The Madmen of TianLong
casexx
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Hey guys, this is my first fan fiction for PWI. I've done several before for Bleach, Shaiya, 2 Moons and 9 Dragons and I've got a pretty good fan-base for all of them. This one is partial to the faction I've joined on Heaven's Tear, but I will be adding elements to it that everyone should be able to enjoy, keeping it rather humorous. Feel free to leave comments and for my buddies in TianLong, hope you enjoy!
The tavern was loud and raucous, with its patrons getting drunker by the hour. The tavern was never known for its hospitality or grace, but more for the fights that broke out and the owners recipe for Palo Amber, the greatest underground brew in all of Archosaur. Sure there were mass brewed beers and wines all over the land that claimed to be the best and their marketers would surely make you believe that the raptor urine you were drinking was the beer of kings, but everyone who tried Palo Amber was an instant fan and that was what kept the bar alive when at any time half of the regulars were in the overnight prisons for disorderly conduct. That was another successful attribute of Palo Amber that kept the tavern full; it got you drunk, real quick.
The tavern, aptly named Torgrin
Introduction
The tavern was loud and raucous, with its patrons getting drunker by the hour. The tavern was never known for its hospitality or grace, but more for the fights that broke out and the owners recipe for Palo Amber, the greatest underground brew in all of Archosaur. Sure there were mass brewed beers and wines all over the land that claimed to be the best and their marketers would surely make you believe that the raptor urine you were drinking was the beer of kings, but everyone who tried Palo Amber was an instant fan and that was what kept the bar alive when at any time half of the regulars were in the overnight prisons for disorderly conduct. That was another successful attribute of Palo Amber that kept the tavern full; it got you drunk, real quick.
The tavern, aptly named Torgrin
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Wow, so I guess there's a limit to how much I can put in one post. I'll get back to his one.0
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Sure there were mass brewed beers and wines all over the land that claimed to be the best and their marketers would surely make you believe that the raptor urine you were drinking was the beer of kings, but everyone who tried Palo Amber was an instant fan and that was what kept the bar alive when at any time half of the regulars were in the overnight prisons for disorderly conduct
This is a terrible sentence. Break it up and expand on your ideas. Right now its just one long run-on that loses focus.0 -
Wow, so I guess there's a limit to how much I can put in one post. I'll get back to his one.==/Senior QA Lead/==
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Actually, posting directly into the forums is horrible. Try Fanfiction.net They have a section for PWI now ^^ I have a fanfiction there and post updates in the thread I made every once in a while and people comment here as well as on the fanfiction site. Just an idea, it would probably be better.[SIGPIC][/SIGPIC]
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Kuratha - Heavens Tear wrote: »This is a terrible sentence. Break it up and expand on your ideas. Right now its just one long run-on that loses focus.
Not really. A few punctuation marks here and there would repair it.
Try this!
Sure there were mass brewed beers and wines all over the land that claimed to be the best; and their marketers would surely make you believe that the raptor urine you were drinking was the beer of kings. But everyone who tried Palo Amber was an instant fan and that was what kept the bar alive (when at any time half of the regulars were in the overnight prisons for disorderly conduct).
Tada! Expanding your ideas would wreck the comedic value! b:angry[SIGPIC][/SIGPIC]
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