I couldn't think of a 'more Welsh' actress, so she struck me as ideal, as although everyone sees Meliden as a Cardassian, she just thinks of herself as a Welsh girl :)
  • marcusdkanemarcusdkane Member Posts: 7,439 Arc User
    edited December 2012
    @ cmdrscarlet;
    This is not fair! This is clearly a mission where people're going to get their asses kicked... We need MORE :D
  • ironphoenix113ironphoenix113 Member Posts: 0 Arc User
    edited December 2012
    @cmdrscarlet

    I can't wait to read where this is going! Sounds like you've got an interesting plot set up!
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  • marcusdkanemarcusdkane Member Posts: 7,439 Arc User
    edited December 2012
    @ markusseikyo: A nice piece, a good reminder that Trek is all about the people, not the technobabble :)
  • markusseikyomarkusseikyo Member Posts: 10 Arc User
    edited December 2012
    marcusdkane wrote: »
    @ markusseikyo: A nice piece, a good reminder that Trek is all about the people, not the technobabble :)

    Thanks. I was trying to show that not everything is a battle or a drama. But even the little things make it just as special.
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  • cmdrscarletcmdrscarlet Member Posts: 5,137 Arc User
    edited December 2012
    Thanks everyone! It's my first outting here in RP.

    Honestly, I didn't plan on going further, but the requests has my mind as "a raging torrent, flooded with rivulets of thought, cascading into a waterfall of creative alternatives" ;)
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  • marcusdkanemarcusdkane Member Posts: 7,439 Arc User
    edited December 2012
    markusseikyo wrote: »
    Thanks. I was trying to show that not everything is a battle or a drama. But even the little things make it just as special.
    Very much so :)
  • ironphoenix113ironphoenix113 Member Posts: 0 Arc User
    edited December 2012
    @markusseikyo
    Sounds like your captain has an interesting year ahead of him! I can't wait to see where you're going to be taking yours!
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  • marcusdkanemarcusdkane Member Posts: 7,439 Arc User
    edited December 2012
    cmdrscarlet wrote: »
    Thanks everyone! It's my first outting here in RP.

    Honestly, I didn't plan on going further, but the requests has my mind as "a raging torrent, flooded with rivulets of thought, cascading into a waterfall of creative alternatives" ;)

    You must've planned more than that :D I like to take part in the challenges to stretch myself to 'write to a plan', rather than what I'd just write myself. Looking forwards to your next contribution :)
  • markusseikyomarkusseikyo Member Posts: 10 Arc User
    edited December 2012
    ironphoenix113 wrote: »
    @markusseikyo
    Sounds like your captain has an interesting year ahead of him! I can't wait to see where you're going to be taking yours!

    Actually this is a build up of my RP character in my fleet. So these snippets help me build his character up.
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  • ironphoenix113ironphoenix113 Member Posts: 0 Arc User
    edited December 2012
    markusseikyo wrote: »
    Actually this is a build up of my RP character in my fleet. So these snippets help me build his character up.

    That's actually one of the reasons I decided to start doing these about a month ago. It gives me an opportunity to develop my character beyond what's really feasible to do in-game.
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  • squatsaucesquatsauce Member Posts: 0 Arc User
    edited December 2012
    Ok. I added one. I think I did it right.
  • marcusdkanemarcusdkane Member Posts: 7,439 Arc User
    edited December 2012
    squatsauce wrote: »
    Ok. I added one. I think I did it right.

    An excellent read :) Thankyou for sharing, and welcome aboard :)
  • ironphoenix113ironphoenix113 Member Posts: 0 Arc User
    edited January 2013
    @squatsauce

    You did really well! Can't wait to read your next entry. :cool:
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  • cmdrscarletcmdrscarlet Member Posts: 5,137 Arc User
    edited January 2013
    @squatsauce

    I liked it and am also looking forward to more :)
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  • squatsaucesquatsauce Member Posts: 0 Arc User
    edited January 2013
    Thank for all the kind words. I'm not even sure where more would go, though I wouldn't mind writing some of the embarrassingly bad adventures of Commander Khas and his misanthropic crew.
  • marcusdkanemarcusdkane Member Posts: 7,439 Arc User
    edited January 2013
    squatsauce wrote: »
    Thank for all the kind words. I'm not even sure where more would go, though I wouldn't mind writing some of the embarrassingly bad adventures of Commander Khas and his misanthropic crew.

    That's the fun of these challenges, none of us know where the mission is going to take us, no chance to plan ahead :)
  • bortjinxbortjinx Member Posts: 397
    edited January 2013
    marcusdkane wrote: »
    That's the fun of these challenges, none of us know where the mission is going to take us, no chance to plan ahead :)

    Hell some of us don't even know how our Challenge entries are going to turn out when we start them, lol.

    I've gone for a touching, yet mysterious entry this time around.

    I hope you all like it :)
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  • cmdrscarletcmdrscarlet Member Posts: 5,137 Arc User
    edited January 2013
    @bortjinx

    I did not like your post ... I loved it!

    :)
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  • bortjinxbortjinx Member Posts: 397
    edited January 2013
    cmdrscarlet wrote: »
    @bortjinx

    I did not like your post ... I loved it!

    :)

    Thank you :D

    It's always good to know people enjoy reading your work :)
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  • ironphoenix113ironphoenix113 Member Posts: 0 Arc User
    edited January 2013
    @bortjinx

    Really well done! I really enjoy reading entries such as yours, they add a...human?...Trill?... element to the character.:)
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  • marcusdkanemarcusdkane Member Posts: 7,439 Arc User
    edited January 2013
    bortjinx wrote: »
    Hell some of us don't even know how our Challenge entries are going to turn out when we start them, lol.

    I've gone for a touching, yet mysterious entry this time around.

    I hope you all like it :)

    Touching and mysterious indeed, it brought a tear to my eye :)
  • bortjinxbortjinx Member Posts: 397
    edited January 2013
    Now that I've had a chance to read the entries so far for this challenge, I can say that once again we have a good selection of quality entries :)

    Welcome to the club Squat.. I think Khas is great :D
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